Can anyone help me revise this essay I wrote urgent!!!!! ）

I was infected by the author's sorrow and deleted; follow the (word) of his poems; (Lost) beautiful; Knowing that there is no way to recover the lost love; There is always a day when the flowers will wither and a day when they will wither; You're in love with it and delete; But it doesn't know that this love of yours is just a flash in the pan, (just) deleted, (short-lived) the same; (Qingqing's dream) of (Qingqing) beauty;

Xie is better than me, and I don't know where to start.

Sentimental sadness of nature, sentimental desolation of the sea Isn't the sea nature.

When I watched the trees being cut down and the wild animals being killed one by one, the artistic conception was diluted.

Therefore, there is no poem that I can't read, which is too absolute.

I'm saying from a reader's point of view, you write better than I do, and look at the changes for yourself.

The beginning of this poem was written after Li Qingzhao and her husband Zhao Mingcheng were far away, which embodies the author's deep affection that he can't bear to part, and it is a clever farewell lyrics. It's not for writing about the ephemerality of youth. It is recommended that you swap it out.

It is better to change it into a more well-known poem, like persuading the monarch to wear golden clothes in the past and persuading the monarch to take his youth. Flowers can be folded straight, do not wait for no flowers and empty branches. Also, the article is too scattered.

Although it can be written as prose, prose is also written by grasping a central idea, which is the so-called form and spirit. There are many sentences in the text that have nothing to do with the central idea. Don't pile up words and phrases for the sake of the beauty of the article.

The text is really too scattered, and it is difficult to grasp the center. I changed it, and there are too many abridgements, so I still recommend that you rewrite it.

It's a little too pretentious.,And there's no center.,It's very tiring to look at.。。。

Ocean. In my hometown, there is a blue sea, and it is a beautiful place. Whenever I have something to worry about, I always confide in the sea.

The sea is a good person to talk to, and when you tell him about your troubles, he will always respond to you with small waves one by one and comfort you.

When I'm bored, I sit on the beach and look out at the endless sea, the deep blue water with white waves rushing towards the shore in waves, sometimes with some beautiful shells; I put my feet in the sea, and the waves gently lapped my feet and took away the marks I had left on the sand, and the waves were layered on top of each other, as if to greet me. I stood up, the sea breeze blowing across my face, as if my mother was caressing me. Seagulls soar freely in the sky, chirping from time to time, adding a touch of life to the calm sea.

Looking at the calm sea, my heart calmed down all of a sudden, the sea has this kind of magic, soothing people's hearts, I love the sea the most......

This time, will you be prepared to disgrace the class because you can't speak well? ·· No, this competition can not only exercise our courage, but also exercise our mouth and lead to talent, isn't it the best of both worlds? ”

Can.. "Besides, you've loved reciting since you were a child, so be sure to seize the opportunity! ”

I raised my head and said confidently: "Hmm! ”

Go for it, we believe in you.