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When we were just sensible children, we were very eager to be appreciated by adults. But in fact, we rarely receive such praise, and the most we hear are dissatisfaction and complaints. After going to school, parents will always compare us with other children, and every time we compare our weaknesses with the strengths of others, and the result of the comparison is that their own children are inferior to other children.

As a result, the education of our generation continues day after day in the psychological blow of this negative comparison. Now that we are parents, we still "hope that our sons will become dragons and our daughters will become phoenixes", but can we continue to follow the educational philosophy of our parents?

In fact, many examples of the negative comparative evaluation of education disadvantages have attracted the attention of many parents, and a new way of education has emerged, which is affecting people's concepts. Carl Witt's education model, the story of Liu Yiting, a Harvard girl, and Zhou Hong's education process of cultivating his daughter Zhou Tingting, who is completely deaf in both ears, ......These are all showing this point of view: the way of educating children can no longer be the ancient "filial piety under the stick" and "not beating to become a talent, not scolding not to become a weapon", but to perceive the needs of children with a keen sense, eliminate children's unhappiness anytime and anywhere, and patiently communicate and communicate with children.

It is important to emphasize that appreciation is the first step to educational success in all educational approaches.

There are historic sites in the scenic spots of our country, and all tourists who come here to visit will not want to return. In the Forbidden City and Ming Yuan in Beijing, there are many people who come here to visit history. In Dunhuang, people can appreciate the glorious art and eternal legends created in ancient times from the preserved murals.

China's scenic spots have ancient (traces) achievements, and all tourists who come here to travel are (full of interest) looking at the ocean and sighing.

For example, in the Forbidden City and the Temple of Heaven in Beijing, there are many people who come here to visit the ancient historical footprints.

In Dunhuang, people can appreciate the glorious art and permanent legends of ancient murals from the preserved (wall) paintings.

1: "At the meeting, the students, especially the many members of the Communist Youth League, enthusiastically took the stage to speak. ”

2: "This activity has cultivated students' oral expression skills." "Through this activity, the students' oral expression skills have been cultivated."

10.The contrast was striking, and the look was even more emphasized. 12.

Plant melons and get melons, plant beans and get beans. "What kind of cause you sow, what kind of effect you will reap. If you don't work hard, you can only achieve nothing; Otherwise, success is possible.

13.What's wrong with me? If you don't study well and don't plant well, what else can you do?

If it goes on like this, won't it become a waste? 14.The role of the father is like this, he has to educate the child, although it seems to be strict, but in fact it is very distressing, maybe the father can not leave us tens of millions of property, but he must always teach us the truth of life.

10.There is a stark contrast

In the autumn evening, the face of the sun is extraordinarily ruddy, and a few white clouds in the sky that seem to be walking in the sky are gradually reflecting the sunset-like brilliance.

(First of all, I'm not a master, but this passage feels domineering...) Very unfriendly. Modified as follows:)

First of all, we are deeply sorry for the quality problems, and we have a friendly and cooperative attitude to communicate with you in solving the problems.

Usually, for the old customers who have cooperated for many times, we take sampling inspection, because the quality and trust are guaranteed, but if the sample is not qualified, we will never ship. The problem caused by this sampling inspection was completely accidental, and we hope that you can understand.

But at the same time, due to various reasons such as costs, the loss of the factory is also very large, so it is not feasible for you to ask for free** or refund. We are here to see if you can use some of the problematic goods for other purposes. (similar to some of our U.S. customers who also buy from us) and keep the shipment.

If you are in urgent need, we promise to reduce --- US dollars from the purchase price on the basis of the original price as compensation for your loss, and ensure the quality of **.

Thank you for your understanding and consideration of the feasibility of this measure.

The birds swimming in the sky, flying in the wind, looking up at the vastness of the universe and the splendor of things, how magnificent! The sharks swimming in the sea, spitting pearls and spraying jade, jumping out to appreciate the beauty of the outside world, falling into the sea to see the splendor of the seabed, how majestic! The pine trees standing on the cliffs, condescending, experiencing the scorching sun, enduring the baptism of wind and rain, how sad!

When the bird enters the blue sky, its environment is not dangerous, but it gives itself courage in the danger, so it achieves its own majestic posture; When the blue shark comes out to sea, its pressure is not small, but in the difficulties it gives itself courage, so it draws the curve of life; The withered squirrel tree hangs over the cliff, and its terrain is not high, but in the broken wall it gives itself faith, so it has the most beautiful posture. They gave themselves an encouragement, and the flower of life bloomed.

We Should Learn from the Heroic and Fearless Spirit of Comrade Wang Wei, "Guardian of the Sea and Air" Party committees at all levels have carried out a variety of activities to congratulate the 80 th anniversary of the founding of the CPC. Through his unremitting efforts, his academic performance has improved significantly. In order to prevent such accidents, the traffic team has taken strict management measures.

The museum exhibits newly unearthed precious artifacts dating back 2,900 years.

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We should learn from the heroic and fearless spirit of Comrade Wang Wei, the "guardian of the sea and air." Party committees at all levels have carried out a variety of activities to celebrate the 80 th anniversary of the founding of the Communist Party of China. Through his unremitting efforts, his academic performance has improved significantly.

In order to prevent such accidents, the traffic team has taken strict management measures. The museum exhibits valuable artifacts that have been newly unearthed.

At the end of the first sentence, add the word 'spirit', 2 congratulate the word 'celebrate', 3 delete the word 'is', 4 no longer replace it with 'again', and 5 the newly unearthed mention is made before '2009'.

1. Send - from.

2 women (removed).

3 Interestingly—cheerfully.

The young man playing basketball had beads of sweat on his red face).

4. Basketball – Basketball.

The face is full of red light - red.

5 juveniles (removed).

Note 5: Unlike others, because there is no "juvenile grip" above, the "juvenile" is removed.

After the change: as soon as the day dawned, the playground was boiling, and the elderly, children, and young people came to exercise outdoors. The grandmother in the red sportswear happily danced the fan and danced the fan and the young man playing basketball had beads of sweat on his red face.

With the sound of passionate music, rows of children are doing radio exercises - what a beautiful "national fitness map"!

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