Whoever can judge this poem 70, who can judge this poem

First poems: Good accumulation of thousands of auspicious, home should be ten thousand life.

Ji Qiu Heng follows the United States, and the world is barbaric.

Later poems: Shizhong is the main book, and Ze Keji is a group of heroes.

The Son of Heaven Jia Xianzuo, Fang Zhiyi Xianrong.

Continued poems: Poems and books inherit ancestors, and Shao describes the previous signs.

Stir up the article industry, Shi Qin five phoenix Ming.

Appreciation of the first poem: Good accumulation is auspicious, good is good deeds, good heart. Accumulate, accumulate, gather. To, to come. The meaning of this sentence is to do good deeds often, then auspiciousness will naturally come.

Home is all about life. Home, country, homeland. Appropriate, friendly, reasonable matters. Wanhua refers to all things and nature. It means that the country is peaceful, and everything is thriving.

Ji Qiu Heng follows the United States, and the world is barbaric. Keiqiu (dustpan and leather robe. Referring to the cause and heritage of the ancestors), the brute sound is the musical instrument sound of the ethnic minorities.

The meaning of these two sentences is that if we do not cherish the inheritance left by our ancestors and cause wars, the country will be invaded by foreigners.

Not bad. A very meaningful modern poem.

The scene of the new countryside is like a fresh and gentle breeze blowing over after reading it, so soft. It's just that I feel a little unsatisfied......）

The artistic conception is open and the thoughts are profound.

Awesome.

Fortunately, it just didn't end well.

The last sentence of this poem is the topic, full of wordless feelings, full of wordless pain. If there is love in the sky, if there is love on the earth, I don't have anything to say, just write a sentence with a glass of wine, sad. Why is it sad?

It's because the sky is ruthless, and the earth is loveless. If a person has affection, if a person has love, it will be speechless... Why?

Why...

Please don't be so sad, okay?

It's not very clear to see, but overall it feels good, a little taste. If I could get it right and sentence to sentence, I think it would be better and more effective.

The article is amazing! The article is wonderful! The article is wonderful and amazing.

Please see this article from beginning to end, the spirit of this power is like a cloud, as fast as lightning, where the pen is written, a stroke is not delayed, just like a phoenix dancing and a dragon flying. The wonderful sentence in this word, and there is no half of the plagiarism of the predecessors, looking for chapters and excerpts, the words are the price of pearls and jade, which can be called a thousand gold and easy words, Chang Yun: Tang poetry and Jin words Han Dynasty articles, now there are three generations of 85559022 brothers.

Not only the eight families of the Tang and Song dynasties are inferior, but also the old Mr. Kong Ming of the Three Kingdoms of the Later Han Dynasty. The wonderful sentence in the table of "Leaving the Teacher's Table" is nothing more than that!

This poem selects several typical images, using metaphor, personification, white description and other techniques to bring the early morning in the city and countryside to life. My favorite last sentence:

In the vegetable field, the farm cart was holding cigars, panting tiredly, and the peasant girl's scarf was lifted by the morning light.

The peasant girl's scarf was lifted by the morning light. Is it a sick sentence. The morning light is lifted, I always feel discouraged, please advise, is it the morning breeze, or the morning light.

Not bad. Green leaves are as yellow as the moon", both green and yellow? And the moon is generally white.

The flowing water is as clear as a mirror", the flowing water is moving, and it is generally the windless lake surface that is like a mirror, such as a mirror does not mean that the water is very clear, but that the water surface is very calm. For example, "the lake surface has no wind goggles and no polishing".

The autumn wind has not solved the autumn wind virtue"? Does it mean that Qiu Feng himself doesn't understand his mind? Or does Autumn Wind not recognize his own virtues?

The last sentence is quite charming.

The name "Lying Autumn" refers to lying down and watching the autumn scenery. It looks like water up close, and trees from afar, but the trees are generally near the house, and the water flow is generally far away from the house.

Poems don't rhyme, but it doesn't hurt. Rhyme for the sake of rhyming, and what is written may not be as charming as that that does not rhyme.

Line 2: Looking at the green leaves from a distance, the yellow like autumn suggests that you change the green leaves to leaves.

It's not too rhyming. It's straightforward, and it doesn't make too much sense.

It's very well written, it has a sense of meaning, and it is worth publishing, which should be a hit.

1. The color of "green leaf yellow" conflicts, it is recommended to try "autumn leaf yellow".

2. Compared with the moonlight, it is generally at night, but the "leaf color" that can be seen should be daytime. The sun and the moon are on the same day, and it is a little incongruous.

3. If "the flowing water is as clear as a mirror", it should also be good during the day to see that the water is "clear".

4. The third sentence is repeated twice with "autumn wind", and it is recommended to borrow other words. For example, "The autumn wind recognizes the harvest month".

5. The last sentence is a bit too vernacular, and you can use other rhetorical devices to add new meaning, such as "the garden has been covered with gold", and you can also callback the autumn leaves before the yellow.

6. The ending does not rhyme. And the rhyme I gave in the previous example is not bet, and I have to slowly figure out what words are more appropriate to replace.

Mid-Autumn Festival. The moonlight is like washing leaves, and the flowing water is cold.

The pines and cypresses do not understand the autumn wind, and the nostalgia is difficult to move.

Woqiu - I didn't see the --- "lying".

There is no rhyme in the four sentences, which is not quite like poetry - and even less like a slip of the tongue;

The poetry is not thick, deep, painful, or itchy, only the number of words is very neat.

The distant mountains are green and yellow like the moonThe microwave near the water is as light as scales. The autumn wind does not understand the spring breeze. Laugh and use the fruit as a matchmaker.

Four sentences can be communicated——