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a.Yicai has great ambitions, and the house gathers auspicious light to welcome the joy; The blueprint is drawn in the morning, and the peak is bright and the sun is glowing.

There is no big problem with this couplet, only three words have been changed, 晬 refers to the child's first birthday, the meaning of purity; The peak is bright, and there is no problem here.

b.There is a road to view Chenxu in the book mountain; There is no end to learning.

In this way, although the ancient couplet is used, the rhythm is correct, and the meaning is as new; And the sea can't be climbed, it's only suitable for swimming.

c. Send two more pairs.

Anecdotes are superb;

Morningside sleeps at night.

The anecdote is superb, and Tao Ran is happy;

Chenxu is vigorous and has a bright future.

Linglang's name is good, it looks like you are an experienced person, this pair of sub-rules is exquisite, and you are skilled.

A Shanglian here here '睟' word suggested to change, a '睟喜' word has not been heard, it seems remote;Second, the couplet is not a clever text pair, and I hope that many people can understand it at the first reading. According to your original meaning is 'look', it is a description of the son's spiritual appearance, and I can't think of any words that can be embedded here, the landlord thinks twice.

The lower link 'Feng Hui Liri', here the word 'Hui' corresponds to the upper link as a verb, but when it is a verb, it is more intransitive verbs, the mountain peak is not the sun, there is no power to shine, and it is difficult to connect the word 'Feng' and 'Liri'. Changed it to 'the sky rises and the sun shines brightly', I think you should have thought about it.

B-link seems to be the need for all changes, 'diligent stepping on the book mountain, striving to learn the sea' is suspected of gasshoing, and 'Guanchenxu' seems to have no meaning;The word "Deng" should be used on the mountain.

I'm not a master, but I feel like the author has done a good job! The word "睟喜" may be considered for replacement?

On the side of the short cracked bridge outside the station, plum blossoms bloom quietly in the flying snow. At this time, I stayed in a nearby inn. I accidentally saw a plum blossom blooming alone in the snow.

Plum blossoms, are you blooming alone in the snow just to attract the eyes of visitors? "A biting one'The cold wind blew, and from a distance, it looked like the plum blossoms were shaking their heads: "That's not the case, I chose to bloom in winter because I didn't want to compete with the flowers for spring."

I shook my head, not believing what Plum Blossom was saying. "How many people in this world will do anything for power and official positions, but how many people are honest and upright? Plum blossom continued:

Competing with a hundred flowers for a beautiful spring will only attract the jealousy and irony of a hundred flowers. I shook my head, sighed softly, and went back to my room. After a while, the sound of the carriage combined with the biting cold wind was heard.

After the sound gradually faded away, a faint fragrance came from the window. It turned out that the bitter cold wind blew the plum blossom into the mud puddle on the ground. At this moment, a carriage came quickly, and crushed the plum blossom into a dusty powder, and then a faint fragrance came to the nose.

Plum blossoms, plum blossoms, although you were crushed into powder by the carriage, but you still retain your original fragrance, so sacred, so beautiful.

Your fragrance will remain in my heart forever!

was basketed to the evening to welcome the previous month, and the lonely board sang in the wind. Now that I don't like to call for food, why should the village dog bark endlessly.

I don't understand very well.,Just talk about your opinion.,First of all, I can't see what it's like.,Quatrain? Lyric poetry? , or archaic?

If it's an ancient style.,There's nothing to change.,Just feel it.,The words of the quatrain of the poem seem to be the two sentences I pasted down.,Sticky and not right.,And it's not neat.,It doesn't seem to be too much.,,,,I hope to adopt.。

1) The original meaning of the poem cannot be changed.

2) Reasonable imagination according to the theme of the poem. Capture the character's language, movements, demeanor, etc. to portray the character.

3) The plot of the story should be complete, with twists and turns, and attract the reader.

Ask a question: My question asks me to revise it.

My father died and was to be buried, but my mother was still alive. What to pay attention to when preparing to choose a double tomb.

1.Before the monument is erected, the mother must be consulted. The mother's consent must be obtained before the monument to the father can be erected. If the mother did not agree, she would not have erected a monument to the father.

2.After my mother agreed to erect the monument, we knew that my mother would definitely be buried with my father after she died, so we must pay attention to the writing of the inscription. We must engrave our father's name aside when we write the text. And on the other side, it is better not to engrave the mother's name.

If the mother agrees to engrave her name, she must also be painted in red.

3.The monument to the father must be erected after the third anniversary of the father, it is best for the children to be present together, and the children will jointly pay for the monument to choose an auspicious day of the zodiac!

Question: My attention question is: Do I need to look at the eight characters when choosing a double cemetery? Do you need a child's eight characters?

Among the four pillars, if you encounter any of them, there is a tomb.

You said that your four pillars have two tombs, and that's how you checked.

1.It's too watery to write, it's hard to change it, so you can rewrite it.

2.What you want to express, you should be clear, gentle, vibrant, beautiful, and should have a clear purpose to write.

3.The coherence and meaning of the sentence should be considered, the jumping style is not nonsensical, the first sentence "how to listen, there is a sound", first of all, "at first glance" is not "how to listen", and then this sentence has no connection with the next sentence "close to see", it is too abrupt, at first glance, who knocked on my window lattice.

Push open a window that was never enabled.

The ** under your feet should drown the dawn with the rhythm of my heart" and then you can write everything such as going to work, meeting you, and going home according to the time or the order of your feelings or the order of the soul discovery, and the order and structure are very important.

4.Things are a means to express your heart, you can't write things for things' sake, they are for your expression.

5.Don't say "ah" or "intoxicated...... cutelyYou didn't lay enough emotion for yourself to sigh, "Ah" is not bad, this exclamation mark is cute, and the feelings should be natural.

6.If you write poetry as a means of expressing yourself rather than showing off, then there is nothing to change, and your own poetry is not good or bad, but whether you can feel yourself. Of course, if it's a love poem, it's not good enough.

7.All of the above is the words of the family, and I wish you happiness.

Occasionally, the curtains are opened, and the snow is falling. I didn't know that winter was coming.

Wrapped in silver, everything is the same color. The sky and the earth are vast, and the north wind is like a blade.

If you want to go out, lest you trample on it. If you enter, you will be a pure land, and you will retreat from the mortal dust.

In this situation, I think about it again. As soon as I left that day, it was a farewell.

If you have a heart, you will be fond of it. If you don't understand, what is worrying.

As far as poetry itself is concerned, it is a kind of expression of feelings, as the so-called "poetry and words", as long as you write your own heart, it is a good poem. As far as appreciation is concerned, a poem that allows everyone to read the feelings and read the charm is the best product, of course, the poem you write should be a kind of sigh that you have feelings. However, on the whole, the layout of the text and the choice of words did not put a lot of effort into pondering.

The curtains are gently opened, and the snow is falling. Wrapped in silver, everything is draped.

The heavens and the earth are vast, and the north wind is like a thorn. I didn't know that the cold winter had returned.

I don't want to go out, but I'm afraid of being late. Enter the Pure Land and retreat to seek plums.

In this situation, I thought about it again. Farewell on that day, this life and the next life.

If you have a heart, you will be fond of it. If you don't understand, you'll see you in the next life.

I didn't know that winter was coming.

The sky and the earth are vast, and the north wind is like a blade.

Occasionally, in front of the window, there was a lot of snow.

Wrapped in silver, all directions rhyme.

If you want to travel, lest you blaspheme.

If you enter, you will be in a pure land, and if you retreat, you will be enlightened.

In this situation, I think about it again.

When I said goodbye that day, it was like three lives.

If you have a heart, you will be fond of it.

If you don't understand, why is it deep.

I have true feelings, and I am willing to trust the snow;

The jade is clear and ice-clear, and it is indestructible.

Life is like a summer flower, lonely like a firefly, bright for a while, shining and not falling.

Reply. 1. Three principles of rewriting: (1) The original meaning of the poem cannot be changed. 2) Reasonable imagination according to the theme of the poem. Capture the character's language, movements, demeanor, etc. to portray the character. 3) The plot of the story should be complete, with twists and turns, and attract the reader.

I didn't know that winter was coming.

The heavens and the earth are vast, and the north wind is like a thorn.

Occasionally, the curtains are opened, and the snow is falling.

Wrapped in silver, the scenery is the same.

If you want to go out, lest you trample on it.

If you enter, you will be in the pure land, and you will retreat from the foolishness.

In this situation, I thought about it again.

Farewell on that day, this life and the next life.

If you have a heart, you will be fond of it.

If you don't understand, why delay.

Revision, as far as I know, there is no special treatise, it is not elegant, and it makes people laugh when it is mentioned. However, it is indispensable in the processing of words. I'm very interested in revision.

First, you should read through the manuscript first, mainly to see if there are any typos or inappropriate words. Second, the rhythm of poetry, the rhyme of the rut. Of course, modern poetry does not pay attention to this set.

I think: this rhyme still needs to be spoken, otherwise how can it be poetic? There is no need to be too troublesome in the poems, as long as the format is right, the reading is catchy, and the sun suppression is frustrating.

Third, the use of dictionaries. Take a look at the use here"Allusion"What does it mean, what does it do, is it appropriate or not. There are also place names, solar terms, etc.

Avoid mistakes. Fourth, it is necessary to consider the whole text, whether the central point is prominent or not, how the problem is explained, the techniques used, the connection between the general structure and the paragraph, and the relationship between the key words and the paragraph and the whole. It also needs to take into account the feelings of the reader.

Therefore, when I read a poem, I usually read it three or four times, and first read it to understand the work, which is not only responsible for myself, but also responsible for others.