How is this poem written? Give some constructive advice.

There is no specific language and pattern to poetry. But poetry has its own artistry.

Speaking of your poem, it is full of quiet and secluded nights.

The main artistic conception is to express a beautiful emotion.

In addition, the imagery composed of language is also appropriate for the simple and profound theme.

Therefore, in terms of advantages, the appropriate imagery is used as the background to express the author's beautiful and happy emotions.

Now about the disadvantages:

1. Although there is no specific specification for the poem, if there is a certain level, it will be more beautiful, and there will be different feelings from the visual and sensory aspects. For example, simple methods such as branching and sectioning can be used.

2. The organization of the language is a little brief, and it is a little awkward to say it badly.

Of course, maybe you want to express your simplicity through simple words. However, personally, I feel that there is not much organization and polishing in your text.

Summer rain quietly.

Wandering through the long night.

We walk in the mountains.

and off-white lights.

Let's go together.

Follow the sea blue in the stars.

Wind. Warm brushes.

The pink cherry blossoms.

It's like a faint fall in a dream.

We smile and appreciate together.

Accompanied by my shoulders.

And your happy face.

Simply modify it according to your imagery.

The above is purely a personal feeling, and we hope to forgive me if you take the liberty of it.

In addition, it is recommended that as long as the writing of poetry is genuine, there is no such thing as good or bad. If you want to improve it, you can read more other people's works. You can feel and observe some of your inner world more.

Modern poetry isn't written like that, you're completely prose. Modern poetry must have a sense of hierarchy and vacant beauty! But this kind of penmanship is very suitable for writing beautiful prose! Isn't it a bit of a blow?

Definitely enter the state-owned enterprises.

Since it is a state-owned enterprise, the salary must be ** per year according to the national regulations, so your salary will definitely go up, and you can bring your own lunch, but the shuttle bus can't solve it, so you have to take the bus harder, but you can take one more day off a week.

And you're going to get married next year, and you're definitely going to have a baby next, and if a private company doesn't want you to take maternity leave or something, it may fire you because of this, while a state-owned enterprise won't, and the job will be reserved during the vacation.

Forgot to ask, does the private company help you pay the money? If the state-owned enterprise pays but the private enterprise does not, you should enter the state-owned enterprise, because this is the guarantee of your future life, and the things that the state-owned enterprise learns are still formal.

Therefore, it is necessary to enter state-owned enterprises.

Salary is a more practical issue, in addition to the impact on their own future, non-standard enterprises are very risky, and if you can't learn much, there is not much need.

You can try to change yourself a little, break through, don't always sit in a small place, only touch such a small piece of the sky.

My constructive comment is: very good.

We can't just change it.

I'm afraid that the more I change, the worse it gets.

The words used in the text are appropriate.

Some people easily change it in order to mix the scores.

It will only backfire!!

Please be careful!! I have a little suggestion, has been sent to the landlord's mailbox, please check to see the smile.

Good! I like it!

There's a lot of men's spittle in your drool.

Obstetrician with ** disease.

In the open birth canal, the baby is crawling.

Amniotic fluid, placenta, blue sky, white clouds.

Your womb is buried in your pelvis.

Ovaries, fallopian tubes, mountains, windfall.

This paragraph is boldly written and creative, and is more distinctive than the "monument of the heart". Reminiscent of college students in the sixties. Like a pile of sonorous flesh and blood, as if satirical and as if praised.

But after all, there is no central content to be expressed, and the structure seems too loose. The words and sentences are very arrogant and stylish.

I also love to write poetry, and I want to be a friend with my blog

Saying poetry is not like poetry.

Xiao words are not words.

White in the bones.

It's hard to know.

It's a bit of a gothic style, it seems to be cynical and deliberately use this to show yourself, it is recommended not to play rhetorical games, and think carefully about what to say.

It's very creative, and it's even more interesting to make it into a song lol support.

If you don't like it, let's learn some Haizi's poems first.

The subject matter has little to do with the topic.

It's creative, and I'm inspired to write after reading it (I'm only in the third grade, so I don't understand what constructive advice is, please forgive me!). )

If you have to go, it is recommended to prepare a variety of resumes and identity certificates, complete procedures are a big deal, no need to apply for incomplete information later, after getting there, you must rent a house first, before you go, you can check it on the Internet, see if the rental over there**, or directly find a good house in the online intermediary, you can move in, you can also consider sharing a house, and then you can go to the city's talent market to find out if there is a suitable job, step by step.

Gain a foothold first, and then slowly look for business opportunities.

150,000 is not good to do something in your hometown, do you have to come out?

According to what you said, the girl doesn't have a good impression of you now, it's not impossible for you to catch up with her, depending on what you do, you must do what she likes. You feel that you are more introverted, and you can't figure out the deeper meaning of what the girl says, and I advise you to give up. Really, you're going to be tired when you chase her.

There's no grass at the end of the world, right?

Let me tell you this, if you compare these machines to computers.

The front is all single-core + integrated graphics.

And only the Motorola MS is 4-core (including discrete graphics).

GL's 3D masterpiece game is stuck on G7 and smooth on MS is enough for itself.

I don't copy it.

I hope to help LZ big brother, you can always see it, 1 can't win 4.