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Because I liked to eat more when I was a child!
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In 1963, when I was in my third year of junior high school, I wrote an essay called "A Portrait", which was written by a teacher who taught me plane geometry. He was very interesting in teaching and interesting in his life, so he thought that he was very interesting in writing this essay. On the recommendation of my Chinese teacher, this essay won an award in the Beijing Children's Essay Competition.
Of course, I'm happy. One day, the Chinese teacher brought me a thick notebook and said, "Your essay is about to be printed in a book, do you know who revised it for you?"
My eyes widened, a little inexplicable. "It's Mr. Ye Shengtao! The teacher handed me the big notebook and said, "
You can learn a lot from it if you look at how carefully Mr. Ye has revised it! ”
I opened the notebook and saw that there were 20 essays that won awards in this essay contest. I flipped to my essay and was stunned: the first thing that caught my eye was the red modified symbols and the small characters added after the changes, densely packed, and several pages were full of red circles, hooks, straight lines, and curves.
The essay was like a bloody and bandaged man who had undergone major surgery. When I got home, I carefully read Mr. Ye's revisions to my essay several times. The title "A Portrait" was changed to "A Portrait", and I immediately felt the accuracy of the words.
There are a lot of revisions in places like this, and there are also many places where long sentences are broken into short sentences. There was one place that I remember very clearly: "Why did you remove the cover from the geometry textbook?"
Mr. Ye changed it to: "Why did you remove the wrapping paper from the geometry textbook?" Delete the verb "package" in the original sentence to make the sentence clean and standardized.
It would be more accurate to change the word "book cover" to "book wrapping paper", because the book cover can be considered the cover of the book. I really benefited from it, watching the fire from the other side is not the same as being there after all. This not only made me see the various faults of my own writing, but also made me realize the arduousness of the literary career
Without great effort and meticulousness, it is difficult to achieve a great climate. Although I did not see Mr. Ye in person, I received his seriousness, peace and warmth from his correction, like a spring breeze.
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1.In my childhood, there were kind grandmothers, parents who loved "me", there were hardships that inspired "me" to grow up, and there was a hometown that nourished "me" and raised "me".
2.Reference: If you have set a goal, you should move forward bravely, overcome difficulties, and persistently move towards the goal.
3.This sentence uses the rhetorical technique of comparison to present the beauty of the water town in front of the reader, expressing the nourishment that the water town gives to "me". The three onomatopoeia vividly reproduce the scenes of activities such as rocking, stomping, and waterwheeling.
4.The language is beautiful and fits the topic.
5.It makes sense. Example: Consent. Suffering can make us lose and feel sad, but when we are uplifted, suffering becomes a valuable asset, inspiring us, giving us experience, and making life more perfect.
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Cao Wenxuan's childhood was not very happy, and he tried his best to do a lot of ups and downs.
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There are so many answers to reading about my childhood, I could have written a book about my own childhood, I just don't have time to learn it right now.
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Discover the answers to childhood reading, and there are many kinds of childhood reading, I don't know what type of answer you want to know? It is advisable to make your question clearer.
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My childhood is the most unforgettable for me, and it is the happy time of my life!
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What's the answer? Why don't you think for yourself and do it yourself. Is this to be plagiarized?
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Dad's violinist is so pitiful, the box hasn't been opened for so long after sawing.
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