Original poems, I hope you will evaluate them. 20

Why is the first floor so harsh, I think it's well written?

Feelings can be expressed, the scale is also passable, the most important thing in writing poetry is not the format of the life, the important thing is to fully express the poet's emotions, I think the landlord writes very well, the expression of feelings is complete, the words and sentences are also very good, although a little idle and green, but the whole poem is very complete.

Let's say a few words when we meet in the net. What is poetry? What is the term?

What is a koji? What is a word card? I used to write "words", and I didn't have any cards, no rules, no rules, but then I changed it.

There are restrictions on the rhythm of word cards, although it affects the expression of emotions, but we read Su Shi's "Jiangchengzi - Remembering Dreams", Lu You's "Hairpin Phoenix" and other ancient works, "antelope hanging horns, no trace to be found", the ability to write poems and lyrics is very important, and the foundation is very important. Classical Chinese literature attaches great importance to feelings, meanings, and contexts, and pursues the integration of imagery and imagery. However, these days, as a non-professional person, it is not bad to write such an antique modern poem, and the level of this poem is still very clear, as a means of sending his own emotions - it is enough.

There's no need to say what kind of poetry it is

If you have to add one, it's the first floor, antique modern poetry, your poem, the emotional expression is good, the tone is unified.

However, the rhetoric is a little stiff, and it will be better to change it!

He has the potential to be a poet

The feelings are sincere, giving people the feeling that they flow naturally from the bottom of their hearts, but they are inevitably a little too casual, and the structure and plainness are not neat enough.

It should be regarded as a classical poem, in fact, you don't need to deliberately care about the genre, it is an essay, as long as you like it.

The format is very neat, and it is rare to see anyone writing poetry now, especially this kind of antique poetry. Talent!

There is no plainness of poetry, no casualness of words, unlike the style of music.

It can also be an antique modern poem.

Overall, so-so, with a few flaws. "Two boundless": the living and the dead, the boundless meaning, sound, smile, and appearance become more and more dim with the passage of time, and the impression becomes blurred. Since it is a love breakup, and it is not a farewell to life and death, the connection between the top and bottom, the use of two boundless here is a bit exaggerated, and it is used in the wrong place;

Treading the waves through the wind and rain, the world is desolate. Yesterday there was a long laugh, and today they are separated. This sentence is good, but what does a love breakup have to do with the world? Forced to break up by social pressure?

The heart hurts slightly, and the body hurts all over the body. Since it's a love breakup, I don't believe you just have a "slight" pain in your heart!

The cold wind was blowing, and the tears on both sides of the road were very vivid.

At night, I dreamed of my hometown, and I burst into tears! It's a bit of an impractical theme again. Homesick after a failed relationship?

Dare to ask if the landlord is a girl? If not, you're too weak (heartfelt words, don't be angry) Hair cang, young man, wait for another twenty years and you will use it again, I promise it will definitely work.

In summary, the content is a bit exaggerated and a bit off-topic. Borrowing is a bit unreasonable. The feelings are not expressed in a gush, and they are a little contrived.

All of the above are sincere words, and I don't like to hide them.

I love that word! Add a friend.

Read this poem to appreciate it. The wind and rain have been blowing, and it may not be very bleak. Laughter was common yesterday, but today we are separated and sad. The heart hurts, the body is not injured, the cold wind is coming, and the laughter is refreshing. "Returning home from a dream at night", there is a long way to go after the breakup!

Accompany you to get drunk and laugh for 3,000 times, and don't complain about leaving the dead.

Health and happiness. Hu Bingyan.

Health is everyone's greatest wealth, and marriage is the most beautiful note of family.

Children are the greatest pride of parents, and harmony is the most beautiful happiness in a hundred years.

Only when you are healthy can you live a long life, and only when you respect each other can you raise your eyebrows.

Ziyan can be happy and harmonious around the beam, and mutual tolerance can be brilliant.

Forehead. Why doesn't it read fluently. I don't understand any of that. Hehe. Only according to instinct.

In this season of flowers.

But how sad I am.

Feeling] The heart of the past from the beginning of the more (feeling the past, the past curtain on the heart) thanks] Jun help me to perfection (thank you for helping our business to perfection) have] empty often listen to the difficult to give up (if you are free in the future, please contact often, listen to our difficult to give up) you] if Qingyun goes to the appointment again (if the career is on the road again, we must meet again to make an appointment) four sentences of hidden head [thank you for having you], with respect, gratitude and blessings, pure personal originality, should be able to meet your requirements.

Asking for good poetry? Poetry is acceptable;

You're asking the right person.

What I have is this, do you want ancient poems or the current spike shed?

But I also have the ancient ones.

There is also a modern one.

It's all in my blog; You can take a look at it.

In the dream, the line is alone under the flower moon.

Drunk and falling asleep.

The secluded environment is breezy.

Fierce Zen Giant Falcon Yang.

The Hui River flows east into the sea.

Heavenly Dao Gen idle sails.

It is difficult to walk in self-danger.

Also shadow the Thorn Mountain.

Minus the word magnolia.

I'm really ashamed. Swept away Yan Fu's resentful tears.

Providence does nothing. It has not been helped.

North and South. The long water flows eastward, and the people are drunk.

How much to wander. The vicissitudes of life are separated from the geese.

The sound is slow and dry, the twilight is dawning, and it is lonely and sad.

Unexpectedly, the emotion swelled with willows.

Huai waved the dark mountains and clear waters, several times disabled, and the illusion was negative.

In the drunken dream, the golden wind, the white elephant and the green lion stay together.

The vicissitudes of life.

The cold jade is warm, and the lock is broken.

Looking at the sky, who is safe at night?

The maple soul dances according to the bright moon, and the rivers and lakes are not to blame.

Downplayed, bumpy road, how much sorrowful.

Sauvignon Blanc smiled emptyly.

Crying, empty, leisurely, and chilling.

Zen Qing a dream.

Shi Xianfan Yu Huanhuan.

Drunken West Tianji Paradise.

But I was not settled.

Fortune Operator: Cherish Time.

The black hair didn't know.

The white head has regrets.

I often hate being happy when I was a child.

and there will be no more days.

Arrow race to the east of the river.

The foals are cold.

Billions of years are like a thought.

Vow to fight for the dawn and twilight.

3,000 miles across the homeland, 100,000 years of rivers and mountains;

There is no end to vertical and horizontal, talking and laughing in the world.

How deep is the heartfelt affection? Acacia rain. A piece of infatuation, full of laughter in the dream.

Love is a beautiful woman for thousands of miles, and love is a bosom friend for eternity. Since then, the red dust has been a companion, and the years of life have been long.