An essay is a small feeling, please comment

But in 2008, the proudest year in the history of our Chinese people, the 25th Olympic Games will be held in Beijing? 25th?

29th Oh.

Yes, there is a master style!!

In fact, writing ideas and writing are still okay. But it seems that many of the descriptions are too bloated. Make your casual phrases too abrupt.

Since there is such a good article and ideas. The best rewards. Isn't such a topic too popular?

The main idea is that the vultures themselves are free from their dependence on their parents in the winter and fly high on their own. Is this a gift from the winter or an honor that I earned myself in the winter? Or is it a new life?

Tell me about the sentence you didn't write correctly: The sound of winter is low-key Voice-low-key? The head with a pinch of brown feathers slowly rises Your subject is the head head rises?

Vultures have a kind of momentum. Raise Rise Could it be a little more precise? The cool breeze of late autumn resolutely walked resolutely and resolutely.

Such a description is too cumbersome. Or resolutely. Or decisively.

It let out a few wails, like a reluctance to autumn, or a blank feeling for the uninvited winter. Change it to it mournful - like reluctance to autumn, or confusion about winter. Simple.

Your latter's description of winter makes your autumn and winter sentences asymmetrical, and you can find some ink added when you read it. The description is beautiful. The mournful cry is very popular and vernacular.

Not beautiful. Let's talk about it. It's good to change.

Read more on your own. A beautiful essay doesn't have to be written in many words. Make a lot of descriptions.

As long as you find the right and exact words to describe it.

The author uses vivid visuals to express the process of the little vulture growing up, giving people a fresh and thought-provoking feeling. Let the reader transform gorgeously when looking at the article, and become a sensible young man and little girl.

The writing is very good! But I think the beautiful sentence "The sound of winter is very low-key, a little hoarse" does not make it more beautiful in the latter sentence! There is also a sentence "the snow flakes on the body of the bucket" is very sick!

Is there such a saying for "snowflakes"? Why not say "winter dust".

Reading "Anne of Green Gables" has a feeling.

I'm a dream girl, a dream girl. There are laughter and tears in the dream, the waves are terrifying, the sea and the sky are wide in the dream, let me wander, and I am free and unrestrained ......in the dream"Listening to this song "Dream Girl", I opened the world-famous book "Anne of Green Gables" to feel Anne's dreamy years. Unconsciously, I was deeply attracted by this girl with full imagination and rich feelings.

After reading the whole book, I was surprised to find that Anne seemed to be my shadow. She is kind, straightforward, intelligent, and diligent, and our greatest resonance is to love fantasy, and her head is full of strange ideas, and she has a dream year that belongs to us. A tree full of flowers is the "Snow Queen"; A small shallow pond is a poetic "willow pond" ......Although fantasy brings Anne some unpleasant life "episodes", she loves fantasy as always, pursues romance, and pursues all good things.

In life, like little Anne, I like to fantasize wildly. In the boring and busy study life, use fantasy to create your own happiness, and use fantasy to depict the blueprint of life.

I once fantasized that I was a traveler, always with a backpack on my shoulder, traveling all over the world without worry, that kind of free and easy is like the "poet fairy" Li Bai, romantic and heroic. I can sit quietly on the golden sand, let the blue water tickle my feet, let the fine sand flow slowly through the palms of my hands, leaving traces of my smile. I can also go to the Garden of Eden, see the wonders of the fairy garden there, and dance with Eve, and confide in him ...... heart

The dream is full of flowers, and white clouds are everywhere. In the dream, the sun is shining, and the road is long. In my dreams, I was unrestrained.

Flower fields, coasts, and castles surround me on all sides; The world, the universe, and the sky hug me tightly; The stars, the moon, the sun, laugh with me ......Let's all be a child with a dream, let go of our beautiful dreams, spend our happy dream years, and achieve a hopeful future!

Dawmir's cleverness lies in the fact that he understands that failure is more expensive, what others can't, he can, and what others can't cross, he can leapfrog and turn other people's failures into his own wealth.

It is recommended that you change this sentence to:

On the road of entrepreneurship, people's starting point is the same, no one is a stupid person, and they are not necessarily much smarter than anyone, why some people can succeed if they fail, because he understands that the price of failure is higher, others can't do it, he can't do it, others can't cross it, he can leapfrog, and turn other people's failures into their own wealth. And those who can't cross it can only live in darkness!

It's okay overall, but it's better to add some of your own feelings.

The number of words is about the same, but it's too written! But the general topic is still well written!

Overall beautiful. But I haven't been to the grasslands, so I don't know if there are magpies and frogs and lakes everywhere. Or are the countryside here two different places?

Educate elementary school students.

My language skills are not good.

I am a passer-by in your story, leaving traces of my visit here, love is a painful story, in the story, there are thousands of people with you and his past, missing, it is a lifetime, but it is always missed, when you meet again, he doesn't know you, you are still stupidly looking at the memory that has been mixed with years thousands of times, perhaps, in the end, it only became a wound.

Just like a butterfly, nostalgia for flowers is also a tragedy.

Although the language of this article is beautiful, it lacks a theme, is it mainly about your injuries or youth without regrets?

There are many good words and sentences, the content is specific, and a few people have feelings, and this essay is of a medium level.

Tea body, oh, I listen to my friends, oh, ah, I have a head i, I am an aunt.