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people in the past go to bed early ??went to bed The second tense is changed.

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The revised composition is as follows:

In the days following the first day of the Lunar New Year, the streets and houses are bustling with activity.

The Lantern Festival is the end of the Spring Festival. Mom bought a big bag of dumplings from the supermarket and started cooking. After the reunion dinner, my mother brought out bowls of rice balls, and from a distance, I smelled the fragrance.

Our family ate rice balls while admiring the full moon in the sky. The clock on the wall is ringing, and the Spring Festival is coming to an end!

This essay is not very problematic, but there are many minor ones.

The road of Shanghai.

In the metropolis of Shanghai, there are many famous roads: there is the bustling Nanjing Road, there is the elegant Huaihai Road... But today, I want to introduce you to an ordinary road that is closely related to my life - Dingxi Road.

I heard my grandfather say that when he was young, Dingxi Road was not as long as it is now, not as wide as it is now, and not as lively as it is now. There is a five-star hotel at the north end of Dingxi Road, which is the "Paris Spring Hotel". A few steps to the south, there is a bakery called "85 degrees C".

The bread there is freshly baked and especially tasty. Further on, there is the "King of Yonghe", on days off, my parents often take me here for breakfast, and the soy milk fritters here are more famous. Across the road is the "Paris Spring", where many items are on sale during the Chinese New Year, attracting many people.

Further on, it is "Wenfeng Barber Shop", sometimes I have been doing my homework for a long time, and my head is a little dizzy, so I come here to wash my hair and be "sober and sober". In front of you, there is a restaurant that is not big, but not small - "Tianxia Fish Cabin", as the name suggests, there are many varieties of fish there, and some fish are not even named by parents, let alone me. Looking across the road, that's my favorite - "Kecha", where there are many varieties of tea, I drink it all year round, and when I get home from school, I drink a cup of fragrant milk tea, not to mention how refreshing.

Further on, there was a restaurant called "Pakistani Buyi", and there was a "face changing" performance in the dining room, and the performers would walk among us, and I approached several times to see what was going on, but I didn't see anything.

There are many more distinctive places on this road, so I won't list them all.

After listening to my introduction, are you already salivating over the food on Dingxi Road, and can't wait to come to Dingxi Road for a walk? Suggested modifications:1The third natural section has some running accounts. 2.The fourth natural paragraph can be changed or removed (not changed here).

Famous changed to famous.

Elegant Huaihai Road Elegant changed to elegant.

The introduction should be detailed and slight, not like keeping a running account.