Write it yourself, guide it by a master, and if you say something good, you can chase the score!!

Jealous, right? Tell me what I think:

Personally, I think the artistic conception is good, but the expression is not good.

1. "The smile is like the summer sun, and the eyes are like the sea", the meaning of these two sentences should actually be that he looked at her smile, he was intoxicated by her smile, and his eyes were full of her. But the translation of your sentence into general language is: her smile is like the scorching sun in summer, and the rays of the scorching sun are like the eyes of the sea, and a little whiter, that is, the smile is put into the eyes = the scorching sun is thrown into the ocean, which is incomparable, or cannot express the meaning you want to express;

2. "He is a bystander, laughing and watching her play with her female companion, I am also a bystander, I can only watch their eyes occasionally look at each other's eyes to show off", these four sentences are to compare "me" and "him", or "she" in that aspect of the attitude towards "me" and "him", they look at each other and smile, sweet and sweet, and "I" can only stand aside, enjoying this endless loneliness and unwillingness, but "can only watch their eyes occasionally look at each other to show off" This sentence is a little more straightforward, or to express it this way, the strength is a little worse. Because people are lovers in the first place, if it is said to be "showing off", then the mutual love between them feels really cowardly rather than really loving each other, just to show off. Here I think you should express their feelings of love vividly and vividly, and at the same time describe your unwilling and envious feelings, you can use many techniques, such as borrowing, metaphor, synaesthesia, etc.;

3. In the last four sentences, I was startled when I saw it, the wind blew off the "wisp of withered grass" on "her" head, and I thought you compared her hair to withered grass, and it was blown off, scared to death! Actually, it really blew off the "wisp of dead grass" on her head, right? But I don't know how this sublimates your whole poetic system.

I know you want to borrow the "warmth" of others to contrast your "loneliness as a bystander", but if you take a serious look, have you done it?

Well, that's all, it's not good, a lot of advice. I still hope that a lover will eventually become a family, and I sincerely wish you can find the other half of your life who can "look at each other and smile", and silence is better than sound at this time!

So so! The summer sun is a bit far-fetched to describe laughter!

You stand on the bridge and look at the scenery.

The people watching the view are watching you from upstairs.

The bright moon decorates your window.

You decorate other people's dreams.

A bit of symbolist poetry, very indifferent, ironic, it seems that a very sophisticated person is detached from the world, standing on a high place overlooking the joys and sorrows of the world, and pity the entanglement and ignorance of the world

There is a taste of repulsion.

It's really good, the imagery is novel, the technique is unique, and it seems that it does feel good.

I'm just trying. —

Mary clung to the trunk of the tree, her delicate body fluttering in the wind. Shockingly—she bit Robert's shirt tightly with her tiny teeth, and the blood, dripping, stained the placket red. However, the weak body was incomparably strong, tenacious, with long hair fluttering, and the blue sky, white clouds, mountains, and rocks became the eternal background, setting off Mary's pale but incomparably radiant face—the light of faith was forever frozen!

If I have a lot of money in my pocket, I can buy a lot of books that I like.

2. I don't have much money in my pocket, so I can't buy books that I like.