A poem to help evaluate it! A poem asks for an evaluation

First of all, it's not right.

Peaceful, mediocre.

It's a lot of peace.

It's mediocre.

It's mediocre.

Seeing through the red face is intoxicating.

The spring heart seal in the fog has been divided.

When the wind is flourishing.

Hearing the ear, he had no choice but to guard his family.

In the third sentence, it is best to replace the tense with a four-tone word; A poem generally should not appear the same word twice, because not everyone is Li Bai can write the phoenix on the phoenix stage and the phoenix goes to the taikong river artesian.

And it's best not to create new words in poetry, such as "Excited", "Sealed and divided", "Hearing the ear" in this poem, guarding the family The language of the poem must be poetic, otherwise it will become a vernacular ** What is it called?

If you are really interested in poetry, I recommend taking a look at the book on rhythm written by Wang Li.

Personally, I find poetry fascinating for three things:

1.Subtle and profound, short and concise, the angle is novel and strange, seen unseen, known to unknown people, refreshing, endless aftertaste.

2.The minimalist and mundane things described can deeply move people's hearts and resonate, and such poems may be simple, but they are also extremely loved.

3.It is full of rhythm, rhythm, catchy, and children can groan.

It seems that none of these three points are seen in this poem, nor are they in Pingxuan, hehe.

Nai people. Seeing through the red face is intoxicating.

The spring heart seal in the fog has been divided.

When the wind is flourishing.

Hearing the ear, he had no choice but to guard his family.

Non-mainstream atypical poetry, as can be seen from the title. I didn't understand what was being said in the whole poem, really, maybe it was because I was clumsy. Originally, the first sentence was a little hurt and used wine to dispel sorrows, and the second sentence said "the heart has been sealed", which seems to open the heart.

"Fenghua Yemao" reads awkwardly, changed from "Fenghua Zhengmao", but what does Fenghua mean, this should be exquisite; The word "Furious" is abruptly coined, and it is not in the vernacular. The last sentence is inexplicable, only heard, where does it come from? Guarding the family, there is no good closure and sublimation at the end...

This is not a poem, at least ignoring my IQ in reading poetry, which is not a seven-absolute in terms of metrics.

The first sentence contains spring, summer, autumn and winter, that is, a year, and the second sentence expresses lovesickness, and the wild goose passes the book. The third sentence expresses the sadness due to longing, and the fourth sentence further expresses one's sadness through the emotion of the rush of time, using the big as a metaphor for the small, so I can't sleep.

I suggest that the word "not" in the fourth sentence should be replaced by the word "no".

ps: A family's words, please Haihan.

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Dear,It's better to be a little more subtle in the words of poetry.。。 It's a bit of a worldly way to write like this.

Personal opinion, please forgive me!

If you insist on saying that it can only be a limerick poem, first, what is the format, second, the title is not right, third, so many, one. Ha ha.

This poem is written with a bit of an unclear theme, and some places are not suitable for the first half of the poem, and you can almost not listen to other people's questions from the **class, and think of your future path? The following poem is white, and it is very taboo to write poetry, and the above is a little better.

The singing voice is slightly rippling, and the feelings are deep and far-reaching.

When I was young, I didn't know the turmoil, and I looked at the sky and the sea from afar, and the road was long.

The young phoenix cries blood, the golden branch dances, and the new plum is full of bitter cold fragrance.

Zhijian is not afraid of Tongyun, and finally waits for the shadow to bloom.

I wrote a random poem based on your poem Bad Writing I hope it will help you.

The second song is added or deleted by your father.

14 years old, it doesn't matter which one you wrote! You're already the best of your age, yes, if you're willing to work harder, poets don't dare to be, but it's okay to export chapters!! (I feel like the first song is still better, but the first song doesn't rhyme in some places).

The road ahead. **The music in the class is swaying, like an immersive dream nursery rhyme.

The teacher laughed and talked about the problem, and everyone was flustered.

The only girl raised her hand, and both times she got it right.

The teacher nodded and said yes, and everyone applauded and said yes.

Remembering the past, I was too young to know that the destiny of heaven was king.

Thinking about it now, it is finally clear that there is only one way to know yourself.

Study painting skills, write articles, no matter the hardships and break the dawn.

The road of life is one by one, and it is inevitable that you will step on the wrong cage.

Don't regret, don't hesitate, let go today, just for the road ahead!

The rooster calls the rising east, a refreshing summer morning. ­

Wake up to the dream in the shadows, and go out in clothes. ­

The green mountains are misty and misty, and the water is moist and blue. ­

The tender grass is half dewy, and the floral fragrance is moist and windy. ­

The old man hangs his back, and the young man raises his voice. ­

If you don't change it, your poem is not even, and the rhyme before and after should be symmetrical.

The good dream party awakens to the square awakens to the dream, and the flower fragrance is full of mountain road, and the mountain road is changed to the mountain flower fragrance.

The green mountains embrace the clear water, and the tender grass is half tearful.

Heart, line does not rhyme. Nothing.

Leisure will be Du Kang.

Drunk and awake to see sorghum.

Flashy dreams.

Lonely and desolate.

The first three sentences are too familiar. The last sentence is too cheesy.

The geese are shattered and the sunset flies into the sky.

The wind sends smoke into my heart.

At dusk, the sun swings on the blue water.

The long wind sends me away.

Two or four sentences of heart, line does not rhyme. One or three sentences are suspected of being messed up.

Pedestrians swim with smiling faces.

Sincerity wants to make a light boat on the stream.

They have disturbed the affairs of the world.

and make the back stream of the clear wave boat.

No rhyme, thick words.

Lunar Epsom Silver Line. On a cold day, a lonely man leans in front of the window.

Sigh and sleep.

Looking up, I saw that the bright moon was still in the sky.

By asking Chang'e to be safe.

The long sky and the moon are like a lesson.

Can you dance with me by the Guanghan laurel tree?

Bold words.

When you write, you will make progress.

The world is okay, but the other words are too superficial and the feelings are shallow.

It's good to take it as a personal hobby, and you'll gain more from reading more famous articles.

The intention of hiding the head is good, and the rhyme is not in place.

Although the main idea is clear, the words and sentences are scattered.

This poem is written on the March 8th Women's Day, every household is full of the warmth of home, many laughter forms a big family, the ladies are very happy, they all dance and sing songs, and many people also send blessings.

Well written! It can be called the culmination of hazy poetry! Envy is like a surging river, which cannot be broken

I think so, the culture is really high. It's just that there is a point, the feelings are expressed at once, and there is no aftertaste after reading it. This is my opinion, I don't know what you think.

It's so moving! It's so emotional! It's fascinating!