Is this essay a perfect score If not, please explain what went wrong. 5

The second line likes, the penultimate line follow, and the s are added after both words, in the form of single three.

The wind, whirring, I looked at the sky in my room and thought: Is it wrong to do good?

It was a sunny afternoon, and our school had a basketball game. I don't play basketball, and I have no interest in it at all. Therefore, the people in our class who don't play basketball are only cheering and playing.

When a few friends and I walked past the toilet, we saw that some of the bicycles in our class were crooked. I was about to set it up, but they told me not to go, anyway, it's not our bikes that are crooked, it's none of our business. I thought it would be better to put the crooked bikes in place, so I used my stiff hands to swing them.

As soon as I touched the bike, it tilted a little, and when I touched it, it toppled down along with its companion. What should I do, a row of bicycles is overturned, do you want me to carry it alone? I looked at them with pitiful eyes, but they must not have been infected, and they walked away with their toes high.

I had no choice but to move by myself.

The north wind blew the leaves on the ground like a small tornado, and blew my hands red. They're all gone, so they have no conscience. I had to stand alone against the cold wind and lift up all the bikes I had knocked over.

Finally, I set up all the bikes I had knocked over. Friends also happened to come over, and they still have a little conscience. But they laughed at me and said, "."

Be nosy and eat more farts, you eat a lot of farts. I was very angry and walked away from them. But they kept pestering me, like a fart.

I wanted to cry, but I didn't. Because they laughed at me even more, I had to cry in my heart.

I really can't figure it out, is it wrong to do good? Is doing good deeds nosy? Why don't the children of the single voice have no love now?

This is all due to parents who spoil their children too much, and they make their children develop the bad habit of selfishness, so that the children have no love and only think about themselves.

I have now figured it out: there is nothing wrong with doing good deeds, and it is not nosy, we should do more good deeds.

If you want to write about yourself, you can make it up appropriately, but you must have a sense of truth.

Am I wrong? So the fact of the composition is that I'm not wrong.

Summary. If you make a mistake according to the topic and content, you should get half of the points back, and if you just feel one-sided, you may not be able to deduct half of the points.

Not completely without points.

But it's just a roll, very low.

The topic is that sweat brings me opportunities, I write as sweat brings me joy, how much can I take, I feel that I may still deduct half of the question (?) ）

If you miss a vertical or wrong writing in the essay question, you will only be deducted two points, but if the content in your essay does not match the topic, then the marking teacher is likely to deduct some more points from you. If the proposition essay question repents and argues and the content is written incorrectly, half of the points will be deducted.

If you do, you will be deducted half of the points.

I think your teacher will judge this as off-topic, but it's not completely off-topic.

Because there are many things in opportunities, I personally think that joy is one of them, but simply writing about joy will feel one-sided.

So it depends on how the teacher thinks about your essay.

If you make a mistake according to the topic and content, you should get half of the points back, and if you just feel one-sided, you may not be able to deduct half of the points.

Whenever I see the empty fish tank in the corner, there are always two little goldfish jumping around and chasing and playing. However, my ignorance sent them to the point of no return. I regret it!

How beautiful these two little goldfish are! One was covered in a golden coat, wearing a fan-shaped gauze skirt, and his eyes were bulging, like two glass balls. When she swims, she looks like a dancing girl.

The other one looks pretty much the same, but it's covered in ink.

Since the little goldfish came to the house, my sedan chair has become richer! Every morning, I always say goodbye to them before I go to school. When you get home from school, the first thing you do is watch them dance and throw some food at them. A week passed peacefully.

However, the good times did not last long, and something unfortunate happened. One afternoon, I finished my homework and went to the fish tank. The little goldfish came over one after another when they saw me.

I thought: it's time to feed! So, I grabbed a handful of fish food and threw it in.

The little goldfish scrambled around and devoured them. After a while, he swallowed it all. At this time, they opened their mouths again, as if to say:

Little master, it's so stingy, give a little more! "Looking at their appearance, I told my father - "Goldfish don't know how to be hungry and can't eat more." Leaving it all behind, he grabbed it again and threw it in.

When, when. "The clock struck twice, ah! "Animal World" began.

I ran into the room, watched intently, and forgot everything. I don't know how long it took, but my mother screamed, "Child, what's wrong with the goldfish?"

I listened, and I didn't do two steps to the living room to take a look, ah! The black goldfish turned its white belly over with the scriptures, and the red goldfish was almost dying, but its mouth was still moving slightly, as if to say: "Little master, you are too bad, you are really a harmful spirit!"

What's going on? I screamed. Mom pointed to the fish food floating on the water and said:

You see! When I looked at it, I couldn't help but realize, "Wow! A cry came out ......

1) 5-10 points.

2) The number of words is a stylistic requirement, and the ending is a structural requirement.

3) In the essay scoring criteria for the total defeat of the national college entrance examination: stylistic requirements, structure, language, and handwriting constitute "expression", accounting for 20 points out of 60.

4) The problem is that the number of words is not enough, and the structure is chaotic if there is no end. Therefore, 5-10 points will be deducted.

Hello this classmate! First of all, you need to know what the letter is going to write. The content of the letter should be to ask the teacher to revise the resume, not the resume for the interviewer to see.

In other words, don't write about yourself, the purpose of your job search, your work attitude, or anything else. So, you're probably off topic! You won't get much points off topic.

That's about 10 out of 10.

The first paragraph: I want to(find)(a) foreign company(to)(get)(a)part-time(job); (Remember that part-time must have a connector).

Then you can explain the purpose of writing to the teacher: could you please help me to correct the format of my resume?

The following content is off-topic and needs to be rewritten. The content can be written: ask the teacher for some tips on writing a resume, etc.

Finally, be sure to practice your English calligraphy. It doesn't have to be gorgeous, you can refer to the standard writing method of Hanyu Pinyin, and the paper score accounts for a large proportion of the exam.

1.The handwriting is quite good-looking, the handwriting is neat, there are fewer alterations, and it looks very refreshing at a glance2The sentence structure is also very rich, there are inverted sentences, exclamation sentences, clauses, and the vocabulary is also very good3

The ending is average, you can go to the Internet to search for the ending, there are many good sentences or omnipotent, just memorize it.

About 20 minutes.

The last sentence is less than a score The rhetoric is very good, but the conjunction is used too little It reads very stiffly The last sentence of writing also deducts points.

What is the word count requirement and will it be less? There is also the best way to write the essay in at least three paragraphs, and not only....but also...There is a problem with the sentence structure.

20 points, the topic is "Blow". Comment:

1) "The results of the competition were announced, and I actually won the first place, "It's not a blow, it's a success, so the next sentence "Through this blow, I understand: believe in yourself, and you will definitely succeed"! should read "With this success (or competition), I get it:."

Believe in yourself and you will succeed"! Front: "By blowing, I understand a truth. ”！

It's the same thing.

2) "I immediately shed tears" should be replaced by "I shed tears with excitement," more appropriately!

3) "At that time, I was discouraged again. "It's better to write about your inner struggles at that time, and how did you get the confidence to participate in the competition?

4) "I immediately bowed my head. "Typo: bottom, it should be low, it's better to say why you lowered your head, is it ashamed? Or something else.

I think you should write in detail about how you have improved your essay quality through hard work, and how you have paid attention to things in your daily life, so that you can win a prize in the competition if you are well prepared.

I suddenly found that your experience was the same as when I was in the first year, but I didn't refuse the teacher. This essay can be given an 18.

To highlight the memorable word, stick to the topic. There are some redundant places that need to be deleted, such as the first self that you silently say to yourself in your heart. Everyone's life journey is not smooth, and it is impossible to change it all.

To make others look at you differently, I personally think that it is better to be impressed. Now that I don't have that kind of fear when I go on stage, I will give confidence to myself every time. If I hadn't had the teacher's guidance and determination at that time, I would never have been where I am now, and I would never have been able to get out of the shadow of the second speech.

It was the teacher's enlightenment and determination that made me who I am now. If I hadn't had the teacher's guidance and determination at that time, I would never be where I am now, and I wouldn't have been able to get out of the shadow of the second speech. Also, remember, to stick to the topic, you have gone off topic in front of you, how to change it.

Stick to the words once and unforgettable.