I wrote a poem and asked you to comment on it, title: I don t know, do you know?

It's tongue-twisting, but it's also affectionate! In fact, it doesn't matter if it's good or not, as long as it's from the heart.

I don't know if you know" is too awkward, I'm afraid that if you read it to her or she will bite her tongue when she reads it. Also pay attention to the rhyme. Although it hurts, I can't help but tell the truth, this is really not poetry.

Well, the writing is good, the feelings are very real, the sentence structure is very neat, you can see your feelings, say a little suggestion, I think the beginning of the poem since it is a rhetorical question, then the question can be raised at the end, otherwise it will be a little dazed to read, I don't understand what I don't know, if I say "I don't know" is just "rippling in a dream, warm and drunk." Reading is lacking in content, and I always feel that I haven't written it all, such as: "I don't know if you know, I'm in a dream, rippling in the waves of the dream, rippling with my love in the air I don't know if you know, I'm in a dream, your warmth, my drunkenness, drunkenness is my heart only for a certain glimpse of your shocking silhouette."

Hope it helps.

I don't know if you know." It's a bit of a saying that there are variables. Originally, it was also written in this way. But this one is really a bit of a mouthful. There is also no sublimation behind the poem. The meaning of the sentences before and after is somewhat similar.

But maybe they will like it.

Appeal (1974).

***。Parents are loyal to the country, why are they afraid of cutting off their heads?

If it is popular all over the world today, who will guard the country?

The industry is not finished, the body is tired, and the temples are autumn;

You and I, endure the long-cherished wish and pay it to the bottom of the river?

The poem was originally titled "Appealing to Heartfelt Feelings." Gift *** comrade", "the industry is not done", coincidentally is the biggest regret of the great man in his later years, "who guards the country" makes the old man difficult to let go, unable to give up, and even contains some elements of distrust. Although "the body is tired and the temples are autumn", how can the "rivers and mountains be popular" in exchange for the countless "parents" who have donated their lives to the country in filial piety?

However, seeing the figures of his comrades-in-arms leaving one by one, this great man who has been in the limelight in his life also deeply felt powerless.

Parents are loyal and loyal to the country, when have they ever been greedy for life and afraid of death? Now that the whole world is a red regime, who will wait for the country? has not yet achieved his own career, and his body and mind are already tired, and his temples are gray; Can we bear to let our long-awaited wish go away like water, and be willing to be only ordinary people in this life?

Wei Zhuang "Early Hair".

The early fog is thicker than the rain, and the fields are deep and the rice is low.

The chickens did not sing when they went out, and the passers-by neighed frequently.

The tree color is hidden in the store, and the sound of the spring is dark.

The lone bard destroys his hand for thirty miles, and the city and the moon are still like a ruin.

This five-character poem is always written in close to the word "early" in the title. "The fog is thick", "the chicken is not singing", "the horse is hissing", "the tree color is hidden in the distance", and "the sound of the spring is dark" are all because of "early". "Du" and "Yin Thirty Miles, the City Moon is still like a wolf" are also written "early".

Without a deep life experience, it would not have been written so realistically and relevantly.

As for the last couplet of the poem, like the previous triptych, the technique of white drawing is used to write about the hardships of the author's journey. If we pay attention to the part, just look at the word "Ruqi", which is a figurative rhetorical method. I got up early and hurried for thirty miles, and the moonlight was still bright.

Here it can also be said that the technique of setting off, the brighter the moonlight, the more hazy everything around is, and the more prominent the "early" of "hair"!

The word "independence" in the tail couplet is not to complain about having no travel companions, or being far away from home and relatives. It's just that I set off early, and I didn't meet other early travelers for thirty miles all the way.

Therefore, it is debatable to say that the couplet expresses the author's sense of loneliness during his travels. With the company of horses, the moonlight of "Ruqi", the sound of gurgling springs, and the chanting of thirty miles all the way, Yu Hong is lonely!

Maybe it's the poet's first "early hair", everything is so fresh! We even feel that the poet's heart is relaxed and leisurely, and the poet has an appreciative attitude towards the scenery along the way! Of course, the poet overcame great difficulties.

It is no wonder that some people who appreciate this poem mention "free and carefree", "optimistic and open-minded", and "good attitude".

Of course, the poet lives in a foreign country, and loneliness should be a constant feeling, perhaps suffering from this kind of torture before getting up "early". However, in this poem "Early Hair", there is no loneliness and loneliness between the lines, there is a leisurely self-satisfaction in overcoming the difficulties of "early onset", and the strength and open-mindedness behind this leisurely self-satisfaction.

Wei Zhuang (c. 836 - c. 910), a native of Duling in Chang'an (near present-day Xi'an), a poet and lyricist in the late Tang Dynasty, and the former prime minister of Shu in the fifth dynasty. The fourth grandson of Wei Yingwu (737-792), a poet of the Tang Dynasty.

Sujian Dejiang. Meng Haoran Tang Dynasty

Move the boat to park the smoke, and the sunset is new.

The wild sky is low and the trees are low, and Jiang Qingyue is close to people. Moored the ship beside the smoky sandbar, and at sunset a new sorrow came back to my heart.

The fields are boundless, and the sky in the distance is lower than the trees nearby; The river is clear, and the bright moon seems to be more close to people.

Exegesis. Jiande River: refers to a section of the Xin'an River flowing through the western part of Jiande (now Zhejiang).

Boat-moving: rowing a boat. Mooring: Docking the ship.

Yanzhu (zhǔ): refers to a small sandbar shrouded in mist in the river. Smoke: A "ghost".

Nagisa: A small piece of land in the water. "Erya Shishui": "The one who can live in the water is called Zhou, and the small island is called Zhu." ”

Guest: refers to the author himself.

Sorrow: Worried about homesickness for Yuxun.

Wild: Field. Expansive: Empty and ambitious.

Trees in the sky: The canopy hangs low, as if connected to the trees.

The moon is close to people: The moon reflected in the water seems to come close to people. ▲