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My new discovery.

There are many people and many things in life that are worth understanding and learning!

As the sun set, I walked home on my way, thinking about the test paper with a score of 79, feeling very depressed and guilty, and wondering how to get my dad to sign it. I didn't do well in the exam and failed to live up to my father's expectations of me!

Suddenly, a leaf fell onto my shoulder, down my arm and into my palm, this almost decaying leaf touched my heart, beside me there was a tall tree, trying to bloom its last green, those once vigorous green leaves, now can not stop the late autumn evening breeze to play, one by one left the "mother" embrace and fell from the branch. As I walked slowly towards the tree, I always had an intuition that told me that it would solve my confusion and sorrow.

Under the tree, another leaf fell and hit my face, and then fell to the ground, I squatted down and picked up the dead leaf, looking at this leaf, I realized that autumn is coming. What was once lush and full of life has become a thing of the past at this time, they are all old, and can only become the nourishment of the next season's new leaves, looking at the tragic old age of these leaves, I can't help but have a trace of regret in my heart.

Let go of the leaf and let it return to the earth. A gust of wind blew, and the old leaves fell one after another, leaving only a few pieces that remained on the branches stubbornly against the wind. "Falling red is not a ruthless thing, turning into spring mud is more protective of flowers." The big trees use the old leaves of the old area to replace the prosperity of the next season.

In real life, we have also encountered difficulties and setbacks. We should work hard to overcome it, to overcome it! Turn it into our motivation to move forward and meet the next success.

I always feel that the emotional rendering is not enough, and it is relatively one-sided, but it is a good angle to start from life, but it is necessary to indicate the content you want to express and the ideas you want to embody in the lyricism. But overall, polish and polish, the article will be better.

The second paragraph was changed to: The sun is setting, and the 79-point test paper makes my heart sink slowly like a falling sunset. Dad's smiling face full of anticipation appeared in front of me little by little, how should I face Dad, how to sign my dad who works hard for me every day?

Pick = ten: "Ten Joys of Life" 1 omitted 1000 words here).

The rich and colorful campus life has given us a lot of sweetness, sourness and bitterness, as well as endless time and thought. The bits and pieces between teachers and students, and between classmates, are like a continuous spring rain, silently nourishing my heart. Although there are often unpleasant and unpleasant things in life, as long as we discover and feel with our hearts, then happiness is everywhere!

Friends, I have nothing to offer you, let's share my happiness together! Actually, happiness is really simple! In order for you to witness the joyful atmosphere of the campus, please follow our webcam to explore Lens One:

Look at! The teachers of Class 6 (2) were filled with joyful laughter, and it turned out that everyone was busy arranging the scene of the June 1st program. There are a lot of good things to help people in it!

Zhipeng helped Shihan carry the table out; Boxin helped Zhou Huan put up the window grilles; Aimin helped Zhu Dan hang up the ribbon; Li Tong helped Mei Lian arrange the program ......That's my first joy: being helpful. Shot 2:

On the playground, we were all working hard to practice radio drills. Because the broadcast drill competition is about to start. It was getting dark, and everyone's stomachs began to "gurgle", but the students were still practicing attentively.

Finally, we came together in the competition and won first place in one fell swoop. That's the second joy I learned: coming together.

Shot 3: "Class 5 (2) has been awarded the mobile red flag for six consecutive weeks, and I hereby commend you. "We're praising our class on the radio!

There was thunderous applause in the classroom. Of course, such an honor is inseparable from the hard work and cooperation of the students: after class, Xiao Xin took the initiative to sweep the floor clean, and Zhihua put the tables and chairs neatly; After school.

Because of the students' hard work, the mobile red flag will "fall to my home"! That's my third joy: hard work.

I also had a lot of fun in the group: being considerate of others, being honest, optimistic, ......All in all, I had a lot of fun! Let's do it!

Come on, I'm only in the sixth grade

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