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Although it is rhymed, it is not right, it is average.

OK!! It's wonderfully written!!

It's written in general, as if it's a narrative, it's quite sad, and it seems to be missing a lover. From: Chang'an under the moon: embodiment.

There is also a possibility that you chased that person, but were rejected by the other party, and waited for the next life to become a pair of lovers. From: After a thousand sails, the heart is not old, and the next life is still a thorn in the thorns. embodied in the .

Although it is rhymed, it is not very matched.

Not bad. Green leaves are as yellow as the moon", both green and yellow? And the moon is generally white.

The flowing water is as clear as a mirror", the flowing water is moving, and it is generally the windless lake surface that is like a mirror, such as a mirror does not mean that the water is very clear, but that the water surface is very calm. For example, "the lake surface has no wind goggles and no polishing".

The autumn wind has not solved the autumn wind virtue"? Does it mean that Qiu Feng himself doesn't understand his mind? Or does Autumn Wind not recognize his own virtues?

The last sentence is quite charming.

The name "Lying Autumn" refers to lying down and watching the autumn scenery. It looks like water up close, and trees from afar, but the trees are generally near the house, and the water flow is generally far away from the house.

Poems don't rhyme, but it doesn't hurt. Rhyme for the sake of rhyming, and what is written may not be as charming as that that does not rhyme.

Line 2: Looking at the green leaves from a distance, the yellow like autumn suggests that you change the green leaves to leaves.

It's not too rhyming. It's straightforward, and it doesn't make too much sense.

It's very well written, it has a sense of meaning, and it is worth publishing, which should be a hit.

1. The color of "green leaf yellow" conflicts, it is recommended to try "autumn leaf yellow".

2. Compared with the moonlight, it is generally at night, but the "leaf color" that can be seen should be daytime. The sun and the moon are on the same day, and it is a little incongruous.

3. If "the flowing water is as clear as a mirror", it should also be good during the day to see that the water is "clear".

4. The third sentence is repeated twice with "autumn wind", and it is recommended to borrow other words. For example, "The autumn wind recognizes the harvest month".

5. The last sentence is a bit too vernacular, and you can use other rhetorical devices to add new meaning, such as "the garden has been covered with gold", and you can also callback the autumn leaves before the yellow.

6. The ending does not rhyme. And the rhyme I gave in the previous example is not bet, and I have to slowly figure out what words are more appropriate to replace.

Mid-Autumn Festival. The moonlight is like washing leaves, and the flowing water is cold.

The pines and cypresses do not understand the autumn wind, and the nostalgia is difficult to move.

Woqiu - I didn't see the --- "lying".

There is no rhyme in the four sentences, which is not quite like poetry - and even less like a slip of the tongue;

The poetry is not thick, deep, painful, or itchy, only the number of words is very neat.

The distant mountains are green and yellow like the moonThe microwave near the water is as light as scales. The autumn wind does not understand the spring breeze. Laugh and use the fruit as a matchmaker.

Four sentences can be communicated——

The content of the poem is complete, thank you.