Check this English essay for any grammatical spelling mistakes Really urgent Thank you thank you

In the middle of the first line, the film's name is ..Finally, a man changed to remove had

The second line is preceded by a comma, b lowercase, he had killed plus had

The second line however, he hated bears are removed and I don't know what you're trying to say.

The third line helped plus -ed last killed is changed to kills

The fourth line bears after thatRemove s and add after that

The fourth line "kill animals" is removed

went to take part in a party .This is directly she went to a party or she took part in a party, but took part in is generally used in more formal occasions such as attending meetings.

Somrthing is misspelled.,I guess you accidentally typed it wrong.。。 something

But I think this sentence can be changed to because of something wrong, she went into a hole with her rabbit. It will feel smoother.

3.A journey is full of risks has happened in the hole is a predicate that can no longer be used in the present perfect tense, full of risk can be used as an adverbial. At the same time, the present perfect tense refers to what happened in the past continues until now or has any influence on the present.

It's a little awkward to use here, but I personally think it's right - because if I were to change it, I think it might be even more inappropriate. Change: a journey that full of risks has happended in the hole

I can see so much.,But it's good to be able to write a first-year essay like this I think it's miserable to see an English essay on the first year of junior high school.,It's so early to use not only but also sentence patterns.。。 This is a common sentence pattern in our high school, and only in this way can we...It's simply a universal royal sentence pattern.

I was long-winded, hoping it would be useful

Hello, first of all, there is nothing wrong with the first sentence, it's just that I don't understand what you mean by "arouse the attention from all walks of life". "prevention of the mountain" can be changed to "".impedimentof the mountain", but the meaning is pretty much the same, I just think prevention sounds a little weird. "excellent scenery" can be changed to "".magnificentscenery”。

In the next sentence, replace "detect" with ".notice"Well, it's kind of weird. "has conquer" should be replaced by "has."conquered”。I haven't read the last sentence, can you explain it?

In the first sentence of the second paragraph, replace the word "but" with the word ".yet"It's better. What is "dazzing", do you mean "dazing" or "dazzling"? "mayun is greatly robust" is changed to ".was