Find someone to help me revise my composition, which kind person will help me revise my composition.

Xiao Jiang is a good god, I will ask you to change it if I have the opportunity. ==

Hee-hee, I'm still a primary school student,

Only love --- these two meanings are the same, overlapping. Replace it with love alone, or some other word.

Spring revives everything--- don't contain too many of the same words, mind changing it to --- it.

It's all as beautiful as a fairyland -- as if overlapped with as, remove as if or as. It's okay if you don't go.

Suddenly the hillside is no longer so dead and silent--- it is not smooth, change it, you can add a comma after the sudden.

Instead, there are a few faint shades of green--- dead silence to vitality, and the green is changed to vitality.

From time to time, there is --- overlap on one side. Remove one side or every now and then.

My heart was pounding, as if I was welcoming the arrival of the Spring Maiden--- the metaphor was inappropriate, changed to --- my heart pounding involuntarily. As if amazed at all this, I couldn't help but exclaim, "It's so beautiful! ”

Grass and flowers sway gently in the wind--- it is okay to be graceful, grass and flowers accompany the wind.

Seeing the arrival of spring--- spring is generally not to be seen, but to use --- to feel spring.

The red sun is slanting in the west, the night is approaching--- night can be changed to ---twilight, dusk.

Coupled with the slightly cool spring breeze in the evening; The breeze gently lifted the corners of the spring girl's clothes. The twilight view, -not smooth--- change --- again

can be removed" plus the slightly cool spring breeze in the evening; I tried to use the word intoxication to modify the last paragraph and the Kaidu paragraph, which is the one upstairs that is too vulgar.

The first sentence is a sick sentence: delete "only" or "only", and put the two together to repeat the meaning. Put all of them "I couldn't help but exclaim, 'It's so beautiful!'

Delete it, it's too vulgar, it's like a schoolboy essay....In the second paragraph, except for the first "Spring Girl", the others are changed to "her".

Change the second "so beautiful" to really beautiful or something. It is common not to use a sentence structure repeatedly in an article, because it will make the language seem inflexible and unnew (unless it is to be emphasized). And then let the language be more concise, and the rest is very good, and the language is beautiful.

The ending stays on topic. At the beginning, I wrote that my heart only dances with the spring, so that it can echo from beginning to end.

The heart dances with the spring.

All year round, I love the spring of the warbler singing and dancing. In the spring, everything comes back to life, and everything is as beautiful as a fairyland.

Look, the spring girl walked towards the world with light steps, carrying a basket of flowers, and dragging a seven-colored colored dress. The spring girl walked through the barren hillside and sprinkled the seeds of hope, and a few faint shades of green appeared on the hillside; With that spring mood, the spring girl walked to the side of the river, the jasper-like river, sang the song "Bang Lala" and ran all the way to the distance; The spring girl danced happily, while also swaying the "light of life" in the flower basket from time to time. Suddenly, the flowers bloomed, the tender green grass sprung up like mushrooms after a rain, and the animals also woke up from their slumber to enjoy this beautiful feast.

The spring girl said goodbye to the countryside and walked towards the city again. Along the way, grass and flowers swayed gently in the wind, excited for the arrival of spring.

Seeing the arrival of spring, all the old and the young took off their heavy cotton clothes and changed into relaxed casual clothes. Playing, enjoying, chatting, sighing. Looking at the spring girl in her eyes, the corners of her mouth couldn't help but rise.

In the evening, the spring girl was in a reverie with the flowing water and the spring grass, when suddenly the east wind brought the sound of birds. The birdsong in spring is refreshing. At this time - the red sun is slanting in the west, the night is approaching, and the spring breeze is slightly cool in the evening; The breeze gently lifted the corners of the spring girl's clothes.

I couldn't help but exclaim, "It's so beautiful!" "Looking at all this, how can my heart not dance with the spring?

Briefly modified the point, it is recommended to write the scenery changes first, from flowers and trees, to the river, the small fish and shrimp in the river ......Characters are written less. Also, don't express your emotions yourself, and integrate your feelings into the scenery).