Modifying the sick sentence He stood on the stage and sang a beautiful song 30

First analyze the main subject: he, predicate: stand, sing, object: song.

It's obvious, the right sentence: he sings a beautiful song on stage.

Give me extra points!

He stood on the stage and sang a beautiful song.

Grace can't describe the song, you can change the beauty to good, or something else.

Original sentence: At the party, we heard pleasant singing and beautiful dancing.

Modified to: At the party, we heard pleasant voices and saw beautiful dances.

Analysis: Sound can be heard, but dance cannot be matched by hearing. The revised sentence reads: At the party, we heard pleasant sounds and saw beautiful dances.

Suggested practice for sentence revision:1. Supporting exercises for thematic review.

2. Review the questions related to sick sentences in the previous comprehensive exercises, and classify them by yourself.

3. Judge the sick sentences on the relevant materials and choose to correct the wrong questions.

4. Think about how to modify the sentence from the aspect of "words".

Revised to: Reunion.

We heard the pleasant sound, and Bai saw the beautiful dance.

Explanation and analysis: According to the original sentence "At the party, we heard a pleasant sound, a beautiful dance", it can be found that the problem of this sentence appears in "I heard a pleasant sound, a beautiful dance", the sound can be heard, but the dance cannot be matched with hearing, and the dance shows a visual effect, so it should be used to see, and it should be modified to: At the party, we heard the pleasant sound and saw the beautiful dance.

Before the second clause, add the word "seen or appreciated", because the dance cannot be heard.

At the gala, we heard pleasant sounds and saw beautiful dances.

This sick sentence can be like this.

At the party, we heard pleasant sounds and saw beautiful dances.

It's ok now.

You see how it is.

Revised to: Teachers and students sing together. In the original sentence "The team members and teachers and students are singing together", the team members and the teachers and students have repeatedly sold the cong, and it is enough to delete one.

Any sentence that violates the laws of grammatical structure or objective facts is a sick sentence, the former is called a grammatical error, and the latter is called a logical error. Grammatical errors occur more frequently.

How to modify the sentence:1. The subject is redundant.

Example: Lao She. 's writing style is always with the people through thick and thin.

Remove "style".

2. The predicate is redundant.

For example, the handout I borrowed from your school last time is being printed and can be distributed to students before class.

Remove the "progressive" acorn.

3. The object is redundant.

Example: Sima Qian, a famous historian in China.

He completed the "Historical Records" with his life's energy

of the compilation. Remove "writing".

Original sentence: She sang beautiful songs and dances.

The sentence was changed to read: She sang beautiful songs and danced gracefully.

Analysis: The sick sentence is not properly matched, and there is no problem with singing the song, but the dance cannot be described by singing, just add "dancing elegantly".

Distinguish and modify the mantra of the sick sentence:Look at whether the ingredients are missing or not, and the missing ingredients must be completed.

Second, when the collocation is inappropriate, the inappropriate place is changed smoothly.

Third, the word order should be inappropriate, and the inappropriate places should be adjusted.

Fourth, look at the improper use of words, and replace them with appropriate words.

Fifth, see if the meaning is repeated, and the repeated words should be driven away.

Sixth, look at the contradictions in the sentences, remove the spear and remove the shield to settle it.

Seventh, when the classification is improper, different things are placed separately.

Eight look at the reference to the clear and unclear, and the unclear should be noted.

Original sentence: There was a warm applause at the venue.

Revised to: There was a warm applause at the venue.

Analysis: It is an inappropriate word, "enthusiasm" cannot be matched with applause, and "enthusiasm" is replaced with "warm".

Enthusiasm can be changed to enthusiasm, that is, there was a warm applause in the venue.

The most obvious mistake in this sentence is to use the wrong word, enthusiastic applause is not allowed, enthusiasm is to describe people's attitude.

When you find this situation, you must choose more appropriate words, so that you can do a better job of modifying the sentence in a short period of time, and the accuracy rate will be particularly high, you must read the question several times.

There was a round of enthusiastic applause at the venue, this sentence is a sick sentence, which can be modified as:

There was a round of applause at the venue. Enthusiasm and enthusiasm are different concepts, and enthusiasm refers to the degree of liking for something. Enthusiasm means high emotions and excitement.

There is a trick to modifying a sick sentence, we need to read this sentence, understand the meaning of this sentence, then we know how to use words, to organize the language. Then this situation needs to be practiced continuously in the study to be able to do it.

The singing seems to be louder and more touching than any words.

"Language" is changed to "speech", "language" is a system, such as Chinese, English, and "language" refers to the words spoken.

Common sick sentences are as follows:

1. Sentence components are incomplete.

For example: we must follow the habit of discipline.

Change: We must develop the habit of discipline.

2. Improper collocation of words.

For example: we must uphold the glorious traditions of the revolution.

Reform: We must inherit the glorious traditions of the revolution.

3. Repetitive semantics.

For example: I couldn't help but laugh out loud.

Change: I couldn't help but laugh out loud.

4. The word order is incorrect.

For example, we must carefully correct and double-check for mistakes in the homework. Correction: We must carefully check and seriously correct the mistakes in the homework.

5. Inconsistencies.

For example: Yesterday evening there was a night of wind.

Change: There was a gust of wind yesterday evening. Or: The wind blew overnight yesterday.

6. The meaning of the sentence is ambiguous or wrong.

For example: No one can deny that the earth does not revolve around the sun.

Change: No one will deny that the earth revolves around the sun.

7. Illogical.

For example: Store shelves are filled with grapes, fruits, and pears.

Change: Store shelves are filled with grapes, apples and pears.

"Language" is changed to "speech", "language" is a system, such as Chinese, English, and "language" refers to the words spoken.

The singing seems to be louder and more touching than any words.