Help revise a Tibetan poem can be posted .

First of all, I feel that your "Yaoyao" is not good, it sounds like this girl makes you feel unreachable and bad; Secondly, although 'Xi' can be both in the middle of a sentence and at the end of a sentence, this style is not very pleasant to read, and it is better to use ordinary verses.

Yin's beauties are more slender, and Dantong hides her face.

Dan's heart is fiercer than the fire, and I want to ride the wind to admire and beg.

Love is deeply looking forward to harmony, are you willing to join hands to cross the Magpie Bridge?

Actually, brother, you wrote very well, and everyone upstairs is also very good, and there is nothing more to scrutinize.

Finally, I wish you all the best! Hehe.

The word 兮 is a particle meaning "ah" and "呀", so it can only be used at the end of a sentence. It is indeed a bit nondescript to put it in the sentence, and it is recommended not to use this "Xi" word at all.

Yin's beauties are more slender, and Dantong is pale.

Dan's heart is full of fire, and I want to ride the wind to admire and beg.

Love deep double flying birds, are you willing to join hands with the old white-headed man?

Yin's beauty looks at the road away, and Dantong hides her beautiful appearance.

Dan's heart is like a fire, and I want to take advantage of the wind.

Love sincerely asks the girl, would you like to join hands with the sunset?

Xi is removed, the word is slightly changed, and the original meaning of hugging the Lord cannot be changed.

Yin's beauty dreams are far away, and Dantong hides her face.

Dan's heart is like a fire, and I want to ride the wind to ask for it.

Love is deep, good Chinese girl, are you willing to grow old together?

Yin's beauty is far away, and Dantong is bright.

Dan's heart is on fire, and I want to ride the wind to admire it.

Love is deep and the woman is good.

Would you like to join hands with the old man?

That's fine!!

Yin's demeanor is nine nights, and Danqing is also difficult to describe.

If Dan can understand my intentions, I will send colorful clouds to accompany the sunset.

What more can you ask for a lover, can you and I grow old?

Hehe, the little brother sacrificed the ugly ---

Yin's mansion looks far away, and his face is like a glow.

Dan's heart is obsessed with the sun, and I want to ride the wind to try to be higher.

Love is deeply looking forward to harmony, you and I join hands to cross the Magpie Bridge?

Persistently pursue good quality.

Zigong is deeply connected.

Yu Chao is straightforward and loves beauty.

The hands are full of benevolence and righteousness.

True love Pan An Xiaofuxiang.

Caring for the elderly and their wives.

No regrets, infatuation, eternal love.

Change the world and wish it far.

During the Lantern Festival, the peach heart is specially ordered to hide the head (rhyme) and the tail of the small text to congratulate. May there be lovers who will hide their heads for a long time: the hand of the son will not change.

Peach Heart: Pan Renchao has always been in love with Xiaoling.

Yun (rhyme) tail: good fortune is always with each other.

An Zaishi is a handsome man.

Benevolence, righteousness and morality are exemplary.

Super] people have perseverance and attainments.

1] Deeply in love.

Straightforward to show goodwill.

Love] The taste of love is extraordinarily sweet.

It's really heart-wrenching.

Small] ingenious and exquisite.

Age] children accompany him to a hundred years.

Pan Ruo rusty iron sinks axe and looks at dreams.

Zhiren seeks heaven and earth and thinks ethereal.

I can't understand the detachment of the mind.

I don't know the way back in this life.

Only the boat to the straight bridge Sijingming.

It's hard to laugh when you talk about love.

Dream back to the person you like for the New Year.

Wait to be clothed in brocade and curtain, and the smaller it is.

Let's go back to the beautiful people.

How many people do you see outside Pan An's dream?

Benevolence and humility are the most qing.

The otherworldly gentleman's heart is there, and the love of the past is chasing together.

The little scholar will be ambitious, and the young crane will be pine and think of the year.

If you are a student, you should also focus on your studies, and your relationship needs academic support. It is better to make the poem yourself, and it is more sincere, even if it is simple and simple.

Today, Fangyan is drunk with a few cups, and she was born in the red dust and flowing water.

I drink old wine to break the loneliness, and I am happy with the spring night supper.

Set a tour to enjoy the warm spring and enjoy the beauty, and the warm wind blows for the beauty.

Love through the spring and autumn eternal love, you will be accompanied by a lifelong fragrance.