What do you think of the poem?

If you want to say it hard, a lot of it can be barely said to borrow a lot of allusions.

But this allusion is too blunt, and it doesn't feel very good. Because he wants to realize that he doesn't like fame, and his nature is weak. So a lot of descriptions are used.

As soon as I came up, I seemed to say very angrily, I am the queen of immortals.

Then he put forward a lot of grounds for his own immortal queen, such as: sex is like floating clouds, drifting has not been determined. I like to drift around all day long, and I don't admire the world. So, love swims from the red pine and enjoys the Kunlun Peak;

Morning meal in the north of the sea, evening stay in the south of the mountain.

seems to live a very chic life, and then plays turtles and cranes in his spare time, and is busy with tigers and dragons; Visiting the Taixu is too empty, and the Guibu Toad Palace is folded. It's a bit of a problem, in the first year of Emperor Wu of the Jin Dynasty, Cui Hong, the secretary of the ministry, recommended Xu Xu as the prime minister. Later, when Yongzhou was assassinated, Emperor Wu of Jin asked him about his self-evaluation, and he said:

I am like a laurel branch in the Moon Palace, a piece of jade on Kunlun Mountain. "Use a branch of cinnamon in the Guanghan Palace and a piece of jade on Kunlun Mountain to describe particularly outstanding talents. The Toad Palace is the Moon Palace.

Emperor Wu of Jin laughed and praised him. After the Tang Dynasty, the imperial examination system prevailed, and the Toad Palace was used as a metaphor for the Jinshi in the examination. The great poet Bai Juyi of the Tang Dynasty was admitted to the Jinshi first, and his cousin Bai Minzhong later won the third place

I am allowed to wear Yang Sanye as amazing. ”

Although it is a good sentence, people who don't like fame should not be busy with the tiger dragon and the Guibu Toad Palace. should be busy and busy traveling all over the world, swimming, but also to take in the beauty of the world.

The last two sentences are even more inconsistent with the previous ones, Jin Dan jade liquid is formed, and Hongmeng is hidden in the abdomen; It feels like this immortal is not a chic and uninhibited immortal, but one who cares about longevity and fame.

Because too much emphasis gives people a sense of artificiality.

In the end, I was born with a breath, and I wanted to return to the spirit of my own immortals, but unfortunately Shou and heaven and earth were a little short of breath. So it's not uniform when it's more poetic, and it doesn't feel good to me personally!

In addition, because I pay too much attention to rhyme, I don't read it too smoothly.

That's my humble opinion. But I still agree with the upstairs, as a limerick at this level, it's still very good.

As a limerick at this level, it's still very good. I just wondered, I didn't seem to finish it.

Your boyfriend wrote it? I guess I'm a science student.

The rhyme is pressed, but the flat is completely wrong.

The meaning is expressed, and it may not be sincere.

At first glance, the fairy queen is still a ranger.

But take a closer look: "I don't admire fame and fortune" is so chic (like), but how can I "fold Guibu Toad Palace"? How did he become a god again after "longevity is the same as heaven and earth"?

In fact, if you can live indifferently, why bother to live with heaven and earth? As everyone knows, human life and death are determined by heaven. But at the end of the day, the writing is still better than mine.

Can you write better yourself? It's so hot to comment on other people's comments

Forward, forward, forward.

It's pretty good.,I like it.,The artistic conception is very free.,There's a kind of Taoist immortal style.。

Ma Shi The author of the Zhenyuan Yuan and Yuan He was at the time of the extremely domineering era of the feudal town, and the Youzhou area implied by the "Yanshan" in the poem was the area where the feudal town was raging for the longest time and the most disaster. The author, who has a preference for horses, may have been inspired by Bole's knowledge of horses, combined with the reality that he had never met his talents, and wrote this poem with resentment Lime Yin Yu Qian studied hard since he was a child, and his ambition was to fight far away. Legend has it that one day, he walked to a lime kiln, and the masters calcined the lime.

I saw piles of blue-black mountain rocks, all of which turned into white lime after being burned by the raging fire. He was deeply moved, and after a little thought, he wrote this poem. It is said that Yu Qian was only twelve years old at this time, and he wrote this poem not only a portrayal of the lime image, but also his future life pursuit Bamboo Stone This is an inscription poem, the original title "Bamboo Stone", is Zheng Banqiao's own painting of bamboo and stone.