I wanted to participate in an essay contest, so I wrote an essay and everyone gave me some advice

Although the number of words in this article is relatively small, every paragraph and every word reflects the theme of nostalgia for the alma mater, this article is very vivid, but it is really not so specific If you write some examples, such as: what happiness have you encountered in learning; sad things; It is to help you spend it, as well as what unforgettable things you have in your life in your alma mater, and what friends you have who were born and died together, so as to more vividly reflect your feelings of missing your alma mater.

Write your own essay and let the teacher say go Oh As long as you put your feelings in, the text is not important, what matters is whether your feelings can infect the reader! You can also appreciate your own composition from a different perspective as a reader! Overall good! But there is still work to be done

1. The topic should be novel, such as: moonlight missing.

2 beginnings, for example: I raised my head to look at the bright moon, looked down at my hometown, and looked at the moon in the sky, my heart began to be melancholy again.

3 endings such as: ...This is even more intriguing).

4. Give an example of your alma mater and describe it to express your feelings.

It's good to be able to participate, and I wish you a good time to reach the finals.

Well written! But your title needs to be revised! Although good words and sentences are used more!

But I can give some examples of things in your alma mater that are especially worth writing about! Actually, I'm also a 6th grader, and when I was writing this article, I personally thought it would be best to write examples! What the teacher said is superficial, it should be that you are only writing about your personal feelings, not about specific things!

Probably! These are just my personal thoughts and hope it helps you!

I believe. This kind of essay topic is particularly easy to write, and I recommend a sample essay to you.

I believe that there is great power. Anything is possible if you believe. I remember a lyric that reads: I believe I can fly, I believe that I can reach the sky with my hand. Yes, as the lyrics say, I also believe that I can fly.

In the vast sky, the birds fly freely, how happy they are, how free and easy. But who knows how much hardship lies behind their graceful posture. The birds that break out of their shells grow up under the feeding of their parents, their weight and height are almost the same as their parents, but unfortunately they are not yet able to fly, their parents set up their home, the nest, at a high place far from the ground, so that their children know from an early age that their world is not the earth, but the blue sky, and they need wings to compose the bird's life.

So, one day, when the parents of the birds push their children out of the nest, the birds are faced with two situations: one is to fall to the ground and die, and the other is that they learn to fly with their wings, and the result is that the birds fly to their dream home. It takes courage to fly, everything in the world is impossible to get at your fingertips, and there is a price to pay.

Want to fly? Then be brave with your wings!

In life, we are also faced with a choice like those little birds, whether to stay in a warm and safe nest, or to overcome fear and vibrate our wings to fly to the other side of success? There is a little girl who, since she was a child, dreamed that she would one day dance like a butterfly. So, she worked hard for this, day by day, month by month, year by year, she never stopped her footsteps, hard work, hard work, and hard work--- in the 2008 Winter Olympics, she wore a beautiful dress like butterfly wings, dancing on the white ice rink.

Her dancing posture is so light, so elegant, so graceful, countless audiences are fascinated and shocked. This little girl with a dream finally flies. She is Kim Yuna, the figure skating champion at the Winter Olympics.

I believe that my future is not a dream, I believe that youth has no horizon, and I believe that I can reach the sky. No matter how difficult and hard this process is, I believe that as long as you face it bravely and make unremitting efforts, you will eventually spread your wings and fly high.

I believe I can fly as freely as a bird, I believe I can dance like a butterfly.

A sports game.

Today, we have a sports competition, which is a 200-meter race. Lily, who is not in good health, also participated. During the game, the warm sunlight shines on the field.

A fierce game is about to begin. Some of the students stood on the stools, some stretched out their little heads, all vying to watch the athletes' competition, and the cheerleaders were desperately cheering for their class.

Ready – Run! With the referee's order, the athletes ran fast like arrows off the string. Lily was left behind.

Although we lost, we experienced the spirit of unity!

Communication. In the face of such a rare opportunity, the young reporters have sought the truth from the seniors, "how to improve the level of composition, how to write a good work in the examination room" and other issues have become the topics of most concern to everyone, and experts and candidates answered the confusion for the young reporters one by one on the spot.

1. Li Ruiyan (Xinyuan Primary School Class 5 (2): Some students like to memorize essays, which are used to set questions during exams, will this method help with writing?

Sun Ru (the author of the excellent essay on the college entrance examination published in this newspaper): In fact, I have memorized the composition template before, but the composition written in this way is easy to be the same, and can only get the general "insurance score".

Ling Huanxin, President of the Provincial Writing Society and Professor of Southern Normal University: In addition to the wonderful expression of writing, we should pay more attention to migration and innovation, the so-called migration innovation is to effectively take information, and flexibly change the materials according to the different requirements of writing, do not memorize mechanically, and can accumulate some classical poems and short prose for writing. Therefore, it is necessary to draw nourishment from the written literary language.

2. Hu Shuyi (Class 5 (1) of Youfu West Street Primary School): What should I do if I encounter the question that I am not good at in the examination room?

Sun Xi (2011 College Entrance Examination Liberal Arts Champion): I don't think there is the most unskilled topic, in most cases, the candidate's mindset can only write a certain type of article, my suggestion is to let go of their thinking, to have an unbridled imagination, if you can usually read more and think more, there will naturally be a desire to express, writing is to sort out the fragmented thinking, make it more logical, record the usual feelings, they will become the inspiration for future writing.

3. Kou Jun (Class 2 (4) of Zhiyuan Campus, 29 Middle School): I feel that my usual composition is very good, but why is my composition score not high when I arrive at the examination room? I feel that the essay in the exam room is often hit, and I have no confidence anymore.

Jiang Yourong (Funing Middle School; Special Teacher): As a student, the accumulation of life materials and writing skills in the examination room is a certainty, and how sure you are of yourself, whether you can get the favor of the marking teacher is a variable, just like in a sports competition, whether you can express the level requires enough self-confidence. In fact, such a situation is often encountered in ordinary times, and to solve such problems, you can let the teacher judge your own ideas and ideas, and communicate with the teacher in a timely manner on the standard of article evaluation.

However, when grading the high school entrance examination, the grades will not be too different.

Qian Peng (Yixing Middle School, full score essay writer teacher): The essay usually writes well, the language is good, but the usual composition is different from the essay in the examination room, whether the point of view is clear, whether the style is clear and whether the sense of deduction is strong or not are the key to the scoring of the teacher.

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