My essay has always been bad, please help me change it, thank you

My language has always been pretty good I want to help you First of all, don't get angry I really help you Your essay has no actual content It's a bit empty Although the description is good, it makes people look like a running water fight And you have very few transitions It's like your place :"I used to think that God would give me victory, that God would give me the opportunity to work miracles, and I spent my days in peace. However, it is not me who wins and works miracles, but someone else.

Later, when I found out that I still had people who lacked a sense of revenge as "fellow degenerates" at the end of the world, I thought I shouldn't be them

In Beckett's work, two ragged, stinking tramps, Estragon and Vladimir. They are waiting for Godot under a dead tree on a country lane, who is Godot? Why wait?

The two are also not clear. They just waited inexplicably, killing time with dreamy dialogue and boring movements. In the end, Godot did not come, so they waited again the next night, but the next day Godot did not come, so they had to continue waiting.

Even if I'm ordinary, I can't always keep my eyes on waiting like Estragan or Vladimir – waiting for Godot for no reason, no matter how good and beautiful Godot is in dreams. Life tells me that only by moving forward can we have a beautiful future. "

There's no overhead between your paragraphs, which makes people look illogical, and you should add an excess, which would be better, and you say that you're not working hard to win, and it's often someone else, and you're not describing your psychology in detail, and I think it's important to have a psychology here, and you can write about what you're doing when you're not working hard, and what others are doing, and you can contrast them to show the reason for their success.

You have too much flowery language, you should be more earthy, otherwise it will give people a feeling of empty gorgeousness! Flashy

Truth be told, the table smashed bricks

1.You don't understand the work of waiting for Godot thoroughly, and you don't understand it this way.

2.Empty words, list of facts, how to say success, success, nothing can not see examples 3(Personal opinion) read enough books and can be said to be erudite, but why are they so empty words, it makes people feel so disgusting.

And the quote is not the whole article to quote, the quote is the finishing touch, not the mighty water of the Yangtze River.

4.The two words in the postscript can be dropped three times, and the end of the postscript is very good.

5.I can't understand the passage of the Book of Changes, what does it mean to "I know, to break the dream, no matter how strong the door on the other end of the dream is, I must be self-reliant on the voyage"?

Also, there are too many references. Must not be incisive. I read a lot of things and don't know what I'm talking about.

You use the technique of "seeing the big from the small" to highlight the "moving", and the environment you repeatedly render highlights the nobility of the characters from the side, and lifts the word "moving" out of the water, feeling your intentions!

Write more touching words!!

The beginning is not good, it can be like this:

If, if I only had three days to live, I wouldn't cry, I wouldn't get angry, I wouldn't do what I wanted ......

The true feeling is very good, that is, the beginning of the paragraph is too bland, and you can try to write different words at the beginning of each paragraph. On the third day, if you write separately very suddenly, you can merge them a little and try to use some flowery words.

Always quarrel with the leader and quarrel to always reflect our situation to the leader, the name of the nation is changed to the nation, your love to nurture every student is changed to your love to feed every student, and you are ready to abandon your studies and ready to abandon your studies.

Let's revise it yourself, it's well written, just change it smoothly.

Hope it helps you (* hee-hee......