Everyone gave me a comment on the essay, thank you for asking for 100 words

How so? If I'm not mistaken, you're in the sixth grade or the first year of junior high school, right? Because I'm the same as you, I'm also 13 years old, and now I'm in the second year of junior high school, I think your composition is not enough words, you're no longer a second or third grade student, so you should write more words, your two examples can write in detail about the cause and effect, thank your mother when you express your appearance, actions, demeanor and psychological description, so it will be better??

It's just too brief, and there is room for improvement!

The beginning is not bad. The examples are not well narrated, the materials are not selected enough to declare, don't write about the first impression in your mind, because you can write, and others will think of writing. The ending is too ordinary.

There is no appearance.,Descriptive demeanor.。。 This is the details, the place to test the skill. It's also a touching place.

Excuse me.. I didn't see that the landlord was only thirteen years old. That's not bad!

If you want to write long words, it is best to write one thing to express the greatness of mother's love, you drop the example is too short, you should write the demeanor, expression, action, mood, write specific, and have always wanted to say to the mother, short, not clear enough, what do you want to express to the mother, change: Mom, if I am a kite, you will pull the string in your hand; If I am a little bird, your love is the vast sky, and I will grow up healthy and happy under your care!

Nine-year-old drop ==== Sushi.

Personally, I think my composition is okay. First of all, the number of words you write is too small, and the things you write are not vivid, profound, novel, or attractive enough. And, why should two things be crammed into one section?

Comment: The author of this article expressed the author's gratitude and gratitude for his mother's love by writing about two examples of his mother's kindness to him. The center is prominent, well-organized, and the sentences are fluent. Hope to keep it up!

Students, let us sing a song for mothers all over the world, that is, "Only mothers are good in the world". Let's say a word to our respective mothers: "Thank you, my mother. ”

Good impression.

The writing is good, but it is too short, I hope you will continue to work hard and write better essays.

The number of words is less and not vivid enough.

Garbage, this garbage is also pulled out for people to see.

Essay comments are generally written in a pertinent way from the center, material, structure, expression, language, and writing of the student's work.

1.Center: If there is any digression, write according to the requirements of the topic.

2.Material selection: Whether it is around the center or not. Whether it is true or not, in line with the reality of life. Is it fresh and interesting.

3.Structure: Whether the hierarchical paragraphs are clear. Whether the transition is natural. Whether the beginning and end are correct.

4.Expression: Does the narrative explain things clearly and completely? Write the scenery and write the order of the visit clearly. Be detailed properly, write down important people and things in detail, and write briefly about unimportant places.

5.Language: Whether the sentences are fluent and accurate, and there are few sick sentences. Whether you use metaphors, comparisons, personifications, exaggerations, etc. Do you use beautiful words and phrases such as idioms, sayings, proverbs, famous quotes, poems, etc. Whether punctuation is used appropriately.

6.Writing: Whether the font is neat and there are few typos. Whether the roll surface is neat and clean, and the application is less.

1. Willing to help others, good at unity, hard-working, and approachable. Disadvantages: The work style is too restrained and not bold enough.

2. Respect teachers, unite classmates, be helpful, be a good helper of teachers, good friends of classmates, diligent in learning, positive, like to discuss and solve problems with classmates, and actively participate in various extracurricular and extracurricular activities organized by the class and school. Disadvantages: The thinking is not mature enough, and the ability to link theory with practice is weak.

3. Kind-hearted, honest, single-minded, shrewd and capable, stable personality, and proactive. Disadvantages: Usually pay too much attention to details, and it is possible to neglect the grasp of the whole.

4. Caring for others, self-motivated, able to work independently, with good communication skills, willing to work under pressure, and have leadership qualities.

5. Have perseverance and perseverance in doing things, and have your own opinions on things, and not others. Disadvantages: Theoretical learning needs to be further deepened.

6. Have your own way of learning, learn new things efficiently, and learn new skills quickly. Disadvantages: Less work experience and further training is needed. <>

If you copy it by hand, you can do it like this: bai is neatly written, and the first paragraph quotes the dubi sentence, which leads to the following zhi. The second paragraph of the dao is a little awkward.,I didn't introduce him to ** and said directly to the old man.,Add a little transition sentence in the middle.。

The words "gently" and "carefully" make us feel that Grandpa is a very attentive and amiable person. The last paragraph, "Listening to your words is better than reading a book for ten years"...It's a little awkward, too.

I don't think I heard what my grandfather said, right? But just like the first sentence of the third paragraph of the essay, let each of us equally call for sincerity, yearn for sincerity, and worship sincerity. Sprinkle the sincere sunshine all over the world!

I don't know if this is an essay written by a grade student, and I don't know if the evaluation is too high or too low, but that's probably what it looks like. First praise and talk about the advantages, and then point out the shortcomings, I believe that this student's composition will be better and better after revision!

Finally, I can briefly say that the paragraph about instant noodles can be said: Grandpa, bring me two packs of instant noodles, I want them to be spicy. Otherwise, it might be a bit like an advertisement. Hehe.

The beginning of the article is lyrical, comparing sincerity to a rainbow and an engine. The simple article, through a small thing in life, writes that honesty is actually around us, and ends with the question, "Listening to your words is better than reading a book for ten years." Quoting verses speaks more about honesty

It's a little small, so I can't see it clearly.

Thank you,

From birth to growing up, there is one person who has helped him the most, given the most love, and has the most good intentions, and that is our beloved mother. The birth of each child is a painful test and a challenge for many mothers. The growth of every child is the beginning of a mother's life.

Everyone's mother has her own way of loving her child, there is strict love, encouraging love, kind love, open love, and hidden love......My mother's love for me is an unsung love, a love that manifests itself in little things.

I remember it was another summer day, and the wind seemed to be scared away by the sun, and even the clouds disappeared. When I came home from my teacher's house, my mother didn't pick me up on her bicycle as usual, so we had to walk to the station and take the bus home. The station was so far away that we had to walk a little way to get to the station, and as I walked along the road, I felt beads of sweat running down my hair, over my face, and down to the ground, and my lips were dry and uncomfortable, as if not only I was very hot, but even the willows on the side of the road were hot and drooping their heads, and I knew that I was crying "I know—I know—" in the trees.

Suddenly, a cool breath greeted me, and it turned out to be a cold drink shop. "Mom, I want to buy an ice cream to eat. I looked at the cold drink shop and couldn't help but say.

Then go buy one. Mom agreed, and I bought an ice cream that was still bubbling cold, "Mom, won't you buy one?" "I asked my mother, but my mother said that it was too cold, and my stomach was upset after eating, and I had to ask my mother to eat a bite and taste it, and it was cool and cool, but my mother just didn't eat it.

There were times when my thighs couldn't hold my arms, and in the end, at my insistent request, my mother only ate a small bite, and she ate it so fragrant and sweet. Looking at my mother, I felt that my eyes were a little blurry and I wanted to shed tears. Think about it, since I started learning the piano, my mother has been frugal every day, never spending a penny more, and for my future, my mother has paid too much.

I didn't let the tears flow, for fear that my mother would find out, and I wouldn't be able to eat the ice cream from my mother's hand.

It's still so hot, but I'm not hot at all, not because of the coolness of the ice cream, but because of my mother's love.

Mother is a sacred role, and I feel that my mother is like an angel sent by God to protect me. She nurtured me with love, educated me with her heart, and pinned all good hopes on me. And how can I repay my mother?

Money, position, rights, academic ......It's all material satisfaction, and all this can never repay my mother's love for me. A little respect and filial piety is far from enough.

Whoever says an inch is careless, and he will be rewarded with three springs. ”

I'm speechless, it's still this essay after looking for it! I want a good sentence!!