How about commenting on my poetry and giving some opinions

I know you're doing it as much as possible to make your poems readable and catchy.

But some words, though sometimes reused, can add emotion.

But the word "soaring," I don't think it's so appropriate in every sentence.

And your ranking doesn't give the impression that it's catchy to read!!

In fact, we are very close to death. 2012）

If the Mayan prophecy is correct.

Then I'd think.

What dreams remain unfulfilled.

What wish has not been fulfilled.

What regrets can't be done.

Yes. I'm not reconciled.

is not willing to live a life of inaction.

is not willing to be satisfied with his youth that has just begun.

is not willing to settle for his fleeting life.

Yes. I was scared.

I don't think many people knew they were going to die tomorrow.

You can also drink afternoon tea happily.

** Busy crowds on the road.

Thinking about those vulgar desires.

If tomorrow will be the end of the world.

Money, power, and status will all be reduced to dung.

Disappear into this world with the apocalypse.

Become a tiny speck of dust in the Milky Way.

Including those so-called noble loves.

And those so-called great sentiments.

I'm glad I'm alive, at least for now.

Let's be honest: the poem lacks meaning, which means that the poem is written too bluntly. I'm also a lover, and in my opinion, the soul of a poem should be set off by the meaning.

You must have just learned to write poetry!! This poem feels like a simple patchwork of comparisons. It is recommended that you can learn to use some imagery when writing poems in the future, hehe!

You see, this will not work!

I want to be a soaring eagle with a pair of strong wings and soar in the sky.

I want to be a soaring eagle, with a sky, and the earth as my hunting ground.

I want to be a soaring eagle because I want to be free and fly!

The whole article is imposing, majestic, emotional, intense, rigorous, sharp, logical, interlocking, layer by layer, straight to the theme, reading the text is vigorous, surging like a river flowing, majestic and straight down.

The language of the article is colloquial, easy to understand, easy to understand, thorough and clear in reason, small to big, and full of profound significance. Strive to be concise and summarize in the choice of words and sentences, and read with a bright rhythm, catchy, and endless aftertaste.

The article uses analogical reasoning, repeated interrogation, and progression layer by layer. The debate is rigorous and fluent, the tone of the writing is like a river, and the language is plain and shallow, accurate and concise.

The article is logical, well-organized, and thorough. The emotions are unrestrained, the imagination is peculiar, the sentence structure is lively, and the thoughts are profound.

The article is well-conceived, the discussion is detailed and thorough, good at rebutting the correct argument, good at standing and breaking, good at using ordinary examples as arguments, using metaphors to explain in simple terms, concretizing and visualizing abstract truths, and making profound truths easy to understand.

The words are concise and concise, the sentence structure is neat, the rhyme is smooth, and it is catchy to read. The style of writing is warm and lively, the words are beautiful and majestic, and the artistic conception is far-reaching.

The article is unpretentious, but it is honest and long, and it gets straight to the point and shows the core point. Use metaphors, vividly and vividly explain the truth, the whole structure is rigorous, and the opinions are naturally drawn.

As a writer of poetry, you must be a reader of poetry. As a poetry reader, it can be a potential poetry writer.

Artistic creation is often hidden but not revealed, "the intention is ten points, and the words are three points". You should develop a word-by-word taste of the language, and grasp the expressive skills and artistic conception of the work. Since the subjective emotions of the author are infiltrated in the poems, we must be good at "appreciating the feelings" when appreciating and analyzing, so as to "know the meaning".

Phi Wen Guan poetry is not only about dredging words, but also about grasping the emotional connotation contained in the artistic image. In order to improve the accuracy of answering questions, special attention should be paid to the following points:

Pay attention to the topic. The title often reveals the time, place, object, event, theme, etc., which is an important entry point for interpreting the poem.

Pay attention to the author. Most of the poems and essays selected for the college entrance examination are works that can represent the author's creative style. For example, Li Bai's romantic poems, Wang Wei's landscape idylls of "poems with paintings, and poems in paintings", Su Shi and Xin Qiji's bold words, Dai retro patriotic poems, and so on.

Pay attention to the annotations. The context of the writing suggests the content of the thought; The relevant words and phrases imply allusions or artistic conceptions; Introducing the author hints at the writing style or the background of the era.

Pay attention to the subject matter. The farewell poem is to tell each other, praise each other, or tell the feelings of parting, or narrate the thoughts after parting. Epic poems and nostalgic poems are a tribute to ancient people or things, or to remember the sages, to admire the ancients, or to express their desire to make meritorious contributions, or to pour out their feelings about the untimely life, or to use the past to satirize the present, lamenting the prosperity of the past and the decline of the present.

Biansai's poems describe the life of the Biansai army, or express the bitter and cold living environment of the border land, or the magnificent scenery of the Biansai, or the dissatisfaction with the reckless rulers. Homesick poems, poems of resentment and detention poems focus on expressing the longing for relatives, the tenderness, sorrow and sadness of women, the poignancy and bitterness of the wanderer's life in a different place, and the longing for relatives in his hometown.

Pay attention to the imagery. The beautiful artistic conception of classical poetry is inseparable from real, vivid and vivid imagery. Imagery is the thing that fuses the author's thoughts and feelings in the poem. Grasping imagery is the basic premise for appreciating the language and form of poetry, and evaluating the emotion and content of poetry.

Attention to detail. Through the details, you can explore the emotions contained in the poem.

Pay attention to the "love language". The lyrical methods in ancient poetry can be divided into direct lyricism and indirect lyricism, direct lyricism is direct lyricism, indirect lyricism can be divided into lyricism by borrowing scenery (allegorical in the scene, scene blending), lyricism by borrowing things, and borrowing things to allude to people (supporting things, words, symbolic techniques) and so on. The "love language" here refers to the words that express the heart directly, which is the finishing touch in the poem.

This material was found when I was studying before.,I hope it helps.。。。

From the meaning of the poem, the author, the environment in which the author lived at the time, the historical background, the words, etc.