Personally, I don t think Feifeng is worthy of a dragon, I don t know what everyone thinks

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People are also forced to have no choice but to survive.

Flying anchovy is suitable for weak acidic soft water, the water temperature is 24 26, although sometimes the neutral water quality can survive, but most of the color is not bright. To keep this fish in a tank, we should try our best to create this suitable water environment, test the water quality regularly, and adjust it as needed.

If the water quality does not match, in addition to the commercially available pH regulators, it is a good choice to place sunken wood, add grass mud pills or black water; Carpaceae Ribbon fish do not need strong light, and densely planted aquatic plants play a vital role in the regulation of light.

Small live bait and small particle bait are more suitable. At the same time, do not feed too much bait, 1 2 times a day, no leftovers, and pay attention to feeding very finely chopped leaves.

In addition to eating live animal food, it also eats compound feed, and also needs plant bait such as young leaves. Likes sunshine and is not demanding on water quality. It has a lively temperament and can be polycultured with other fish.

My flying phoenix eats everything in the fish tank, and since I arrived at home, I have been eating non-stop, and I am very diligent; First of all, I licked all the perimeter of the fish tank, it turned out that there were still a little spots and dirt marks around the fish tank, but now they have been eaten clean by Fengqing, and the surroundings of the fish tank are dry and quiet; It also eats the feces of other fish, dried shrimp, etc., in short, it sweeps away all the remaining things in the fish tank; It's in the glass of the tank wall when there is nothing to eat, and when it is idle and bored, it pouts and licks the glass of the cylinder wall, hehe, I am worried that it will not be tired after eating so much. By the way, my family's flying phoenix is mixed-breeding, with a silver dragon and two parrots; They get along very well.

This really can't be considered a good article.

It's not that I'm hitting you, but from a young age to adulthood, there will be a lot of staged sublimation in writing articles, and there will be more things to experience, and many problems will mature. Generally, from junior high school to early high school, many people will have the same impulse to write as you do, wanting to express their emotions in a different way, but in fact, this is just a childish impulse in the eyes of many people.

The flaws of this poem (let's just count it as a poem) can be summarized into four points: 1. The idea is unclear; 2. The words and sentences are artificial, unnatural and uncoordinated; 3. The artistic conception is ancient and difficult to understand, which is very far-fetched; 4: The title is not linked to the article.

When you say that you understand the idea as growing up on an island, what do you mean to express? The scene of this poem is expressed in a straightforward way, that is, a seabird keeps wanting to go to the island, keeps tossing, keeps tossing, and the scene and perspective of the article have not changed at all, which is actually a very boring topic. Naja Island's "The Hermit Doesn't Meet":

Matsushita asked the boy.

Maybe there aren't many of my peers who can write about this, but I think it's hollow, flashy. Answerer: Jin Min - Assistant Level 2 This one is very good, and although it is a bit harsh, I think you should take a good look at it. Overall, it's not a good poem, or rather it's not a poem.

To be honest, I consider my writing to be mediocre, read your article, I have read the first 2 sentences too much, sometimes you don't want to be blinded by your pride.

Insist on reading this "poem", don't blame me for hitting the nail on the head, one word to describe it: incoherent.

This text is out of tune as a whole, the artistic conception is disordered, and the poetry is empty, similar to a child's building block, if a poem is a small amount of deficiency, it can also be modified, but the author is unclear at first, and the whole thing that is written in the back is anticlimactic, so my suggestion is not to make any modifications, just as a study and attempt, and then look at the famous poems in ancient style poetry, and you can also read some classical Chinese with it will help you improve the overall level, in my opinion, your "poem" The main problem arises in the lack of mastery of the structure and diction of the poem!

The way to improve the artistic conception of the article: read more than 10,000 volumes, and write like a god to improve the way to control the text: The paper is shallow in the end, and I never know that this matter must be done in a word, read more good books to enhance the sense of language, and write more articles to exercise the writing.

I'm not at a high level, so feel free to comment.

I think the lz rhyme is well done, and the feelings are fully expressed, but the writing is a little naïve, and the upper and lower sentences are often not neat enough, and the words used in many places can be scrutinized. lz can read more ancient poems, articles or **, cultivate a sense of ancient language, and experience the expressions of the ancients. If you find someone with a higher level to guide you, you will definitely make a lot of progress.

Surrounded by the sea on all sides and mountains on three sides.

Shanhaiguan is shining blue.

A flock of gulls hovers alone on the surface of the sea.

Facing the sea and fighting for food has no place to be safe=" Facing the sea and fighting for food has nowhere to be safe (rhyme) The fire of the underworld can be rekindled.

Broken wings will eventually be forgotten = "Broken wings can also be replaced.

There must be bumps in the way of survival.

Wind and rain hit the scales.

Lightning and thunder show Zhijian.

Generally speaking, you use too many rhymes.

For example, the word "mountain" appears five times.

Pass by. The desire to read the beginning without reading Long live understanding.

Personally, I think it seems to be a pile of sentences. The connections are missing, the words are direct, and the buffer zone is not visible.

It seems to add a lot of different sentences.

Connectivity is not enough!

Up to 60 points:

1. The words "mountain" and "sea" are repeated and verbose many times.

2 Use words that don't fit the sentence in order to pay attention to the rhyme.

3 The writing is hard and unengaging.

4 The topic and content are not matched enough, and it is recommended to change them. It can also be said that the main purpose is unclear.

5 Contains numerous vernaculars, and the verses lack beauty.

6 It is inexplicable whether the author wanted to learn ancient or modern poetry, and the interweaving of ancient and modern vernacular in the verses is indecent.

7 The author is not experienced enough, so it is recommended to start with the accumulation of basic knowledge to make the writing skills better and better.

The article is so beautiful, I'm ashamed that I haven't written a good article in n years!

No modifications required!!

The landlord is very powerful, like one

If I rate it, 95 It's still far-fetched in some places. In fact, writing poetry, especially modern poetry, does not necessarily have to pay attention to rhyme

The overall idea is very good, and there are some sentences that are also very good. But overall, it's not a high-class masterpiece, and it's closer to limerick poetry. To come with an overall revision.