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My extracurricular life is like a colorful picture, with eagles catching chickens, cats catching mice, and learning to fry soybeans ......One of the things that attracted me the most was playing badminton. One day, my uncle and I were playing badminton. My uncle sent a perfect ball, and I saw it fly smoothly.
I aimed at the direction and hit hard, and the shuttlecock flew into the sky as if it had wings. In the face of my "high-altitude" ball, my uncle was confident, saw the opportunity, and received a beautiful return ball. The shuttlecock seemed to be playing with it, and it was supposed to go to the right, but it suddenly turned around and moved straight to the left, causing me to not only miss the ball, but also fall hard.
Then, when it was my turn to serve, I sent a ball that shook from side to side, making it difficult for my uncle to tell the direction, but the sharp-eyed uncle still received the ball with great skill. The ball seemed to freeze and fell in mid-air. Yes!
Playing badminton is so much fun! Not only does it exercise the body, but it also trains people's reflexes. I love my extracurricular life, it makes my childhood life full of joy.
Famous teacher's comments: The little author used happy language to show us his happiness of playing badminton, it can be seen that she is a little girl who loves sports, which is very good, and the charming language also transmits that happiness to readers. The theme of the article is clear, the structure is very clear, and the sentences are smooth, which well expresses the thoughts and feelings of the little author.
The paragraph level of the article is clear and clear, and the beginning directly points to the topic, leading to a kind of "extracurricular life" of his hobby, and then the little author describes in detail the experience of playing ball with his "uncle" in kind and natural language, with a complete narrative and vivid words. At the end of the article, the author made a small summary, describing the benefits of playing badminton and pointing out the center of the article. "My extracurricular life is like a colorful picture" should be changed to "My extracurricular life is like a colorful picture", and the meaning of "badminton seems to be playing" is not very clear, so it should be changed to "badminton seems to be teasing us", and "the ball seems to be frozen" should be changed to "the ball seems to be frozen".
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My extracurricular life.
Since I was a child, I have heard such a sentence: "There is a ** house in the book, and there is Yan Ruyu in the book." "I thought that when I opened the book, there would be ** falling, and there would be jade falling. So I pestered my mom to buy me books.
It wasn't until I opened the first book that I realized I was stupid because there was nothing I was looking for. But I "nibbled" on the book alone, and after a long time, I realized that I fell in love with the book and liked to smell the faint smell of ink. Perhaps from this point on, books became an indispensable part of my extracurricular life.
The bell was rattling, and with the wind blowing gently in the middle of the night, I nestled under the covers and flipped through the works of the famous American writer Hemingway: "The Old Man and the Sea".
A simple story, an ordinary old man, an ordinary big marlin, has a seemingly ordinary and extraordinary experience in the vast sea. In this tragic story (Zhong), a "heroic figure" is reflected - the old man Santiago. When the old man dragged his loot to fight the shark, my heart couldn't help but be shaken.
Man must not be defeated! These succinct words made me seem to hear the sound of the old man fighting against the waves......
Seeing this, I stopped and looked at the mountain of homework books on the desk, the levels still waiting for me to solve. But I gave up, I surrendered to them, I was defeated by them. No!
It shouldn't be this way! Man must not be defeated! At this time, I have returned to my old self, so vigorous.
I left the bed and sat down at the table. A little yellow light illuminates all the topics and illuminates the bright ...... in my heart
The smell of the book made me feel indescribable. Every time I picked up a copy, the taste changed. Each book has its own language.
"Romance of the Three Kingdoms" is full of the bloody smell of the battlefield, full of pride, and the breath of the battlefield. "Stars" is a motherly breath, and the emotions of Grandma Bingxin's mother's heart, make me think of "The Wanderer": the line in the mother's hand, and the wanderer's shirt is ......
There is a ** house in the book, and there is Yan Ruyu in the book. ”
Books bring me a vibrant sunny day, and books bring me a joyful and festive ......Books have enriched my extracurricular life and enriched my every day!
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