Ask the high school Chinese teacher to change the Chinese composition

I've done many, many things, but there's one thing I'll never forget. When I was eight years old, I learned to rollerblaze.

It was when I was in first grade, and I saw many of my classmates wearing beautiful roller skates and skating skillfully. I watched them skate and was envious.

I was determined to learn how to roller skate too. I asked my dad to accompany me to the open space in the neighborhood to practice skating. When I put on my skates, I didn't feel as comfortable walking as I normally would, and I didn't dare to move, I didn't dare to take a step.

Dad came over and helped me and let me slip, and after a while, Dad suddenly let go of me, and he thought I would be able to learn as soon as I did, but I slipped and fell on my heels. Dad trained me again and again, and I fell again and again. I got impatient and said:

If I don't learn, I just won't learn." Dad said with a pleasant face: "You have to be patient when learning things, you can't give up all at once, as the saying goes, failure is the mother of success"!

After listening to my father, I went back to where I was and started training, I slipped slowly, and suddenly I fell hard and blood flowed from my knee. But I just took a break, and immediately got up again, and continued to train, and I slipped and slipped and slipped and I suddenly felt that I was getting proficient, and I tried to speed up and didn't wrestle. I exhaled loudly:

I learned! I learned!

In a good sentence, I don't know how to see a rainbow if I don't know the wind and rain, and I finally learned to skate after hard training.

The most important thing in this essay is that the structure is clear, the theme is clear, the language is vivid, the emotion is rich and the sentences are fluent, and it is necessary to pay attention to the topic by name. Just pay attention to these points, and I'm sure your writing skills will flourish!

As a Chinese teacher who has worked and is currently working in both junior high and high school, objectively speaking, although this article is a model of Mr. Fujino, it does not portray a biology teacher with some flesh like Mr. Fujino. The biology teacher written in the article is just "I" as an appreciator, appreciating his difference, and the events of going to the laboratory and texting during the holidays do not highlight the character, emotion, and unique personality charm of the biology teacher. This is the biggest drawback of the article - empty.

Specific modifications: The first paragraph said a lot of nonsense, and at the beginning, he only named himself for his great interest in biology, so he wanted to meet the biology teacher, and he could cause the following.

The first impression of meeting the biology teacher for the first time below was quite successful.

In the following example, I would like to write about the incident in which "I" came into direct contact with the biology teacher, highlighting my observations of the biology teacher (such as the incident in which Mr. Fujino corrected the author's lecture notes) and showing some of the characteristics of the biology teacher. And how much "I", as you wrote, liked the biology teacher.

See Bingxin's "Lotus Leaf Mother", Shi Tiesheng's "Me and the Altar of Earth" and "The Acacia Tree".

It can be seen that there is a difference in his personality by what happened to me and the biology teacher.

Finally, at the end of the summary, it is a good writing essay.

Finally, I emphasize two points, one is that people should have both form and spirit, and focus on conveying God. Second, as an essay, if you want to write well, you must write about the people you really understand and who have moved you, so that it will be profound. I'm sure if you write about your parents, you'll be two or three times better than this one!

Pay attention to these two points, and your writing essay is definitely above passing.

The teacher is bitter again! I can answer all my questions about literature.

I am a primary school Chinese teacher.

It's a story about shoes.

The story takes place in Beijing, a bustling city.

Out of the back room came a housewife, about thirty-five years old, with exhaustion written on her face. "What did you get into? Wenwen, what's wrong with you?

Mom, I was admitted to the High School Attached to Normal University! "Really? Let Mom see, yo, really!

At dinner time, Xiaowen suddenly put down the soup spoon: "Mom, you said that you will ...... when I am admitted.""Okay, okay, no problem, after eating, Mom will take you to the street to "Boom"! "Thank you, Mom," Xiaowen kissed her mother on the face.

"Jinbang" is a brand-name shoe store in Dongcheng District, Beijing, bringing together the world's top brands in one store, and it is like a tide every day. Naturally, the ** of each pair of shoes is not cheap.

Xiaowen and her mother came to the door of the store and were about to step into the door, "Tut-tut, it's so expensive, seven or eight hundred and one pairs, it's ...... my monthly salary."As soon as her mother's words blurted out, Xiaowen's face immediately changed, she dragged back her steps, turned around and got into the sea of people, and rushed forward frantically, she cried while running, and she was extremely ......aggrieved

She knows that her family is not wealthy, and she has been very well-behaved in elementary school for six years, and she never asks her mother for money. A few months ago, my father died violently after being turned away from the hospital due to illness and lack of money for medical treatment. A few months ago, she agreed with her mother that if she was admitted to the High School Affiliated to Normal University, she would reward her with a pair of Nikes!

A pair of star endorsements of Nike! Mom agreed, and it was so categorical at the time. Today, I did it, and I paid so much to achieve my ideals, but my mother actually regretted it!

I just want a pair of sneakers, a pair of sneakers that a lot of people already have, is that also wrong? Xiaowen ran while crying, letting her tears flow down, running farther and farther in the vast sea of people, ignoring her mother's worried screams, she hoped that she was a stone without edges and corners, and her bones kept rolling forward, never ......looking back

In the following week, Xiaowen didn't talk to her mother again, and her mother became cautious when she spoke to Xiaowen, and even a little low. Another week passed, on Saturday morning, Xiaowen was just about to go out, and Aunt Wang next door stopped her: "Child, go and persuade your mother, no matter how difficult life is, it can't be like this?"

She was confused, and through the discussions of the people around her, she gradually understood that her mother actually stole electricity! She didn't know from the ** that the two wires of the meter were twisted and connected together, and the meter would naturally "strike", even if all the electrical appliances were opened, the pointers were not moved at all, because her mother knew nothing about the common sense of electricity, not only did she not succeed in stealing electricity, but also burned the meter and injured her fingers, which caused problems with the power supply of the whole building. Xiaowen recalled that a few days ago, her mother always hid one hand when cooking, and she always avoided it in front of Xiaowen, it turned out that it was because of ......

In the evening, my mother went home and took out eight large bills, "Here, Wenwen, buy shoes!" Last time, my mother was not good, this time, you go by yourself and pick a pair of favorites for yourself, ah? There was a moment of silence between the mother and daughter, and the mother gently approached the kitchen.

Xiaowen ran over, kept her mother's waist, and tears fell down uncontrollably, "Mom, I'm sorry......."”