Can you give me some advice on the songs I wrote myself?

Personal advice :

1. 'When love comes, there is no reason, and when you go, there is no excuse, don't be overwhelmed by gentleness, calm down and then go ......."I don't make sense of that.

2. There are too many 'dear', I hope to change a few sentences and change something else.

3. "A happy life has had you and me." The word "life" in it is a bit lacking in rhyme and needs to be improved.

But it's already good, and I hope you can write the lyrics "One step further." ”

1.There are more typos, "when today does not belong to you and me" should be "when today no longer belongs to you and me". "What was proven yesterday" should read "What can be proved yesterday".

2.There is some ambiguity in the meaning of the lyrics. It seems that I can't understand who the two people are leaving, or the external pressure can't be together. It is estimated that it is also difficult to understand if you want to shoot MTV.

3.There is no reason and no excuse.

No longer alone, no one sees.

Whether or not to change this if I want to be neat.

No reason, no excuse.

No more loneliness, no more delicate.

4.The above points are for reference :)

When today no longer belongs to you and me, what can yesterday prove.

I personally recommend.

1.Can you change the roses to something else?

2.The theme of this song is not clear, is it about parting?

3.There can be more descriptions of scenes to highlight feelings.

4.Don't keep repeating a lyric.

It reads a bit like a poem, with typos.

It's a bit bland.

.First you have to make sure that you sing well or not, and then you have to make sure that she thinks you are handsome, and then you can do it.

It's still a good word to have a good tune to match, and I wish you early success.

Excellent! Poetic, can be paired with a guitar or Chinese style**. It should sound good.

I'm an amateur songwriter, both music and lyrics

I played musical instruments, and I originally only wrote music, but then I couldn't find the words I was happy with, so I did it myself.

Many enthusiasts think that the lyrics are easy to write, and it becomes a mess of some uneven sentences together - how can it be so easy -

I've sighed - because I've written it, I know it's hard to write.

After reading your work, the enthusiasm is commendable, but it is difficult to impress it - there is too much content to write, and the lyrics are not large enough to carry so much;

A few sentences at the beginning and end, as well as rhymes, and a large section in the middle, the rhymes are messed up and can't be found;

A work that doesn't have one or two unique creative sentences throughout is an unsuccessful work – because it's not compelling and memorable.

Place; It's best not to write sentences that have been used by others to avoid making the mistake of déjà vu.

I'll write a beginning along your lines for your reference ——

In dreams

In dreamsMy reluctant youth is burning.

The blood scorched the colorful glow on the horizon.

In dreamsShades of wet and dry colors are applied.

So eye-catching, so charming.

Really blooming green buds——

It's great, it's recommended to post more on some social platforms, maybe it's done.

BMW will always meet Bole, I believe you will find your own Bole. Until then, as long as you are determined to follow your own path, just like you lyrics to pursue your dreams, why worry too much. Give it a go and believe in yourself.

Excellent, dare to chase dreams, and move forward.

It's well written, but it's better to rhyme more.

You've done a great job of lyrics