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1 2 Segment connection is not smooth.

My mother was not good at words in my memory, which made me feel very disappointed when I came home every time I failed, but I was not comforted.

Instead. My mother was not a good word in my memory, and it made me very disappointed that I didn't find comfort when I came home every time I failed.

Gaze with your heart and don't be afraid.

Not smooth. Didn't my father say I could draw well?

Instead. Didn't my father say I could draw well?

Take me through setbacks, give me the courage to set sail again, and let my dreams last forever.

It doesn't match the meaning of the paragraph. Vast.

Party ihh go home will you plan well sister to come home and see what she sees.

1. It was 40 degrees at the time, and I was...Take the second one out at that time 2、Although I was not conscious at the time, but I...However, it was changed to but 3, but despite this, my condition was more serious......Still, change to even this 4、My parents sent me to....My attending physician ......Take out one of mine.

Because of me.

There are not many people in the world, and there are many people who are less than me, but without me in my family, it is different.

Mom has to do housework and go to work, so she has little free time. However, if I had helped my mom with the housework, she wouldn't have been so tired.

I remember one time, when it was almost 12 noon, my mother asked me to go grocery shopping and come back, and then cook. I agreed. After a while, the task was completed, and at this time, I was tired, but I was very happy, because at noon my mother was not as tired as before.

On Sundays, Mom and Dad were watching TV at home and didn't think it was fun, but with me, it was different. I came up with a "ghost idea", play hide and seek, the winner eats a piece of skill, and the loser will let me ride as a horse, of course, if I lose, I will not be punished.

We started to hide and seek, and after my mother and I hid, my father came to look for us, but my father saw me, and I didn't let my father tell me, and told my father and mother to hide there, and there was no doubt about it, my mother became a "horse", but I became a little knight. An ordinary Sunday made me paint a colorful color, and it was no longer ordinary.

If our family doesn't have me, my parents may be happy every day, because they all have a life, and they won't worry about me every day, but with me, my parents are desperate to earn money for me to go to school, for me to eat、、、 and worry about me every day, afraid that I will be unhappy at school, afraid that I will quarrel with my classmates, afraid that I will be sick. But then come to think of it, what would they do if they didn't have me? Because of my parents, I have a living guarantee when I am old.

Once, my father was sick, and my mother was so busy with work that she barely had time to see my father. I took on the responsibility of taking care of my father, every day after school, I had to go to buy some food, go to see my father, under my care, my father's illness got better day by day, and the aunts who came to see my father called me a good child. Mom and Dad also gave me the title of "good baby".