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First time fishing.

On a scorching summer day, a little girl was sitting by the lake and fishing with a red fishing rod. That little girl is me.

It was a summer two years ago, and it was my first time fishing, and even though it was my first time fishing, I was very confident.

I picked up the rod and put on the bait. With a flick of my hand, I threw the line into the river. I held the rod in my hand, staring intently at the fish drift, "whoosh", the line let me pull up, I didn't fish, but I was not discouraged, because this is my first time fishing, I can't avoid not catching.

I looked at my brother next to me, and he didn't catch it (diao) either. I repeated the action just now, I thought about what my father taught me, the line was thrown into the river by me, I held the fishing rod and waited quietly, a breeze blew, the fish floated, then I was dazzled, and I heard a "whoosh" sound, the line was almost pulled and broken by me, and I began to be a little depressed. I saw that my father and brother were catching a big carp easily, and I was a little unconvinced.

I saw that the bottom of the water was turned over by the fish, and on the surface of the water, from time to time, fish spit out the water ring. Suddenly, my eyes lit up, and I saw that there was a ripple getting closer and closer to my fishing rod, and the fish float was slowly sinking, and there was still one drift that sank, so I lifted the rod in a hurry, and the fish escaped. At this time, my father caught a big fish, and I was so envious, and he said to me:

Be patient in doing things, as the saying goes, 'you can't eat hot tofu in a hurry'. Listening to my father's words, I lowered the hook again, and this time, my eyes were fixed on the float without blinking. Another fish came to eat, I held my breath and waited patiently, and when the three fish floated and sank, I suddenly mentioned that this time my rod was pressed into an arc, and I knew that I had caught a big fish.

When the fish knew that it was a trap, it immediately got into the water and tried to escape, but the more it escaped, the tighter the hook became, and in the end, it was still caught. When I mentioned it, it was a big red and big carp, I was very happy, and my brother saw it, a little unconvinced, "What's the big deal, didn't you catch a big fish." Cut!

Dad encouraged me "Awesome, who let this be my daughter." ”

Hahaha" I deliberately showed off my money in front of my brother, and my brother said, "Stop!" Stop laughing, it's annoying. Didn't you just catch a bigger one, isn't mine smaller than yours, as for showing off like this?

I thought to myself, "My brother has always bullied me, and this time I finally breathed a sigh of relief." Hahahahaha. ”

You should write about the embarrassing scene at that time, and then write about how the teacher and classmates comforted you, or what you thought in your heart, so as to highlight the happy mood after winning the award later, this is my opinion, my language skills are not good.

The writing is smooth and you write your true feelings. Not bad.

You can use more descriptive techniques appropriately.