Imitating Li Qingzhao s A Cut Plum written, please point me out

The first question: the level is not right, the following is a cut of plum Ping. In addition, each one or three or six sentences flatten the rhyme, which is very good.

仄] 仄平仄平, [仄] 仄平平, [仄] 仄平平, [平]平[仄] 仄仄平平. [仄] 仄平平, [仄] 仄平平. [仄] 仄平平仄仄平.

仄] 仄平平, [仄] 仄平平, [平] 平 [平] 仄仄平平. [仄] 仄平平, [仄] 仄平平.

Second question:

The reuse rate of words is too high, such as "stay", "head" and "language" are used twice, except for some words that are deliberately reused, it is best not to reuse, especially at the end of the sentence.

The third, and also the most difficult part, is to create an atmosphere and use good words. Even famous artists can't make every piece have good words, it is recommended to fill in the words, start with other places, and you can also use some allusions. The atmosphere is even harder, don't worry about it.

It's not easy to fill in a word, well, come on. If this word is written by yourself, it expresses unhappiness, so go out and say that you want to be happy.

At the beginning of the lanterns, the afterimage of the bridge.

If it's an afterimage, how can it be a lantern, a lantern, a lamp of luxury, or a lamp of beauty?

Hua lantern, you change to neon lantern, try again.

Why does it feel like it's written after falling out of love, and it's not someone else's fall in love, and it's not our buddy's turn? But it's still very well written, encouragement.

Summary. The red lotus root is fragrant, the bright lotus flowers have withered, and I feel a deep coolness from the bamboo mat, and I gently take off the tulle skirt and pan a leaf orchid boat alone. In the sky, the swallows flew back in formation, (did any) send back a letter from whose family?

When the wild goose flew back, it was already night, and the moonlight poured down in the west building, (I was looking forward to it here). Flowers, floating freely, water, drifting freely, a kind of parting lovesickness, you and I, affect the sorrow of the two places. Ah, it can't be ruled out that this lovesickness, this sorrow, has just disappeared from between the frowning eyebrows, and it is faintly entangled in my heart.

Please interpret a cut of Song Li Qingzhao's plum poems.

The red lotus root is fragrant, the bright lotus flowers have withered, and I feel a deep coolness from the bamboo mat, and I gently take off the tulle skirt and pan a leaf orchid boat alone. In the sky, the swallows flew back in formation, (did any) send back a letter from whose family? When the wild goose flew back, it was already night, and the moonlight poured down in the west building, (I was looking forward to it here).

Flowers, floating freely, water, drifting freely, a kind of parting lovesickness, you and I, affect the sorrow of the two places. Ah, it can't be ruled out that this lovesickness, this sorrow, has just disappeared from between the frowning eyebrows, and it is faintly entangled in my heart.

Hello subject, this is a translation of the whole poem.

This song "A Cut Plum" is a poem that pours out lovesickness and don't worry about the pain. This poem is inscribed as "Don't worry" in Huang Sheng's "Selected Words of Hua'an", which was written by Li Qingzhao to her husband Zhao Mingcheng, who left home before she got married for a long time, and she told about the loneliness and loneliness of her life alone, and she eagerly missed her husband's early return.

A cut of plum, red lotus root, residual jade autumn.

Lightly untie Luo Shang and go on the Lanzhou alone.

Who in the clouds sent the brocade book?

When the word goose returns, the moon is full in the west building.

The flowers float and the water flows freely.

One lovesickness, two sorrows.

There is no way to eliminate this situation, so I frowned, but I was in my heart.

Li Qingzhao's poem is mainly to express her feelings of thinking about her husband. Resources.

: The pink lotus flowers have withered, the fragrance has dissipated, and the smooth jade bamboo mat has the coolness of autumn. Untie her skirt, change into casual clothes, and board the boat alone.

Looking up at the sky, who will send the brocade book to the white clouds? When the geese flew back, the moonlight had already sprinkled all over the West Building. The falling flowers float alone, and the water flows alone.

They all miss each other, but they can't talk to each other, so they have to be alone and depressed. This lovesick sorrow really can't be discharged, and it just disappeared from the slightly frowning eyebrows, and it was faintly entangled in my heart.

This word is a work of Li Qingzhao in the early stage, and it is considered to have been written shortly after marriage.

According to Li Qingzhao's autobiographical "Preface to the Record of the Golden Stone", in the first year of the establishment of the Yasukuni Kingdom (1101) by Emperor Huizong of the Song Dynasty, Li Qingzhao married Zhao Mingcheng, and after marriage, the couple had a very affectionate relationship and shared common interests. Later, his father Li Gefei was wronged in the party dispute, and Li Qingzhao was also affected and forced to return to his hometown, and he was separated from her husband from time to time. This inevitably aroused her many feelings of longing, and she wrote a number of poems, and this "One Cut Plum" is one of the masterpieces.

Li Qingzhao with the help of the legend of the wild goose, the picture is clear, the image is distinct, it renders a beautiful night scene of the moonlight full of the building, but behind the joy, there are lovesick tears.

Both husbands left him, one died and the other left, Li Qingzhao had a good relationship with the first husband, her husband died during the war, she was displaced to protect her dead husband's antiques, and then met the second hypocrite husband, coveted Li Qingzhao's antiques and talent and married her, after Li Qingzhao couldn't stand his abuse and denounced him, Li Qingzhao was imprisoned with him, and was later released. Since then, Li Qingzhao's style of words has changed greatly, from a tactful little daughter to a graceful and desolate state, and a cut of plum was written after she parted with her first husband

This poem was written after Li Qingzhao and her husband Zhao Mingcheng were far away, and it conveyed the author's deep affection that he couldn't bear to part. The first sentence describes that after saying goodbye to her husband, she witnessed the lotus flowers in the pond and the fragrance was gone, and she went back to the house to lean on the bamboo mat, which was quite cool, and it turned out that autumn had arrived. The lyricist inadvertently expressed her lagging sense of season, which actually wrote about the situation that she had been unaware of the changes in the environment since her husband left.

Autumn has arrived, and in the pond, the scattered lotus flowers have become ruined, which makes people can't bear to look back on the splendor at the beginning. I slowly boarded the small Yiye Lanzhou, swaying slightly, but I couldn't startle the slight wave in my heart, as if everything had fallen silent. The tentacles of the pond are cold, and the heart is in harmony.

When the wild geese returned, it was already the full moon in the West Building. I have never seen the brocade book fall, everything is just waiting and fantasizing. The flowers are still scattered, and the water flows on its own.

They weren't affected by my sadness. But there is no way to dissipate this mood. Separated from the two places, lovesickness is our common possession, and you in the distance must also be full of sorrow.

Let's not frown, but why, my heart is still depressed ......

This poem is written about love. This poem has a fresh tone, a delicate style, and is intriguing.

The film mainly writes about the solitary life of female lyricists. "Red lotus fragrance residue" is written in the way of replacing the face with points, because the lotus has withered, and the flowers of other grasses are even more difficult to see, which reveals the coldness and depression of the autumn scene; On a deeper level, the change of seasons will also make the female lyricist feel that her husband has been away from home for a long time, making her feel lonely and lonely. "Jade Autumn" not only means that the weather is getting cooler, but it is more closely related to her staying alone in the empty room, and it also shows her loneliness.

So she thought of a way to relieve loneliness: "Relieve Luo Shang lightly and go on the Lanzhou alone." The word "Du" is used very well, this is the way to write the powder on the back, and its positive meaning is how happy it would be for the husband and wife to go rowing together if they were at home.

Because of this, she was on the boat, but she still thought about her husband, and thought that his letter should be home, and even guessed that the letter would tell her the date of return, which gave her great comfort. Thinking about it this way, she seemed to feel that she was on the west floor, looking at the moon in the sky, counting the days when her husband would leave home.

Suddenly, the female lyricist returned to reality, "the flowers float by themselves, and the water flows by themselves", which is what she saw in the boat. The female lyricist was very sad when she saw this scene, but the flowers and water ignored her feelings, and still kept falling and passing away. The word "self" in the word is also very wonderful, the female lyricist empathizes with things and turns to borrow things to lyrically refine words, as Qu Yuan said, "Only the scattered grass and trees, afraid of the twilight of beauty", expressing the emotion of Shaoguang's fleeting.

From this, it turns into a straightforward statement: "One lovesickness, two sorrows." This is written together between husband and wife, which shows that the female lyricist also understands her husband's mood at the moment, which is the delicacy of women.

But this is only a kind of foreshadowing, and the main thrust of the word actually falls on the last two sentences: as for "feeling" to "eliminate" it with "tricks", its weight can be known; However, "there is no way to eliminate", it is deeply visible. This is a concrete manifestation of the deep and delicate style unique to female lyricists.

Only then did he frown, but he was on his heart. These two sentences express Li Qingzhao's unique language style; Use ordinary words to express the artistic conception of novelty. The "brow" is the place where people's feelings are exposed, which others can see, but the feelings hidden in the "heart" are invisible to others.

According to common sense, the sorrow between the eyebrows and the sorrow in the heart are completely consistent, only in the heart, the hair is the form, there is a state of sorrow between the eyebrows.

The boat was swaying on the Wujiang River, and I was full of spring sorrow for the detention trip, and when I saw the wine curtain on the shore fluttering, attracting guests, I had the desire to use wine to dispel my sorrows. The boat passed through the beautiful scenery Qiu Niangdu and Tai Niang Bridge that made the literati reverie endlessly, and there was no good mood to appreciate, and the front was "the wind is fluttering, the rain is bleak", which is really annoying. When will I be able to go home and wash my robes and end my tired life?

One day will you be able to reunite with your family, play with the sheng inlaid with silver characters, and light the heart-shaped incense in the smoker? Spring is easy to pass, so that people can't catch up, the cherries are red and ripe, the plantain is green again, and spring goes to summer.

The lotus has been left, the incense has disappeared, the bamboo mat is as cold and slippery as jade, revealing a deep cool autumn, gently taking off the tulle skirt, and panning a leaf of orchid boat alone. Looking up at the sky, who will send the brocade book to the white clouds? It is when the geese line up into the word "human" and return to the south, the moonlight is shining and soaking people, sprinkled all over the pavilion that is leaning on the west side.

Flowers, floating freely, water, drifting freely, a kind of parting lovesickness, you and I, affect the sorrow of the two places. Ah, it can't be ruled out that this lovesickness, this sorrow, has just disappeared from between the frowning eyebrows, and it is faintly entangled in my heart.