Hello, I am a foreign student, please revise the following article

Last semester, a classmate transferred to our school. On the first exam, he got the lowest score. However, he improved his study efficiency, and in the second exam, he became the first in the school.

The teacher encouraged him, and his friends envied him. But he still learns with an open mind.

Today is my sister's wedding. When preparing for the wedding, the postman brought a large box to my sister. My sister opened the box and started crying. It turned out that the box was given by my mother, and the box contained our family's **.

Last semester, an open-minded classmate transferred to our school. On the first exam, he got the lowest score. However, before the second exam, he improved his study efficiency.

Finally, the results came out, and he was the first in the school. His teachers encouraged him to work hard, so his friends were envious of him.

Today is my sister's wedding. In preparation for the wedding, the postman brought a large box for his sister. My sister started crying when she opened the box. It turned out that the box was sent by my mother, and it was all our family's **.

This semester, a student transferred to our class. In the first exam, his results were not ideal, but he had a correct learning attitude to improve learning efficiency, and in the second time, he achieved a good score in the top 10 of the class, and the teacher encouraged him in front of the class, and the students were very envious. However, this classmate is very humble and does not want to be as proud as the class leader.

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Last semester, a classmate transferred to our school. On the first exam, he got the lowest score. However, on the second exam, he improved his study efficiency.

Finally, the results came out, he was the first in the school, his friends were envious of him, and the teacher encouraged him to be humble.

First of all, I welcome you to learn Chinese, and I wish you a happy life and study! After reading this article, I think your Chinese is great, there are only some minor problems, I believe your level will get higher and higher! Here's the revised article:

I was born in 1990. My hobby as a child was playing the piano, and I continued to play it from the age of six to ten. I also like ice skating, and my dad would accompany me to the paddy fields to skate in the winter.

When I was in high school, my mom taught me how to swim, but I didn't like swimming very much. Later, when my health was not very good, I swam for an hour every day, and I felt that swimming was good for my health. These days, I'm very interested in Chinese, so I study Chinese twice a week with a teacher.

I came to Shanghai in August last year. Last year, I didn't want to learn Chinese because I found it difficult to pronounce Chinese. But I still want to persevere, so I read a pronunciation book first, and then watch "youku".

This year, I am used to living in Shanghai, and I usually want to talk to Chinese more, so I started studying at Donghua University in March. My study time is four hours a day from Monday to Friday, for a total of 20 hours. I study two courses, the Speaking class and the General class.

After four months (one semester) of studying, I stopped going to class because it was sleepy to go to school every morning. ’

I was born in 1990. As a child, my hobby was playing the piano, from the age of six to the age of ten. I also love ice skating, and my dad would accompany me to the paddy fields in the winter.

When I was in high school, my mom let me learn to swim. But I'm not particularly into swimming. When I'm not in good shape, I swim for an hour a day because I know that the swim team is in good health.

Recently, I have been very interested in Chinese, and I studied Chinese twice a week with a teacher. I came to Shanghai last August, but I didn't want to learn Chinese anymore because I found it difficult to pronounce Chinese. Later, I read a pronunciation book first, and also read "youku.""。

Now I am used to being in Shanghai, because I want to chat with Chinese, so I started studying at Donghua University in March. From Monday to Friday, there are four hours a day, a total of 20 hours a week. I studied two subjects, the Speaking class and the General course.

But after a semester, I didn't go to study because it would be difficult to get up early in the morning and go to school.