Autumn Fengyu I would like you to give me a lot of advice 10

There are many rhyming words that rhyme with ui, and this word uses blowing, falling, breaking, tears, tears, falling, tears.

Obviously, the rhyme is a bit too deliberate. It's unnatural, too much repetitive.

This also led to the incongruity of Pingxuan, the latter sentence, hating the dead leaves of this life and floating autumn rain tears, unwilling to fall, but the sky has no tears, which seems cumbersome.

In addition, among the poems, there are very good vernacular words that can be written, and there are very few. Like the autumn wind, it is inappropriate to describe it with blowing words.

Give some advice, read a little more ancient poems, and find some feelings.

It's a little sad. The autumn wind blows, and the residual leaves fall. "It's a picture of the after-autumn scene.

The heart is also broken, and the heart is broken. "It's about your own sadness, and there should be something sad.

Hate this life, the dead leaves are scattered! Autumn rain tears, unwilling to fall. "It means that you are unwilling to give birth, and I don't know what it is.

However, there are no tears in the sky, "complaining that the sky is ruthless."

Sadness runs through the whole poem.

Autumn wind, residual leaves, heartbreak, broken intestines, dead leaves, autumn rain, feeling the sky.

Twice writing about leaves, I suggest writing only one leaf and replacing the other leaf with something else. You can rearrange the order of things, from far to near, from high things to low things to write, so that the reader will have a feeling of looking down, from quiet and vivid, but also add a touch of order!

Broken tears, autumn rain tears, no tears in the sky.

Tears drop into my heart!

Sadness everywhere, allegorical in the scene!

Not bad. I don't know which is better, "blowing" or "resenting".

The word "also" should not be as good as "has".

"hate" should be replaced by "pity" or "regret".

"Drifting" becomes "butterfly dance", and the beauty of autumn is more poignant.

The dry wind is howling, the cold and snow are raised, just wait for the coming year, thousands of miles to fight!

I don't know what to say, and I can't make any evaluations. However, I didn't read it well. But I have to say, you write well.

The upper rung is very elegant, and the lower rung is a little vulgar.

At the beginning, I had a feeling, but I only had one feeling when I saw Xia Yan, this benevolent brother was dumped.

The upper rung is good, and the lower rung **.

The upper que is elegant, and the lower que is ......It can be regarded as "elegant and vulgar appreciation".

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Li Yi'an is proud of the fisherman.

The sky is cloudy and foggy, and the galaxy wants to turn a thousand sails to dance.

It's like a dream soul returning to the emperor's place.

Wen Tianyu, earnestly ask me where I go?

I reported that the road was long and the sun was twilight, and there were amazing sentences in learning poetry.

Ninety thousand miles of wind is moving.

The wind rested, and the canoe blew the three mountains.

Su Shi's "Nian Nujiao, Chibi Nostalgia" ***'s "Qinyuan Spring." Snow" Yue Fei "Man Jianghong".

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Here are some pauses to be aware of:

I said, You are the April day of the earth;

Laughter lit up the winds on all sides;

Light and spirited in the glory of spring, dancing and changing.

You are the clouds and smoke in the early April sky, the soft wind blowing at dusk, the stars shining unintentionally, and the drizzle falling in front of the flowers.

That light, that graceful, you are

Xianyan, the crown of a hundred flowers, you wear

You are naïve and majestic

You are the full moon of the night.

After the snow melts, that goose yellow, you like

Fresh first bud green you are

Tenderness and joy,

The water light floats the white lotus that you are looking forward to in your dreams.

You are the blossom of a tree, the murmur of a swallow among the beams, you are love, you are warmth, you are hope, you are the April day of the world!

1. Lin Huiyin's "You Are the April Day of the World" recitation soundtrack, recommended to use Brahms's lullaby.

Lin Hui's poem should have been written for his son, with expectations, throbbing, and euphemism, which is matched with this song, elegant and wonderful.

2, "You are the April Day of the World" original poem:

I said, You are the April day of the earth;

Laughter lit up the winds on all sides;

Light and spirited in the glory of spring, dancing and changing.

You are the clouds and smoke in the early April sky, the soft wind blowing at dusk, the stars shining unintentionally, and the drizzle falling in front of the flowers.

That light, that graceful, you are, you wear the crown of fresh flowers, you are innocent, solemn, you are the full moon of the night.

After the snow melts, that goose yellow, you like

Fresh first bud green you are

Tender and joyful, the water floats the white lotus you are looking forward to in your dreams.

You are the blossom of a tree, the murmur of a swallow among the beams, you are love, you are warmth, you are hope, you are the April day of the world!

3. The poem "Lotus Lantern" recommends the Sanskrit singing of Louts' "Air and Angels" to fit this dreamlike heart

4. The original text of "Lotus Lantern".

If my heart is a lotus flower.

A lit wax is shot out in the center.

Although the screen is only that one cut light.

I also want it to be proudly brilliant.

I'm not afraid it's just my personal lotus lantern.

I can't see the rugged life before and after——

Ups and downs: It clings to the waves of the sea of people.

Light and shade have become the secret of its heart.

Just the light flashed and the flowers bloomed

Like a light boat sailing out of the river-

It's like drifting with the waves of fate.

Wait for the gust of wind to push into the distance.

Count as a passer-by in the universe.

Knowing this exquisite life and calmly dying.

This erratic journey is also a-

It's a beautiful dream.

I said, You are the April day of the earth;

Laughter lit up the winds on all sides;

Light and spirited in the glory of spring, dancing and changing.

You are the clouds and smoke in the early April sky, the soft wind blowing at dusk, the stars shining unintentionally, and the drizzle falling in front of the flowers.

That light, that graceful, you are, you wear the crown of fresh flowers, you are innocent, solemn, you are the full moon of the night.

After the snow melts, that goose yellow, you like

Fresh first bud green you are

Tender and joyful, the water floats the white lotus you are looking forward to in your dreams.

You are the blossom of a tree, the murmur of a swallow among the beams, you are love, you are warmth, you are hope, you are the April day of the world!

The pause has been drawn out for you, Lin Huiyin's works are more suitable for girls' emotional aspects, pay attention to grasp the tone of a few adjectives.

In terms of emotional tone.

Although there are different views from all walks of life.

Some people see it as a love poem.

Some people see it as a hymn to life, blooming maternal love.

It's up to you to grasp that.

In reciting poems, the speed of speech is slow, and the tone is gentle but not weak, you can try to listen to the soundtrack a few more times.

Find the feeling from the **.

If you don't think this song is for you.

I can help you choose another one.

It's soft to type.

Give a few more points, okay?

The soundtrack can be tried with "Pipa Language", you can listen to it, it is very feeling**, be real when reciting, invest your feelings, don't exaggerate, good luck.

Lin Hai's pipa language.

The pauses in recitation should be noted by syllables.

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The soundtrack should be quiet, not complicated.

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