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The article is a bit less and a little fuller. You can write about how Chinese parents and teachers educate their children, and how foreign parents and teachers educate their children, and the difference in perspective. You could also write about how you were educated by your parents.

Face Chinese parents to children"If you hold it in your mouth, you are afraid of melting, and if you hold it in your hand, you are afraid of falling off"Do you think they can train their children to become the pillars of the motherland? What do you think. You can also appeal to them as a sane person about this wrong method of education, that's all.

The perspectives of China and the West are different.

Chinese like to think from the bottom line, which means that Chinese parents expect their children to find at least a good job. Finding a job is not the end, it's the basics.

And foreigners like to think from the top, their parents will set a vertex for their children, teach them to be independent all their lives, to pursue that apex, even if you fail, you have to have that process.

This is the gap between China and the West. I used to read an article (foreign) that said that the boy's family was about to move, and he was very reluctant to live with the girl opposite, and he had a crush on her, so his mother made a cake with him and gave it away. If you had been trained by your parents in China, you would have been labeled as a puppy love.

Alas, that's the gap :'(

The last paragraph is better not to write your call-to-action, it is too old-fashioned, there is no new idea, it is best to use a famous quote or dual sentence, which can make the article more vivid and flavorful!

Let me start by talking about the shortcomings of this article.

Clause. 1. What is the theme of this article I am not alone It feels like missing someone far away, and it feels like the lyrical sadness of a lovelorn person, although it feels sad throughout, but sometimes it feels like a praise for a relationship or someone or something.

Clause. Second, at first glance, I think that this person's poetry level is good, but a little careful reading will make people feel that it is a pile-up, and too deliberately use some poems without their own opinions. In addition, many of the original poems will give a certain feeling, and you use them here, without special instructions, are detached from or contrary to the theme of this article.

It's not that you can use it if you feel sad.

Clause. 3. The paragraphs are not clear and the context is not smooth. I always feel that the previous paragraph and the next paragraph are not in the article at all, and it may be said that the jump is too big. Clarity in paragraphs is key to highlighting the topic. It can be from the inside to the outside, there are deep and shallow, etc.

Of course, there will always be advantages to an article, and the biggest advantage of this article is that it gives people the impression that the writing style is good.

But all I can say is that on the surface, a cursory reader would feel that way.

Is it missing? It feels colorful and has a strong sense of picture, but it can't be connected into a story.

It's a stream of consciousness.

I think the language of this article is gorgeous, and the picture described is very beautiful, and it makes people see a picturesque scene. It's just that it's too gorgeous and has the suspicion of piling up rhetoric, which makes people feel beautiful, but it's not real like a dream, and it would be better if there was a substantive plot.

Finally, let's talk about personal understanding: I think she here is a woman rather than Jiangnan, and "I" is more attached to "her" than "I" has feelings for Jiangnan, I don't know if my understanding is correct.

The above is just my personal understanding, if there is anything wrong, I hope Haihan...

It's okay, but some places don't work well and need to be improved, but it's okay.

It's okay, I'll give you 90 out of 100, but you can add a little bit at the end or change the last symbol to an ellipsis.

Happiness is mixed with ups and downs, and the author's personal experience allows us to appreciate the greatness of father's love. Let's cheer for the coming Father and wish the Great Father good health!

First of all, happiness is the satisfaction of the present and the hope of a better future. So the author felt happiness while experiencing the great father's love. Again, happiness is temporary, reminding the writer to constantly pursue happiness, and there is no happiness without desire.

Life doesn't stand still, happiness is ahead of you.

My father is also such a person, for me he is the guide of my life, the most respected person in my life! But all we can do is to do our best not to disappoint them and try to do our best!

Hide this happiness deep in your heart, it will be a precious treasure in life!

1.You've written in a big way, and if you could add some examples after the first paragraph, such as Edison's ideal to fill the world with light, and then invent all kinds of difficulties in lighting a lamp, because the ideal support will always succeed, etc., it can make the article fuller.

2. Ideals and struggles are closely linked, if you write your ideals, it is best to write about what efforts you have made for your ideals, such as writing a diary every day, reading various famous books and insisting on writing your experience, etc., you make people feel that it is your ideal, you sweat for it, can make people sigh and even move. You are like this, and the past of the water has no soul and no bright spots.

3.The last paragraph is not written enough to summarize, and it cannot sublimate the article, so it takes a lot of effort.

What is this written about? Can't read it? No deep meaning? I have a bigger idea, and you've written so well.