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1. Proper selection of materials. The author carefully selected two pictures to portray, one is a joint trip to Beijing, and the other is a group reading a full moon night, the selection of materials is close to the life of students, and the content is real and substantial. For junior high school students who are about to leave, these past events are indeed worth recalling and recalling.

This is where this article is most successfully written.

In an instant, the moonlight was like water, spilling into every corner of the classroom. More than a dozen people sat at the table by the window, watching the golden full moon. The moon that day was surprisingly large, clear and clear, and it made people forget the exhaustion of body and mind for a moment.

Even if no one can accompany us to learn anymore - and look at the bright moon outside the window, accompanied by the moonlight, no matter how hard the days are, there are no regrets. This passage is concise, vivid, and unforgettable to read.

Disadvantages: At the end of the article, there is no focus on why the past is worth recalling, which feels clever.

1. The selection of materials is typical and the context is clear. The author cites three sentences from the Book of Songs as subheadings, and respectively leads to three short stories about family, friendship and teacher love, which are close to the real life of middle school students, and can show the author's true feelings. Each part ends with three sentences: "At that moment, I tasted the sweetness and beauty of family affection", "At that moment, I tasted the sincere mellow fragrance of friendship", and "At that moment, I tasted the rich fragrance of teacher's love", pointing out the reasons why the three past events can be recalled, with a clear context and a smooth atmosphere.

2 The language is vivid and full of literary brilliance, especially the opening "the cherries of the past are red again, and the plantain is green again", which uses the famous sentence of Jiang Jie, a lyricist in the late Song Dynasty, "The streamer is easy to throw people, the red cherries are red, and the plantain is green", which can be called ingenious and shows the author's good language skills.

Disadvantages: Although the three subheadings of the article are pleasing to the eye, they only have a certain connection between the connotation of the poem and the examples written.

1 The theme is clear and the material is appropriate. The title of the article highlights the point that the author wants to express and fits the main idea of the material being given. The author chooses typical examples of Yan Hui, Liu Wei (5 pages of materials in the 12th issue of this journal, editor's note), Wang Sujing (5 pages of materials in the 12th issue of this journal, editor's note) and others as arguments, both ancient and modern, which not only takes into account the collocation of classic materials and current materials, but also focuses on new materials, which reflects the flexibility and ingenuity of the author's use of materials, and shows the author's broad vision and rich accumulation on weekdays.

2. The structure is rigorous and the context is clear. The beginning summarizes Thomas's deeds in a concise manner, puts forward an argument, and then leads the whole article with a sentence "Reading all the ancient and modern, Chinese and foreign, those who can be positive and optimistic in adversity will become a great tool", and make specific arguments, and the end echoes the beginning, reinforcing the argument again, and the whole text is clearly structured, organized, and completed in one go.

Disadvantages: The language in some places is not accurate and fluent enough, such as the opening "so understand--have to be positive and optimistic, success in hand", it is better to say "so understand-positive and optimistic, is the driving force of success", the expression is more accurate.

That's what it doesn't mean.

Commenting on an essay is to summarize the article first, and then talk about the advantages and disadvantages of the article.

1.This sentence uses anthropomorphic rhetorical techniques to vividly portray the eagerness, anxiety, and mood of the mother duck.

2.This sentence is the psychological activity of the mother duck, and it writes out the anxious and intelligent heart of the mother duck, so that the reader also feels anxious about the mother duck.

3.This sentence writes the scene of the harmonious coexistence of humans and animals, and the drivers involuntarily give way to the ducklings, how touching!

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1. "Coaxing" shows its kindness and enthusiasm.

2. Psychological and action descriptions, vivid and vivid.

3. Detailed description, accurate and expressive.

First attempt.

Bold attempts, let people hone their courage, interesting attempts, make people ecstatic, failed attempts, unforgettable, and successful attempts, people benefit a lot, that attempt, I still remember vividly.

When I was a child, I once went to my brother's house to play during the Spring Festival, and as soon as I entered the door, I saw a few boxes of firecrackers on the coffee table. "I've never played with firecrackers.

I said. "Then go quickly, I'll teach you. ”

When I got downstairs, I saw my brother holding a lighter in one hand and a firecracker in the other, skillfully lit the firecracker, and then calmly threw it into the distance. My brother asked me to release it, and I said, "I don't dare to let it go."

My brother attracted me to me, so he cut the firecracker through the middle with scissors and lit it again. This time, it was not a "bang", but a splash of stars. Now I took the initiative to ask my brother for one, and then nervously turned on the lighter, carefully lit the firecracker, and threw it away.

Then they waited for the firecrackers to blow up. After two or three minutes, there was no ** sound of firecrackers. If I looked closely, I threw it away before I clicked it, and my brother came over to teach me:

You don't have to be afraid, it's never too late to throw it away after seeing it, the key is to calm down and not panic. After saying that, he demonstrated it himself. This time, I calmed down, and did as my brother had taught, and I saw that the fuse was lit, and then I threw the firecracker out in a hurry, only to see it explode after drawing a graceful arc in the air.

I did it! Only dare to try, there will be a day when the fruits of victory bloom, as long as you dare to try, you will make life more brilliant, only dare to try, in order to go to the next level!

Trying is a compulsory course in life, in every attempt, know how to absorb the truth, then, this attempt is very successful!

Once, Liu Bei asked Sima Hui for advice. Sima Hui said: "Fulong, phoenix chicks, you have to settle the world."

Fulong is Wolong Zhuge Liang, and Phoenix Chick is Pang Tong. Soon, Xu Shu took refuge in Liu Bei and recommended Zhuge Liang. Liu Bei Sixian was thirsty, so he led Guan Yu and Zhang Fei to visit Longzhong, but he didn't see Zhuge Liang the first two times, and only saw Zhuge Liang for the third time.

This is the "Three Visits to the Thatched House" that we learned last semester. Since then, Zhuge Liang left Longzhong and began the second half of his life as a horseman.

Zhuge Liang has used many strategies in his life, and there is a plan called the radical method, which is very powerful. I saw this story in the book "Historical Wisdom", which made me understand Zhuge Liang better. The story goes like this:

At that time, Zhuge Liang, Xu Shu and Pang Tong were all studying in a private school, and at the end of the semester, Mr. raised a difficult problem, that is, to get out of this room with his consent at three o'clock in the afternoon. Many students were there trying to figure it out, some said there was a fire outside, others said they wanted to relieve ......But the gentleman ignored them. Xu Shu handed over a letter saying that her mother was sick and asked for permission to visit her.

The gentleman said, "At three o'clock in the afternoon, I am standing on one side." Pang Tong said, "Sir, I can't do it if you want me to go from the inside to the outside with your consent, but if you can let me go outside, I can come with your consent."

The gentleman said, "Pang Tong is clever, standing aside. And Zhuge Liang fell asleep, Mr. was very angry when he saw it, and when it was almost three o'clock in the afternoon, Zhuge Liang suddenly woke up, and he dragged Mr. 's clothes and scolded:

What kind of person are you, do your best to solve some difficult questions, and pay me back my tuition for three years! The gentleman was enraged: "Xu Shu and Pang Tong pulled this unscrupulous son out."

When he got outside, Zhuge Liang picked up a very thick wooden stick and knelt down in front of Mr. and said, "I'm sorry, I offended Mr. just now for the sake of leaving the teacher, please punish Mr." The gentleman suddenly came to his senses and said:

You're ready to go! "Xu Shu and Pang Tong can also be out of the school! "Sir, it makes sense.

The article is smooth, natural, elegant, and the beginning and end keys are particularly good, and the rhetorical manuscript techniques such as metaphors and comparisons are mostly used, which adds color to the article but does not appear pretentious.

However, it is recommended to be more specific in the case and not to draw in vain.

The article is smooth, natural, elegant, and the beginning and end are particularly excellent, using metaphors, comparisons and other rhetorical techniques to add color to the article but not contrived. However, when the case in the circle is troubled, it is recommended to be more specific, not to describe the empty hole, and the title "Choosing a Ruler Brother Choose" should be mentioned in the orange cover article, which is generally a good work.

The article is like flowing water, since the spring is cautious, elegant, the beginning and the end are especially judged to be excellent, and more rhetorical techniques such as metaphors and comparisons are used to add color to the article but not artificial. However, the examples in Hengsen's reform suggest that they should be more specific, not the white description of the space hole, and the title "choice" should be mentioned in the text, and! 1233211234567！