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The essay is beautifully sentenced, much like prose, and there are several figurative sentences that vividly describe the beauty of the lotus flower, which reads very intimately, and reads it like the scene is right next to you. (I'm sorry, but that's all I have to say, and you can write it yourself.) ）

Plum Blossom Wang Anshi.

There are a few plums in the corner, and Ling Han opens it alone. I know that it is not snow, but there is a dark fragrance.

Praise the plum blossom for its pride, pure character).

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Outside the post on the side of the broken bridge, lonely and ownerless. It was already dusk and I was alone, and it was even more windy and rainy. has no intention of fighting for spring, and a group of people are jealous. Scattered into mud and dust, only fragrant as before.

Be content with indifference, not strong)

There are many kinds of hydroponics, hanging pothos, silver queen, anthurium, these can be both soil and water.

Although he does not live in the water town of the south of the Yangtze River, he has a soft spot for lotus flowers. Because the lotus flower grows in sludge and blooms on the surface of the water, it has the deep meaning of producing sludge without staining.

Although I don't know much about lotus flowers, I praise lotus seeds from the bottom of my heart. Because the lotus seed has a strong vitality, even if it sleeps for thousands of years, as long as there is suitable water and soil, it will bloom and sprout, and the leaves will be green and red.

Where there is water, there are many lotus flowers. In the middle of summer, the branches and green stems of the lotus, with their noble and upright posture, stand on the mirror-like water surface; Like the green leaves of the umbrella, a piece of snow like rouge lotus flowers suddenly appeared, which is a peculiar pink color, white with pink, pink in the red. The budding flowers always have a feeling of wanting to say and be ashamed, which makes people happy when they see it.

Where there is a lotus, there must be a lotus. Just as the lotus blooms when it blooms, the lotus seeds will mature when the lotus withers. At this time, the lotus seed is simple and unpretentious, with a humble and gentlemanly demeanor, firmly sticking to the black and hard shell, protecting the lotus heart that is ready to go green.

In that "the green trees are thick and the summer days are long, and the buildings are reflected in the pond", it is also the day when the lotus flowers bloom the most prosperous, and the Southern Song Dynasty poet Yang Wanli, who is good at singing about the lotus, sees: "The lotus is still sad and hot in the twilight, and the low side is hidden in the blue umbrella"; However, the scenery seen in the eyes of Zhu Yizun of the Qing Dynasty was the opposite: "A few bursts of cool hair turning white leaves, continuous showers jumping pearl green."

In any case, the lotus flower gives the poet a much deeper meaning than its meaning as a plant itself; If not, how can people use it as a symbol of elegance and purity?!

In the pond, the water surface is covered with green lotus leaves, like a dense jade umbrella, covering the water surface tightly. The green lotus leaves are rolling with glowing dewdrops, and the morning breeze sends a faint lotus fragrance, which blows through like layers of green waves, like pieces of jade.

Soon after, the buds came out of the sludge, looking at the buds waiting to be released, some stood proudly on the branches, some hidden under the leaves, they all patiently waited for the roots to be fed, the leaves were nurtured, and they were always looking forward to the day when they would get ahead.

The flowers are blooming, the emerald green lotus leaves are from it, a branch is slim and elegant, the tender Xin condensing beads, the fragrant lotus flowers, like a shy girl, the face is crimson, smiling slightly, which reminds people: the lotus leaves are infinitely green, and the lotus flowers are different red.

Thanks, do you think all she left behind is the memories in people's minds? No, she left behind a lotus pod.

Behold, the lotus is like a little bowl full of rare things, which shakes gently with the wind, as if it were showing off themselves proudly.

The lotus flower is not as graceful and luxurious as the peony, not as cold as the plum blossom, nor as small and delicate as the orchid, however, she silently disperses the fragrance of the scorching heat and sends a trace of coolness.

I love the lotus flower, I love her pavilion.

Composition is a way of turning your mind into words. In this essay, I revealed one of the biggest problems, that is, it is divorced from reality. In fact, composition is not a burden of language, not a deliberate pursuit, not a crude imitation, but a flower watered with the heart.

She may be unpretentious, but she is the epitome of life; She may be ordinary, but she is a portrayal of my heart; She may be imaginary, but full of vision for the future. Writing doesn't need to be embellished with beautiful language, it doesn't need to be accentuated by great examples. Plain is true.

It's really moving.

In the future, I want to get rid of the mistake of flashy composition. Good at reading, good picking, good at memorizing, good at viewing, good feeling, good at reforming, we must grasp a detail in life, write it in detail, and write out the true feelings. If demeanor can express people's hearts, why can't words?

I will remember: I write my heart by hand!

Because I don't have your essay, I can only write like this, hand-beaten, begging for adoption! Thank you).

It is recommended that the landlord expose his own composition, so that he can write comments in a targeted manner.

I think the beginning of this article is very good, and it kind of makes people feel bright, but the more I look down, the more I feel that I am not interested.

There are a few main problems, first of all, I feel that there are more examples to describe, with your subject matter, it is best to describe two examples, like I think the first and second cases can be written in detail, as for arranging your own time, it seems to have no meaning, it has nothing to do with the theme of courage, if you can't even arrange your own time, what courage do you write, this paragraph is more redundant.

There is also a fourth case, the previous description is more vivid, the description of the bad environment and psychology is more thoughtful, but in the end, she held back a sentence and hastily did something," she was stunned, nodded, and extinguished the cigarette. A lot of people stopped coughing, and it seemed that the air in the car was much better ......This sentence is too different from the description at the beginning, too brief.

There is also a sense of ambiguity at the end, compared to the grandeur of the beginning, the ending seems cold, and it is recommended to use rhetoric and the like.

Write the whole story, and write more feelings and so on at the end.

There are a few main problems, first of all, I feel that there are more examples to describe, with your subject matter, it is best to describe two examples, like I think the first and second cases can be written in detail, as for arranging your own time, it seems to have no meaning, it has nothing to do with the theme of courage, if you can't even arrange your own time, what courage do you write, this paragraph is more redundant.

The author uses action and language to describe the moving story between a kind deaf grandfather and a well-behaved blind girl.

In addition, the delicate description of psychological activities is used in many places, vividly reflecting his deep feelings for the two strangers, and writing from the side that the moving sound of the piano inspires and motivates him, spurring his steps forward.

The ability to use environmental descriptions many times is another highlight of this article, and it is also the main clue to the development of the story.

A lot of relatively ornate rhetoric is added to the simple content, which is just right to blend the beauty of the environment and the sound of the piano.

However, the main thrust of the article does not seem to be clear enough, and it directly points out the revelation to himself, but it is not profound enough. You could add a personal experience of yourself to shed more light on this.

Overall, it's a good work.

1. First of all, whether the central idea is prominent; 2. Talk about the story or argue whether the reasoning is appropriate; 3. Re-evaluate whether the language is fluent and vivid, and how well the rhetoric is used; 4. Finally, you can add your views on life, the events you describe, or suggestions for the author's future writing. Be concise, short and precise.

The theme is well established, the emotions to be expressed are vividly reflected, and the sentences are smooth. Not bad!