I have an essay for me to rate 5

The whole article is well written!

shows the grandmother's selfless love for the students; your admiration for your grandmother; You were influenced and nurtured by her to become a teacher!

The following two sentences are only said by your grandmother in front of you, and it feels unnatural! Unreal! Why not change the scene and place to show your grandmother's love for the students? ：

Grandma smiled and said, "What does it matter if you do something for the students and be cold?" ”

Grandma said, "You sleep, you have to go to school tomorrow, I don't prepare for class seriously, how can I give a lecture to students tomorrow?" ”

In my humble opinion!

It's not badly written, if only a few more things were added, and more good words and sentences can be used.

It's good, it's just a little more mental activity.

It's okay, I don't have enough mental description.

66 First of all, the article has a fatal wound, the topic of the article is somewhat vague and contrary to the optimistic main line.

Third, the article appears too empty and lacks sufficient support from reality.

Of course, the article is a clear expression of the feelings of a student living in a "world ruled by teachers".

So I hit 66.

70 points, I scored according to the level of the sixth grade. First of all, your essay is too exaggerated, you don't have demons, and the mysterious power tells you not to write, this place is not good, it should be that you remember some things such as computer games, toys, etc., you should give more examples to prove your point of view, some of the language is too extreme, and it would be better to add more famous quotes.

70 points, the whole text is a bit boring, we should give more examples, and less empty and abstract truths. There are also a few typos in it.

Hope it helps.

70 points, first of all, there are typos in it, and there are several places where related words are used incorrectly.

Secondly, the content in the article is empty, and it would be better if you wrote some examples to illustrate the reluctance to do homework.

Again, the language in the article is too bland.

Hope don't mind!

It's okay to write it, hehe, it's very good, but I think this essay can only score 95 to 98 points, and Fa Zheng is still a little short of 100 points

80 There are fewer examples, there are typos, and the content should be richer.