Please help me comment on how about this article

1.The beginning is too bland and can't echo the ending. A good article must have a very beautiful beginning.

2.Some sentences are not used skillfully enough, and they are stiff to read. For example, in our class, there is a male student who has just taken ......

This sentence can be written as follows: A boy in the class took the summer vacation homework book and tore it to pieces after dividing it by two......

3.It seems that the author's reason is biased, and the color of the article "Girls must be stronger than boys" is too strong, and there is a suspicion of using points to bring faces. Reading it makes it feel very shallow.

I've revised it for you, so take a look!

Can I relax after graduation?

Finally graduating, we are about to become middle school students. Some time ago, studying was hard, and I need to take a good rest this summer! Maybe because of the long vacation time and the fact that the sixth grade has graduated, some students think that the junior high school teacher will not watch it, so they are lucky and ready not to do homework!

In my class, there was a male student who had just taken his summer homework and tore him up, and now, although the other students didn't tear up the homework, they didn't want to write it. They think it's in vain! But I think that the teacher sent this homework not to occupy our time, but to make our summer vacation life fulfilling.

Small connections are very important! In the summer vacation, I must review what I have learned in elementary school and prepare for junior high school! And those students who are unwilling to do their homework can only be described as "not good".

I asked the boys: How are you going to spend this summer?

Many boys say the same word in unison: "play"!

Girls, on the other hand, are much more interested in learning than boys, saying, "Finish your summer homework first, and then find time to preview your junior high school curriculum; Review the curriculum of the primary school; If you still have time, read more extracurricular books. ”

I don't know why, some boys always lag behind girls, I guess this is the main reason! I really hope that the boys can put away their playfulness, learn from the girls, and then buy a few practice books to do. Although this may seem like a lot, he does make others see that he has a lot of substance.

Of course, this also requires the supervision and cooperation of parents, and the original parents can do their duty and set a good example for their children.

Finally, I wish office workers a smooth sailing in their careers; The elderly are in good health; Students are successful in their studies; Have fun with the kids!

Brief comment: After reading this work, it is not difficult to see that the author is quite attentive to creation, is consciously using the knowledge learned, the author did not follow the general idea of expansion, but an inspiration, changed a direction. Through the dialogue with the ancients through letters, I believe that the author will become more and more skilled in his future creations.

It's very good, there are a lot of citations, which can improve the level of the article and the deep insight into Mozi, and the words and sentences in the text are also very exquisite, but I don't understand whether you are writing this article to praise him or want to express something, the number of words in the article can be more, and it will be better to write more comprehensively (maybe I am not right).

There should be a lot of this type of question on the Internet.

Here are a few of the points I looked for you:

How to evaluate the quality of an essay?

1. An essay should always have a theme, a positive and healthy topic, and the topic should reflect the reality of the situation as much as possible.

The narrative must be able to serve the main purpose and be fluent.

If multiple events can be used to serve a theme, the events should be narrated in a certain order and in connection. - The basic criteria for a good note-taking essay.

2. Successful writing essays must have an appropriate theme, and the characters created by Plastic Sail Wu Wei should be representative and proficient in using various methods to portray the character image.

4. To write an excellent scene composition, it must always be a little face-to-face, a combination of points and faces, highlight the key points, and write the atmosphere; The hierarchy is clear and orderly.

5. To evaluate a piece of prose, we should first understand the characteristics of the prose, that is, "the form is scattered but the spirit is not scattered", that is, the freedom of form is not restricted, but the center of the article is clear.

Prose is divided into narrative prose and lyrical prose. a. If you encounter a narrative, it depends on whether it reflects real social life or whether it expresses the author's sense of love and shame. b. If you encounter lyrical ones, it depends on whether it expresses the author's feelings and wishes for real life, and whether it can touch the reader's heart.

Pay attention to the way of prose expression, a successful prose should be able to use the scene to express lyricism or support words or direct expression of the heart.

This article starts with a girl's job search experience, and highlights the heart-warming moments in the society, telling us that as long as everyone treats others and the society well, there will be true feelings everywhere in the world, and there will always be love.

The article advocates a kind of value pursuit that is urgently needed by society, spreads positive energy, and promotes the core values of socialism.

The topic of the article is prominent, and the emotional thread runs through the article. In particular, the title of the article is novel and unique, which has a timeless meaning, which adds a lot of color to the article.

The temperature of the topic is the temperature of the society, which attracts readers, stimulates readers' interest in reading, and points out the center of the article. The whole text has a total of seven natural paragraphs, starting with the heartwarming story of a girl who has received a lot of care, and thinking of the story of a doctor and a driver as a man, and ending with the author expressing his own arguments and lyrics, naming the center of the article, pointing out that there is no lack of warmth in our society. Mutual care, love, tolerance, and encouragement between people can make our society full of love.

And the skinny feeling of reality is an old tree of time, a little craggy, even if the mood is light, it is only the renovation of the old version. I haven't woken up, it's dusk and I'm alone, although there is still a residual temperature, it is also a story that is gradually drifting away, there is the deep affection of thousands of rivers and mountains, and finally it is drowned in scattered tidbits; In the end, it disappeared into the surging tide; Hidden deep in the sea of memories.

Looking at the passing sun and moon, looking back and thinking about the stability of the present world and the quiet years. I want to talk to the past time, talk, chat, and remember the sculls ferry, think of the past, the memory sets sail again, think about it, read it a little, leave a letter to the old time, leave a trace to the old years, I just hope that it will not be forgotten, will not be lost.

Never give up, recall; Don't grieve or complain to drive and miss. Time is in front, shadow is behind, holding a wisp of green silk in the case, casually, the small and fragmented past, gradually become soft fingers, a little bit to be calm, a little bit of wind and clouds, shallow meditation, Wan Er smiled, I hope that the story of the past is still between the water and clouds, or the initial memory, we are still the years, the simple child.

Let the heart move with the wind, the wind with the thought, walk slowly with the fate at will, make an indifferent grass and a flower, and green the hillside fields in spring; Xia Lai washed and dyed the picturesque rivers and mountains; In autumn, the maple is red and countless acacia brocades; In winter, the plum and snow dance love the three life stones. With the change of the seasons, slowly leave, gently look back, go and go, go, take it calmly, and the memories are still there. Let the memory be free with the wind, fluttering with the innocence of the original heart, the sails are raised, and the thoughts are carried to the voyage!