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Animals should use it, not she.

Is this article about mother's love? Be.

Change the process of loving and being loved, there is being loved.

It's not good to express no love.

Whoever says an inch is careless, and he will be rewarded with three springs." This beautiful phrase of praise for my mother that has been passed down through the ages has given me a deep inspiration. Yes, Mother pampered us with her most simple love, nurtured us to grow up, but did not care about anything in return.

A mother's love cannot be measured by worldly money money. In fact, having a mother's love is better than owning all the wealth in the world, such as gold and silver mines.

Mother's love is the wind in spring, gently blowing on the child's face, making people happy; Mother's love is the rain in summer, nourishing us thirsty and giving us strength and hope; Mother's love is the sunset in autumn, and it will also contribute a little fire and warm the earth at the last moment; Mother's love is the furnace in the middle of winter, doing her best to release her energy and help people survive a spring-like harsh winter.

Mother's love is like a cup of coffee, I don't feel any special taste when I first taste it, and when I drink it for the second time, it is a little bitter, and I don't taste its sweetness until the end. This bittersweet cup of coffee is the kind of love that Mother has for us that is unique in the world, and this love is expressed in every word and deed of Mother, whether it is a word of concern or a harsh rebuke ......This is all a manifestation of maternal love. However, for so many years, I have never tasted this strong cup of coffee, and that special bitterness and sweetness really seem to be out of my favor.

Looking back, I was young, naïve and naughty, and my mother always worried; However, now that I have become a mature and sensible middle school student, I have become more knowledgeable, and my thinking has naturally changed. I have gradually started to share the household chores for my mother, solve my worries, and start the journey of returning. This makes my mother often feel relieved and happy.

However, I know that this is only the beginning of the journey, and the path is endless, and I still have to go through a lifetime of trek!

Change a bit noisy feeling.

The beginning and end echo well.

First, growth, like a long river, "set off waves" in the journey of my life.

Second, the security room of seven or eight square meters is "all" crowded with people.

Third, Dad said earnestly and "on the ground": Look at the "color" of this day, the rain should be lighter after a while, and when the rain is light, we will pick up my brother "again".

Fourth, after waiting for a long time (waiting for a long time), the rain kept falling.

Fifth, they just don't dare to "walk" on the opposite road.

Seventh, since it is carrying you, you should not write "I will stomp my foot and say". You're trying to kick your dad down!

Eighth, after saying goodbye, you and Dad "just" not "most" continue to move forward.

Nine, I said goodbye to my father and brother to the teacher, and changed to: After I said goodbye to my father and brother to the teacher, I was in a hurry to go home, and my brother was too young, so my father carried my brother on his back, and I pulled... I held an umbrella" and my father and my brother on my back were in the rain, I looked at my father walking in the rain, and I felt a pain in my heart inexplicably, I can't remember whether it was the rain that drenched my eyes, or my father's majesty that made my face wet with tears.

Tenth, the street is full of cars, and it is necessary to "divide the paragraphs" here because it is a narrative of another event.

Eleven, at this time Dad said, "You should drive slowly, worry about the manhole cover on the ground." ‘’

Your title is "My Growing Up Story", which is not in line with the content and central theme of the story you are telling, you are writing about your father's love for you and your brother, and his concern for others in society. The title should be "Daddy's Love" or "The Story of Me Growing Up with Dad". The story of my growth should be in my childhood memories, when I encountered difficulties and wanted to give up, my father gave encouragement, and when I faced a strong opponent, I couldn't solve it, and my father stood up at this time; When you are in a low mood, your father will encourage, your naughtiness, you have done something wrong, your confusion, your hesitation, your yearning, and other trivial things in life have recorded your growth.