Help me revise this essay, not comprehensive, detailed imitation in a hurry .

Classmate, you have been asking questions and listing materials throughout the article, but the important thing in the composition is to think about the point of view, so delete the examples and questions in your article, and your article will be completely gone.

So your problem lies in the fundamental way of writing, and changing the details alone will undoubtedly not help you.

Remember, the essay should address the "what" and "why" questions, not the questions that make you fill the page.

If there is only one word "wait" in the essay question, first think about what you want to write about, whether it is waiting for your relatives to return home, waiting for the grades, or waiting for the bus. But you ask what to wait for in the first sentence, and there is no explanation later, which is equivalent to all nonsense that can be deleted.

As you write, you can ask these questions: What are you waiting for? How is it? How does it make you feel? Why are you waiting?

If you solve these problems (not with materials, but with argumentative sentences), you will be able to write a basically qualified essay.

It may be a bit straightforward, but I hope it can really help you.

Keep up the good work!

When the sun sets, there is a time when it rises again, when the fashion flashes and when it comes back, when the snow melts, and when it falls again, but, wise you, tell me why my childhood is gone? Did I lose him, and where did I throw it away? Can you still find it?

I don't know how much happiness they gave me, but my childhood seemed to be getting farther and farther away, and in silence I counted, more than four thousand days had slipped out of my hands, as pure as a crystal dew on the grass, beautiful and short, as far as I went, as far as I came, and what kind of hurry was in the middle of the comings and goings? When I say goodbye to the sun, I am one step away from my childhood, and I don't know how to keep it, but all I can do now is to cherish my time and spend the rest of my days.

I don't know how much laughter they gave me, in the turn of the wheels of the scooter, in my handicraft, more than four thousand days slipped under my nose, like a basin of water sprinkled on the desert, leaving no trace, and my time passed like flowing water.

Though you go, you come, what will happen in the middle of coming? So while playing on the computer, the days flew by by the fingertips of pressing the keyboard. Slip away from the dazzling screen while watching TV.

While admiring the lanterns, beckon past the bright lights. The days are evaporating like water day by day, and in these more than 4,000 days, do you have to sigh in vain? You have to hurry up and live!

Hope to make you satisfied!

The fire set Huang Gai's boat on fire, and Huang Gai ordered Shi Du again

The soldier jumped into the boat and quickly left. The fireship went on a rampage.

Ok, different, of course, it's better to think for yourself...