How to comment on the essay on going to the zoo in the third grade

The "head" of the article: Today, the sun is shining and the sky is cloudless, and we go to the zoo for a spring outing. This is straight to the point. The most commonly used technique in the Book of Songs, the earliest Chinese literary work, is "Xing, Bi, Fu", which is the simplest method of Chinese writing.

The sun was shining and the sky was cloudless, and we went to the zoo for a spring outing in a cheerful mood. But there is no need to write it with elation, because the sun is shining and the sky is cloudless. "Fu" has two meanings:

One refers to symmetrical sentences, and the other is statements. Use symmetrical sentences to state a thing. "The leaves are pale, and the white dew is frost; There is a beautiful woman, on the water side" is the transition from scenery to people.

The east is red, the sun is rising, and China is out of the sky. It is also the technique of "exciting, comparing, and endowing". The symmetry I am talking about is not groundless, and writing articles can be traced back to the source.

Xing, compare, fu, symmetry, metaphor, these methods are all there, covering lyricism and narrative. This kid writes very well.

But in this, you have me, and I have you. "The peach is dying, scorching its bloom. The son of Yu Gui, the home of the room "is Xing, compare, and endow."

Key words: zoo is good 3rd grade 350 words.

Word Count: 350 words essay.

The teacher took the children to the zoo to play. They first came to Monkey Mountain, and saw some monkeys scorching their skins, as if they were performing acrobatics for us; Some are tickling, as if they haven't taken a shower for a few days; Others hang upside down on tree branches, as if swinging. Suddenly, a child threw a pear, and the monkeys rushed over, and a little monkey with a wide and pure spirit quickly grabbed the pear, and it sat triumphantly on the rockery and nibbled on the pear.

The children laughed when they saw it. The zoo is so fun! Famous teacher's comments:

The little author's article should be an essay on looking at pictures, and the article tells the story of the teacher's experience of taking the children to the zoo to play. The children were very happy to see the monkey, and some even threw a pear at the little monkey. Although this child's intentions are good, you can't just feed the animals at the zoo.

The scene of this article is well described, and rich rhetorical devices are used to show the happiness of everyone and the excitement of the zoo, but the theme of the article is not clear. If the author can use the example of the little friend who threw the pear to the little monkey and advise the reader not to do such a thing, then the theme of the article will be more distinct. (Scholastic China Distinguished Teacher:

Teacher Wang Yunlian) 2010-7-5 11:29:00

During the holidays, my parents and I went to the zoo where I wanted to go the most, and I could get up close and personal with them. We first came to the Peacock Garden, which has many peacocks of all sizes. The peacock had a beautiful tail, as if to welcome us.

Then we went to the bird forest, and the first thing I saw was the tall ostriche, and the magpie flying on it, just chirping, as if greeting us. Further on, is my favorite talking parrot, which is not only beautiful but also mimics human speech, and whenever someone passes by it it says, "Hello, hello."

It's so cute! We also saw cute hippos, big and scary rhinos. Little monkeys who love to eat bananas and love to climb trees, very fierce big tigers, big lions with blonde hair, long deer, big black bears, elephants and many other animals.

After playing for most of the day, we were reluctant to leave the zoo that I loved. I'm tired, but I'm happy!

[Part 2].

On Sunday, my dad and mom took my brother and me to the zoo, and we got to the zoo, bought the tickets and went in. As soon as we entered the door, we saw the giant panda, a national first-class protected animal. He seemed to be wearing a white vest, and his face, arms, and legs were black.

I like it the most when it's happy, because it's cute when it's happy.

We were walking forward and we saw the mischievous monkeys. It was like wearing a brown coat, and it seemed to be going to get my mother's phone, and my mother saw it and quickly took it away. But when the clever monkey saw Dad's phone, he ran over as fast as he could, and was almost taken away by the naughty monkey, and Dad turned around and avoided it.

The mischievous monkey finally snatched everything from my brother and me, and screamed mischievously, as if to say, "You are so stupid! ”

Kids, do you like animals? I like small animals very much, come and play in the Hunger Die Mold!

[Part 3].

During the summer vacation, my parents took me to Zhengzhou Zoo to play, and I was very happy. When I entered the gate, I saw a lot of animals. As we walked, I saw the monkey, and the monkey saw that I was eating a banana and snatched my banana away quickly, what a clever and mischievous little monkey.

And then we saw my favorite animal, a big tiger in the forest. It has a large tiger mouth, sharp teeth, and wears a leopard-print coat. We went to buy some meat for the big tiger to eat, and as soon as I threw it away, it immediately ran over and ate the delicious and delicious piece of meat, which was still a glutton!

I love this tiger a lot.

And the most beautiful peacocks! Peacocks are among the birds. Only the male opens the screen, the peacock opens the screen very beautifully, like a fan, and the feathers are yellow, green, and blue colors, which are very bright and beautiful.

There are also elephants, zebras, lions, gorillas and ...... in the zoo

Children, there are many animals in the zoo, let your parents take you to see them!