Evaluate the poem, and the shortcomings and shortcomings are raised

You're forcing the rhyme, and the poem itself can be written.

I think the most important thing in modern poetry is feelings.

What we care about today is whether poetry moves me, not whether I move poetry like this.

There is also artistic conception, but also simple.

Simplicity is beauty, and beauty is artistic conception.

Don't try to rhyme too hard so that you'll have a better time.

Don't be angry, it's really not good.

Don't go back to the house. The color of the flower is soft, and the butterfly love has no care. Unintentionally, I heard the warbler again, and I was sad and clear, and I talked to each other?

Pillow embroidered mandarin ducks happy together. Sleepless in the middle of the night, tears like stars. The cold moon remnants of the light and sparse the willow trees, and the infatuation is difficult to return to when you are sick.

1.Shang Rong: The color is soft, and the butterfly loves without care.

According to common sense, butterflies don't care about you.

2.Unintentionally, I heard the warbler again, how much sorrow to confide? This sentence is not well connected with the previous sentence.

3.Sleepless in the middle of the night, tears like stars.

Are you Daiyu's reincarnation Bibei? Daiyu doesn't have so many tears!

4.The cold moon remnants of the light and sparse the willow trees, and the infatuation is difficult to return to when you are sick.

The last sentence of the most famous is too abrupt, and it is not very coherent with the above.

There are a lot of problems on the level, it is recommended to proofread it carefully, and the jaw joint wants to fight, you don't have it, it is recommended to change the battle.

Poetically it feels a bit messy,"The fortification is indestructible for a long time"I don't quite understand what "monthly long" means. "The tiger-faced wolf's heart fights on the battlefield.

What do you want to express in the sentence "finch liver and rat gall to the north"? Although the poem "One Inch of Cold Iron Shines on the Spring and Autumn Period" is bleak as a whole, as a military poem, your "one inch" is also a little childish, and I don't know what your "one inch of cold iron" means. The wording in many places is also up for debate, although it is an ancient style poem, but some places still give people a half-literary feeling.

It is recommended to read more ancient texts to increase your accumulation.

What do you want to mean? It is suggested to say it another way.

An inch of cold iron shines on spring and autumn An inch of cold iron reflects spring and autumn Cold and smooth weapons are like a screen reflecting history.

Personally, I don't think even the rhyme of a plural sentence is very good. But it's good to be able to write ancient poems, and you can write them well with more practice.

Poetry, also known as poetry, is a literary genre that uses highly condensed language to vividly express the author's rich emotions, reflect social life in a concentrated way, and have a certain rhythm and rhyme.

Poetry is the ancestor of literature and the root of art. Poetry is a literary genre that expounds the soul, and poets need to master mature artistic skills, and according to the requirements of certain syllables, tones and rhymes, use concise language, abundant emotions and rich imagery to express social life and the human spiritual world in a highly concentrated manner.

The above is the definition of poetry in general. As can be seen from the above definition, it requires rhyme, that is, the beauty of sound, which can be a sense of musicality formed by silent recitation in your mind, or it can be recited aloud. Obviously, what you write doesn't quite fit the definition of poetry.

It's obviously a prose, so why should it be called a poem?

Let me talk about my understanding of poetry, this art form is a combination of literature and **, mainly to express emotions, it is different from ** and drama, belongs to a literary form, and the difference with prose lies in its combination with **, such as Pingxuan, such as rhyme, modern poetry generally only rhymes, a little better will care about the arrangement of words, and a better point may have some undulating arrangements, such as "Farewell Kangqiao", But there are too few modern poems that really take into account the beauty of tonal changes, and the reason why there are fewer people writing ancient metrical poems may be because of ......Many modern readers, the vocabulary is too poor, a little restriction can not hold out, but also the name of the rhythm to limit the content, in fact, the rhythm is the bridge between art and literary art, will create 1 + 1 greater than 2 artistic effect, why don't you see those ancient poets were limited by the rhythm to death? In fact, it is precisely because of the existence of Gelu that they created the glory of Tang and Song poetry.

You don't write poetry, so why say it's poetry? In fact, the rhythm is just such a thing, and learning it is also good for writing modern poetry.

Your poem is a bit long, out of its original meaning, much like a piece of prose. The theme is a little unclear, how can there be a unit place? From the scenery to the people, to the people's thoughts to the place, and then to the future, it's a bit chaotic.

To write poetry, you must study carefully with the teacher, yes.

Make five words, bai seven words, there are rhythmic poems, du quatrains, there are word cards, and there are zhi oil poems. Writing poems pays attention to the pressure of the rhyme, which is easy to read and sounds poetic. To write poems, you must study carefully with the teacher, there are five words, seven words, rhythmic poems, quatrains, word cards, and limerick poems.

Writing poems pays attention to the pressure rhyme, which is smooth to read and sounds poetic. To write poems, you must study carefully with the teacher, there are five words, seven words, rhythmic poems, quatrains, word cards, and limerick poems. Writing poems pays attention to the pressure rhyme, which is smooth to read and sounds poetic.

Not like poetry, but like prose. The theme is also unclear and messy, and it is not enough to be a poem in short.

After reading it, I really feel as if I have entered the poetry of a dream, which describes a relationship experience, and has a strong autumn beauty.

Modern poetry, written not bad, but should be put"Industrial and Commercial Bank of China"Just change it.

With all due respect, this poem of yours was copied from **, and the east and west sentences can't be connected. At first, it was okay as if she was describing a woman, but then it changed again, haha, I really don't dare to compliment, study hard.

Poetry requires concise language and rich connotations expressed with a minimum of words.

Oh, you're writing a bit verbose, it's too long, it doesn't seem to be lyrical, we get up early, it feels like prose, not like ordinary poetry.

Forgive sins, sir's literary talent is as high as the sky! I just want to say: so talented!

It's so well written, I can't write a word.

It's like prose, but it's good, and Lang reads it very well.

The words are beautiful but a little long.

In fact, it doesn't have to be written as a poem, it is a very infectious prose.

I just wrote a poem, what are the advantages and disadvantages of this poem?

You're awesome, you seem to be a writer.

When we are running and having fun, they are working hard and giving silently.

For our happiness, but who knows.

But they didn't complain.

When we are exhausted, their big hands hold up a piece of the sky for us, and we are no longer tired.

But who knows, they are exhausted by this time.

The advantages are that the subject matter chosen is good, and the emotions you want to express are relatively clear.

Disadvantages: The word order is not well arranged, and two characters are written in the poem, which overlap somewhat. At the same time, some of the words are too direct, which spoils the overall feeling of the poem.

The second point is that the description is not detailed enough, the poem, whether it is bold or graceful or hazy, must give the reader a detailed picture, you can add a little description of the singer's appearance or action, such as a good guitar, too broad, not professional.

Appreciation of Xin Qiji's "Qingpingle Village Residence".

Original] Qingping Le Village Residence - [Song] Xin abandoned the disease.

The thatched eaves are low, and the grass is green on the stream. Wu Yin is good in drunk, and the white-haired man is a woman.

The eldest child hoes the beans in the east of Xidong, and the middle child is weaving chicken coops. The favorite child scoundrel, the head of the stream lies on the lotus bed.

Appreciation] The author Xin Qiji was ostracized and attacked by the peace faction in his later years, and his ambition was not stretched, and he was written when he was living in the countryside in the Shangrao area, and the lyrics described the peaceful, quiet, simple and comfortable life in the countryside, which cannot be said to be the author's whitewash of reality. Judging from the author's lifelong concern for the restoration of the Song Dynasty, he longed for such a rural life, which would further arouse his patriotic enthusiasm to resist the Jin soldiers, recover the Central Plains, and unify the motherland. As far as the situation at that time is concerned, this kind of peaceful and quiet life also existed in the villages far away from the anti-gold front, and this work is not the product of the author's subjective imagination, but a reflection of real life.

This is a famous poem describing rural pastoral life. Through the description of the fresh, beautiful, simple and tranquil environment of the countryside and the portrayal of the three sons of "Weng Yuan", the work expresses the poet's yearning and love for the comfortable and quiet rural life.

The work is divided into two parts.

Shang Rong wrote about the scene of two old peasant couples drinking and chatting under the eaves.

The beginning of the work presents a fresh and bright environment full of pastoral colors, a low thatched house, next to a gurgling stream, and the bank of the stream is also covered with green grass. The environment is elegant and tranquil, which makes people want to go.

Drunk Wu Yin is good, who is white-haired", the next part of the work is written about the owner of the house, an old couple with white hair, who just drank a little wine, and sat together affectionately chatting about family life. Warm, pleasant, full of harmony and happiness.

The next inscription describes the different situations of the old man's three sons. It is a family full of happiness and joy. Here, the author uses the technique of white sketching, directly writing the different images of the three sons.

The eldest son is hoeing in the field, and the second son is weaving chicken coops at home; The third son is young and naughty, he only knows how to play, and that play also has its own unique characteristics, lying on the edge of the stream to peel lotus pods and eat. From the short text, we seem to see the green crops on both sides of the stream, the flocks of chickens pecking at insects in the grass, the large lotus pond at the head of the stream, and the lotus leaves in the fields. The scene is fresh, the characters are distinct, and it is full of rich pastoral fun.

On the one hand, the work is good at grasping the characteristics of rural life and describing the environment and characters, which is natural and vivid, and the style is simple. On the other hand, there is a simple language and concise white drawing techniques. Although the work has little pen and ink, it can achieve beautiful and clear scenes of rural life, and the characters are vivid, natural, vivid, lively, and full of strong local flavor.

This is inseparable from the author's long-term experience of folk customs in rural life.

"Untitled: It's Difficult to Say Goodbye When We Meet" by Tang Li Shangyin.

It is difficult to say goodbye when we meet, and the east wind is powerless.

The spring silkworm is dead to the end, and the wax torch turns to ash and tears begin to dry. Xiaojing but the clouds and temples have changed, and the night chant should feel the cold moonlight. There is no way to go to Pengshan, and the blue bird is diligent to visit.

This poem expresses the psychology of love in a woman's voice, in the midst of sorrow and pain, it contains burning longing and perseverance, and the emotional realm is deep and subtle, extremely rich.