For one Chinese essay, 60 points will be added.

I am a flower, an eye-catching flower in our home, even more inconspicuous in my city, I don't have the fragrance of roses, the wealth of peonies and even the vitality of sunflowers I'm just an ordinary member of them, I don't even appreciate my little prince, I can only talk to the grass next to me We are all ignored In the morning I soothed my lilac petals, and a big dew dripped on my body, hehe, early in the morning it was destined to be so fresh Just in this gap, I saw the sunflower next door seriously towards the east, I looked up and found that the orange sun was still coming, and a new day had come again In the morning, a butterfly came to say good morning to me and brought my pollen somewhere else, I was thinking, will they go **? Will you remember me? A rough praying mantis interrupted me while I was pondering, and he wanted to hurt my young flower stem I closed my eyes and waited for fate, but, after a while, nothing happened, and I looked up and saw that a human had saved me And he said, "What a beautiful flower!"

Is he talking about me? It turns out that praise will make life better And my problems were solved Then I was carefully taken away by the humans, and they carefully examined me, saying that I was a precious flower Ever after I was protected and lived a life that made the rose peony jealous But I found that I was not happy, I missed the little green next door, and I missed the cool dew

Ay! Why do today's elementary school students still rely on the Internet to write essays? (I'm also a schoolboy: I'm a good student).

lalalal, there is a cause, its nai, the year can be, so it is good.

Composition level is a long-term accumulation process, if you want to get a high score, you must pay attention to the usual accumulation, as soon as you have inspiration, record it, and reading is still not hungry and often important, **, poetry, prose can be, insist on reading can improve language ability. As for the exam, it is better to use some concise language in the essay, and in addition, quote more famous quotes, so that the reading is light. Teachers of limb bradymatism generally prefer innovative compositions with unique perspectives and concise language. Wish.

Each point, according to the following outline, combined with itself, is almost the same, hope.

First: There will be many achievements in a person's life, but first of all, you must allow and obey the control of the outside world, including leadership, various rules to manage and restrain you, which is the premise of becoming an excellent person. Just as a pencil cannot become a word on its own without the control of the hand.

Second: we will encounter countless difficulties in our lives, this is a growth experience that everyone must go through, but we need such experiences to become a stronger person. Just like a pencil can't write better words without going through the pain of sharpening.

These difficulties may be difficult to achieve goals, or they may be accusations, misunderstandings, or even grievances from others, but as long as we face them with a brave and fearless heart, these experiences will gather into the strength of our growth.

Third: Our most precious part is our heart. Like a pencil, although he has many beautiful coats, it is the inner core that others value.

Therefore, only by constantly forging our hearts will we continue to improve our charm index. A truly successful person is a successful person who is successful in his life, and he will be successful in doing things. And not just rely on packaging, packaging can only attract the attention of others, and does not necessarily capture people's hearts.

Only if others truly accept you from the bottom of their hearts, then what can't you do to succeed?

Plain intentions. Correct, but not profound, uninspiring, very common.

The structure is flat. The starting score will not be high.

The language is okay, but there are no bright spots, especially the language in the first paragraph is a bit jerky and clumsy, not as fluent as the language in the middle.

If it is Jiangsu Province, the score is around 47 points. If it is Anhui Province, you can add another 5 points, about 52 points.

Strong language skills, good content ideas, healthy and positive thoughts.

But I don't know if your font is up to the word count.

The introduction of the central argument is relatively smooth, and the arguments are unique, but the details are not appropriate (not detailed), the examples are not rich (there are only two small examples in the whole article), and although the ending is not strong, it is also bullish. Very good point!

Therefore, the essay is a second-class essay with a score of 62 51. I think the compromise is 55.

Correction completed.

I'm not a Chinese teacher, and I personally think it's about 50 points.

The cliché and simple structure of your essay made me not want to read it in depth and detail. Look at the beginning of each paragraph to guess what a paragraph is about.

I think the important thing about an essay is your heart, which is centered on the prescribed topic and aims to write about your thoughts and feelings. Instead of writing your thoughts, the purpose is to revolve around the topic. Therefore, this essay of yours gives me the feeling that there is no emotion to illustrate the theme, so that the person who reads it will not feel the emotion.

My personal advice is to let go of the inherent patterns and sentence patterns of the essay before writing the essay, and take a moment to make a connection between the theme and your life before starting to write. I think it would be better to replace blunt reasoning with emotional expressions. For example, when reading at night, the happiness of your parents and the happiness of your friends, wouldn't it be better to replace the straightforward preaching with your experiences and feelings?

In addition, I personally think that the novelty of the beginning and end is very important, and it is very beneficial to have a wonderful beginning and end because of the heavy task of the teacher in the exam essay.

It's pretty much the same, but it still depends on what grade you are.

Are you swollen?

And I came to read the text, but I didn't understand it.

It's almost, good, use your potential!

Why not segment! If you read it in 30 seconds, the grader will definitely be impatient and will give you a low score!

From the perspective of ordinary people, this essay is very good... A maximum of 30 points will not be deducted.

There's a little bit of a crazy thing about this essay.

Okay, 50 points.

Good memories.

There are 13 days left, with dear teachers and classmates; There are 13 days left, in this warm classroom, and 13 days left, we will leave this alma mater full of wonderful memories! The last time I sat in this dear classroom, the last time I served the class, and the last time I went out of the blackboard with my classmates to report ......Just this week, the school asked each class to publish a blackboard report, and we all took it very seriously, because this was the last blackboard report we had at our alma mater. After receiving this order, the students were in full swing

Erasers of blackboards, drawings of drawing, writing of writing, and coloring are waiting for ......Everyone is full of energy and is working hard. Shen and Zou Yijun picked up the chalk and wrote on the blackboard "swish", not sloppy at all, those words were well-proportioned, strong and powerful; Fan Keyi and Sheng Qianyu were drawing on the blackboard, and after a while, lifelike villains appeared on the blackboard, as if they were about to jump out ......This perfect everything left a permanent mark on the chalkboard that was about to say goodbye.

The lunch break passed, and the blackboard newspaper was finished, and we all had a satisfied smile on our faces, and there was joy in this smile because we had successfully completed the final blackboard newspaper; It's a pity that this is the last time we'll write and draw on this familiar blackboard; There is also appreciation, look at the beautiful handwriting and the lovely and immature illustrations, which are all our masterpieces; But more than that, it's not these, it's nostalgia. Looking at the little dragonflies and little lotus flowers on the blackboard, they seem to be telling the ups and downs of the past five years, and they seem to have witnessed the ...... of their classmates in the past five yearsEvery time the blackboard newspaper was published, everyone was chattering and discussing, but this time, everyone invariably looked at the last blackboard newspaper with a meaningful meaning, this small blackboard newspaper, connected our hearts, and connected us with all the ...... in this alma mater

The center is not clear.,It's like everything that can be piled in.,Especially the last sentence.,It's not quite consistent.,It's better to remove.。。。

I have a few questions, what kind of essay are you going to write (narrative or discussion?) What grade is this? What is the full score for an essay?

Although the materials selected in this article are all very good, but if they are all in this article, it is necessary to clarify the theme...

Here's my suggestion, thanks.

There is no discussion, no detail, no center.

The structure of the article is chaotic and the logical thinking is not clear.