The wicked commented on the Huaqing Cup after reading! Please comment on my impressions preferably

Do a good job of these four points, so that you can feel the full score after reading.

It's a bit of a wordiness indeed.

The introduction of the heroine in the second paragraph can be simpler, such as, "And this kind of relationship is "sublimated" into "love" under the understanding of "love masters" Ran Xiaoyu and Chen Queer, thinking that Qiu Jia is "secretly in love" with the intern teacher, Qiu Jia will also be skeptical of this statement. Until one day when she was in the woods, she overheard a conversation "can be shrunk to", and this feeling was mistaken for love, Qiu Jia also doubted ......Until one day there was an unintentional conversation".

There are also repetitions in the second and fourth paragraphs, and if you really need to repeat them, you can change them slightly.

You can take a closer look and maybe change it for the better.

Writing like this is best to stand out. Your writing is wordy and doesn't have very clear points. In fact, one side is sufficient, only one thought of a person at a certain moment needs to be analyzed, and then a whole image is radiated from this point.

It's not too coherent up and down, try to use as much rhetoric as possible, although plain language is sometimes good, but since you're writing a feeling, try to use as much written language as possible.

The second paragraph is to introduce Qiu Jia, and the fourth paragraph is also to introduce Qiu Jia, which can be combined into one paragraph, so it is unclear.

It's wordy, a bit off topic, and it should also be my own feelings and what I have experienced.

Well, it's well written, but I think this article is very wordy, and it's better to change the whole article.

*After reading "Charlotte's Web".

Who would believe that a pig can form a true friendship with a spider? Who would believe it:

Can a tiny spider reverse the fate of a pig to be slaughtered? Spiders are very clever at building webs, but who would believe that spiders can weave words on silk webs?

Who would have believed that a pig would help a spider hatch its egg pouch? But it's true!

Charlotte's Web is a fairy tale that tells us that pigs and spiders have formed the most sincere friendship! The spider's words woven out of silk on the web saved the pig's life!

The spider is dying, and the pig helps the five hundred and forty little spiders in its egg bag to be born in this world!

In the barn of the Jumanke family, a group of animals lives happily, among which Wilbur, the pig of the girl Fern, and Charlotte the spider form the most sincere friendship. However, when everyone learns that Wilbur's fate is to be a delicious bacon sausage, as a pig, Wilbur accepts it in despair. However, Charlotte, who seems to be small, has to help Wilbur.

So, he used his silk to weave an online text on the pigpen that was regarded as a miracle by humans, completely reversing Wilbur's fortunes, allowing him to win a special prize in the bazaar's contest and a future to enjoy in peace. However, at this time, Charlotte's life came to an end.

Why does Charlotte the Spider help Wilbur unconditionally? Because it wants to be majestic? No!

Does it want to show off? No! Does it want to tell others how good it is?

Neither! It's friendship, and it's doing it just for the sake of friendship. Even if it did and didn't get Wilbur in return for it, it loved Wilbur.

They met in the barn, and Wilbur gave it the most pleasant time, and happiness could not be exchanged for any amount of money, no matter how many things could be bought, and it thought that this was the best reward Wilbur could give it! Why did Wilbur believe Charlotte would save it? Will Charlotte give her egg bag to Wilbur with confidence?

It's trust! What is trust? What is Trust?

Wilbur believes in Charlotte, Charlotte believes in Wilbur, that's trust! Is Charlotte's web just a spider's web? No!

It's a web of Charlotte's love. Is this net just for catching pests? No!

This net saved Wilbur's fate and aroused endless love and warmth in people's hearts.

Therefore, "Charlotte's Web" describes to us not an ordinary spider's web, but a warm web of trust and friendship, full of loyalty and love. This net can do wonders and save lives.

Comment on the feeling after reading,First of all, you have to read the original work.,Amuse the ant with your own understanding and knowledge.,In order to evaluate the ...... of others' feelings after reading.Differences of opinion are allowed, but the best direction is the same for the exploration of the essential meaning of the rotten works.

1 Introduction 2 Content 3 Feelings.

If the above conditions are met:

Vivid and concrete, clear feelings.

You pick like a ghost, 20 points of bullshit will cost people 1500 words, you really dare!

Divided into like, indifferent, and ugly.

You can write about your feelings.

Learn from your teachers' experience.

Say that you have ** deficiencies in the articles he wrote.

Or it's good there.

Do what the teacher says about your essay.

Do a good job of these four points, so that you can feel the full score after reading.

The lyrics feel very rustic and natural. It reminds people of the good days of childhood, when children chased each other, frolicked, and played carefree. I think this song is clever in using "childhood" as the keynote, everyone has a childhood, and when you grow up, people are no longer simple, but recalling childhood...

It makes people sigh that time is gone.

Significance: Great!

Level: Very good!

Thoughts: After listening to it, I want to live my childhood again!!

The impression is quite good.。。。 It's hard to write an official impression after years of not doing homework...

Influenced a generation·· The melody is good, and the lyrics are suitable for most people, which is very kind...